One That Caught My Eye

[longlegs]

A Very Descriptive Poem with Passion

The Imp
by SirGalahad67 ©
(Dedicated to Myst)

So Lilith must have seemed
To Adam, in the days
Before Eve.
A dark, dazzling star
Who out burns all the others
She presents
An impish style
Characterized
By elfin grace.
Dark tresses
Frame a sultry face.
A wicked mind
A kind heart
Intertwined
Like Aphrodite
Rising from the waves
A work of art.
Cruel
Tender
Wanton
Innocent
Bold
Shy
Lithe
Voluptuous
Seductive
Childlike
Is she a cold drink of water
In the heart’s blazing desert?
Or is she
The very heart of the desert itself?
Fierce, burning, insatiable
Yet, also
Cool, forgiving, life-sustaining.
If I dared
I would go down
And plumb
Her secret passionate depths
But beware.
Those who brave her beautiful mystery
Forever lose
A piece of their heart.


What I really like about this poem is the descriptions. The desire to figure out the passion/attraction, realizing the depth of the lure.

SirGalahad67, you have a very descriptive way of writing, please come check out this discussion/group...Longlegs

 

[riff]

I like this too. If I were to offer any criticism, it would be to shorten it, but this reflects my tastes, not the poem.

The lineation is great. This is something I have always felt very important.