OOC for "Thin Line"

[BLACK BART]

This would be the place to put your comments and critiques for the thread Why and I will be joining together with.

We've spent a lot of time working out plots and subplots, seems I may have met my match in a person who loves the twists and turns in writing a story like this as much as I do.

I'm impressed.

Anyhow. If you choose to read the story, please enjoy and post your thoughts here.

Thanks!

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Mortal character. Eric Von Bruin,

6 foot and broad shoulders, blue eyes, tanned complexion…looks like the soccer star wanted to be, but now the pilot of the great ship he lives on. He has overheard statements; made it his point to be nosey and delve into false cargo manifests…all possible because of his station and long running friendship with the captain and current crew.

He walks and runs with the slightest of limps and if a person rises early enough each day and joins him in his “jog” the reason is seen. If brought up he refuses to speak of it, if pressed he lapses into German…. and then will apologize and return to his normal courteous and controlled manner.

Immortal…”Marcus” a quiet little fellow, dark, straight hair dangles over eyes dancing with amusement, cheeks pale and showing little emotion, a body that is usually still, motion for him is a wasted thing when he can do it all with his mind…bored and caustic he has a scathing sense of humor and often belittles the action of those around him…a soft spot he has for the defenseless…an Achilles heel that has brought him trouble more than once in the past…

 

[Why]

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[BLACK BART]

Here is to the twists and turns of the plot, may we not get lost...

It has been fun so far and will be a lot more in the days to come.... Thanks Black Bart for the chance to write this.

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It's been my pleasure as well as we tossed ideas back and forth Why, and has great promise for the future as well

Thank You