Non-con help.

[sister jenny]

I know there are a lot of threads about this. But I am trying anyway.

I need to see if I can save a story or if I just went too far and need to trash it and move on.

It's pretty extreme, lots of force and violence and choking and stuff like that. And I know that non-con is a hard subject and you need to walk a fine line. But I really thought I made sure to constantly point out that she was starting to love it and in the second half she loves all of it.
But I got rejected so it was obviously not enough. And that of course is on me.

Could someone read it and see if it is worth fixing, or just too damn rapey?

Please, do not offer if you do not like this kind of story or stuff.
It is also pretty long at 10 000 words.

And please, I am not a great writer so don't worry about that part, I know my limitations. I just wanna know if it is fixable to get published, and maybe what to do.

Anyway feel free to totally ignore this post.

 

[calmlikeabomb]

Hi, I would be up for it. I wrote something similar a while ago (but haven't published it on Lit), so I can relate. I've also been a semi professional editor in the past, and worked with a few authors on Lit who deal with heavy BDSM and non-con, in case that helps.

 

[sister jenny]

Sure, I will give it a reading. hope you also read my stories. oh and for what you say, your story has not gone too far, my only advice would be for you to unleash your deepest fantasies and desires on that story.

Thank you!
Well it got rejected for being too much force I think, so unleashing my deepest desires was too much haha.

 

[JudyOfOregon]

love ya, thanks. do either of you know a good published story that touches this extreme? can you post a link? thx

 

[NotWise]

Thank you!
Well it got rejected for being too much force I think, so unleashing my deepest desires was too much haha.

You think? The rejection should have come with a fairly generic explanation of why. It would be a shame if you took a lot of time fixing the wrong thing and lost what you wanted to write.

 

[sister jenny]

You think? The rejection should have come with a fairly generic explanation of why. It would be a shame if you took a lot of time fixing the wrong thing and lost what you wanted to write.

It did, and I have now worked on it a but and sent it back in.
Let's see what happens.

 

[AG31]

A number of my stories are "non-con." I'd be interested to see what got rejected, but if you've already fixed and re-submitted (did I get that right?) I guess I'm too late. I'd love to see the original and then the fixed versions.

 

[Britva415]

some moderators are just...

There's exactly one story approver.

 

[Britva415]

If you ask me... I would approve all stories, mainly because we should be free to at least think and imagine all we want...

You are free to think and imagine. Nobody's thought-policing you, they're just not obligated to publish anything.