Ok, let's check it...:rose: Icecream ;)

[echoes_s]

Ice cream

tongue curls
instant cool curved
on the tip
a slow slip
down
tantalizing sweet greet
of taste buds and ice cream

close of lips
and swoosh
swirling sugared rush
now heated hush
of mind
syrup high
begging not enough


head tilted back
no one knows
as it flows sensually
to back of my throat
thinking naughty thoughts
wicked grin
drinking in sin

for YDD
your request…

 

[echoes_s]

I should say please, but seems I am always saying that
well, you know, wouldn't want to come off as a wuss or nothing



edit to say sometimes I am really stupid ...

...then to say I hope I have confused somebody else too

 

[minsue]

...then to say I hope I have confused somebody else too

Well, I for one am completely confused, but that's a normal state.

It's good to see you smiling face here again, echoes.

 

[echoes_s]

You know, if I have never told you thank you, it is because I thank you...
wonderful people
exquisit thoughts
fullsome hearts
lots of love
lush kisses

 

[echoes_s]

Oh definately help me!


I am going past sappy....

 

[OT]

mostly all good. Nice fun flow. Maybe trim a word or two:
for example, delete [and ice cream] in the first stanza.

I'd make the last stanza more subtle.
Maybe delete [sensually] (over used word)
or maybe leave it and delete the line
[thinking naughty thoughts]

Now you did it, I'm hungry.

 

[echoes_s]

Ice cream

tongue curls
instant cool curved
on the tip
a slow slip
down
tantalizing sweet greet
of taste buds and ice cream

close of lips
and swoosh
swirling sugared rush
now heated hush
of mind
syrup high
begging not enough


head tilted back
no one knows
as it flows sensually
to back of my throat
thinking naughty thoughts
wicked grin
drinking in sin

for YDD
your request…

Ice cream

tongue curls
instant cool curved
on the tip
a slow slip
down
tantalizing sweet greet
of taste buds

close of lips
and swoosh
swirling sugared rush
now heated hush
of mind
syrup high
begging not enough


head tilted back
only you know
why it flows
to back of my throat
wicked grin
drinking in sin

for YDD
your request…

 

[echoes_s]

Thanks OT.
Supper or midnight snack?