Not sure how to build this scene up: MIL becomes wife

[LongDraw]

So this is part of a scene in my novel VY where the mother-in-law (Beverly) needs to marry her son-in-law (Braedon) to get health coverage and needs his curative semen to treat her cervical cancer and skin cancer on her breast.
I'd appreciate any thoughts and suggestions as I work on building up this scene today. Thank you in advance.

Half frozen with nervousness at the prospect of having sex with her son-in-law, nay, he’s her lawful husband now, Beverly tells him that she needs him to put his white stuff as far up in her mommy place and then anything he has left after that needs to go on her breast, she points to where the skin cancer discoloration is.

Seeing as how Beverly had moved to House Owens as a visitor technically, she hadn't been obligated to comply with the House laws, such as the nudist dress code. That would now be among the first of several difficult changes that she would now have to accept as her new reality. Also of concern to her is that Beverly was pretty sure that she had already entered menopause, which could be a problem with the ICPD administrator telling her she would have to make "legitimate" effort to give Braedon children. Should she roll the dice and hope her cancers are eliminated before they discover she is infertile? All she knew for certain is that she was moments away from crossing that age old line that every mother-in-law knows is strictly forbidden to cross. You don't screw your daughter's husband… her husband?

The mom takes Braedon’s hand and turns him back to the bed and they both climb back on. She asks if she can lay on her back with a pillow under her hips this first time, to which Braedon is happy to comply with. The two start having sex, Braedon goes as fast as he can to give her the cum in her pussy and a second covering of cum on her breast. The mom tells him she is going to lay in this position, but he is free to use the other side of the bed if he wants to finish with Shelly.

 

[8letters]

Have you considering putting this series into I/T? I'd think a relationship with a mother-in-law would fit better there. I'd now how I'd write it for an I/T story, but not for a Loving Wives story.

And this post would probably better fit in the AH instead of his forum as it's about a story you're writing as opposed to a story you've published.

 

[LongDraw]

I'm actually in the process of completing this chapter of the novel, so it hasn't been published yet. I do see how you would expect it in the I/T category, but the over arching theme of the novel is Loving Wives.