Non-erotic short story review request

[StarInShadows]

Hi!

I wrote this short story as my final for a fiction writing class, so it's not erotic. I got an A on it but I was hoping for some more opinions/critiques.

Ok, I realize that makes me sound like a teenager, but it was a college course and I'm 32. ;-)

Letting Go, StarInShadows

Thanks,

~Star

 

[driphoney]

You might want to request to be added to the Story Discussion Queue over on the Story Discussion Circle Forum. Just go to the sticky at the top of the forum and ask CrimsonMaiden to be added. You will need to pick only one story.