Non-Consent Story Needing Edit

[champagne1982]

Hi all,

This is my first attempt at a non-consent story and actually this tale is a portion of a chapter within a novel I'm working on (yes, my cut off and shortened Nano project).

I have about 2400 words in Word Perfect.

My spell checker detects no American-English errors.

I don't trust the Grammar check all the time but I have everything virtually cleared up.

The readability stats: Comparison document - Hemingway short story

Flesch-Kincaid grade level:
my story - 6.32
Hemingway - 4

Passive voice(% of finite verb phrases):
my story - 2
Hemingway - 3

Sentence complexity (100 = very):
my story - 35
Hemingway - 14

Vocabulary complexity (100 = very):
my story - 10
Hemingway - 5

I'm really looking forward to working with someone on this.

 

[snooper]

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[champagne1982]

Standard Boredom with assumptions.

Haven't you read the sticky?

edited to add: I've found a couple of people willing to look at the story. Thanks for the thread space.