Okay...tell me what you think!

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I read both your stories. In the first one, the office scene seemed a bit off to me. I found it unreal. Does that kind of thing happen? In front of everyone?

You described Diane as "Always business-like and keeping the other girls in line" so I was left wondering what happened to make her do what she did.

What was Angel and Micheal's relationship about?? I don't think the majority of the readers like to be left wondering about something after the story.

errr... Angel. The name is in KM's list of names to avoid.

It was a nice story, but left me feeling confused in the end.

A problem in the second story:
"Would you shut up, anyway? Didn't you hear me to shut up?"

I think what you meant was: "Would you shut up, anyway? Didn't you hear me telling you to shut up?"

This one was better than the first one. I like very short stories, so I liked them. Good work, keep writing.

-DP.

 

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