no voting, please help?

[suckandfuck]

I have had this story up for months now and it has only 7 votes but other stories of mine have been up for not as long and have 20 +votes. why are ppl not reading this one story? If anyone could give me some feedback or at least a vote i will love you

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=274224

SnF

 

[Darkniciad]

I was going to say it was the Celebrity cat, which doesn't get much traffic, but I see that all your stories are there, so that's not the problem.

That brings us down to slow reading days. It came out on a Wednesday, which usually isn't all that bad. Sunday is really the only horrible day of the week for readership. This was before the Halloween contest, so that wouldn't have been drawing away readers. It was too deep into the month to be hit by Labor Day.

The only thing I can guess is that it was one of those days where everything should be in place for a decent readership pool - but it simply didn't materialize. Reading the story now ( I'll vote in a min or two, I like the heat, which is obviously what you're aiming for ) I don't see any major issues that would turn people away who voted on your other work. I'm assuming the style and amount of sex are about the same as your other stories, which picked up more votes.

I'd say this one was simply a victim of bad luck, from what I'm reading, and what you've mentioned.

Anyhow, I like the heat of the story, but I know little to nothing about CA, so I can't comment on the aspects linking it to the show. I see a couple of little issues here and there...

"He stick out his tongue" , instead of "stuck out his tongue"
A bit of repetitive word choice
A few too many adjetives and adverbs for my tastes
Ticking off the "inches" ( doesn't bother me, but turns off many readers )
Could use commas in several places to increase readibility.

I'm assuming that your style is consistant through all the stories, however, so that can't be the issue with this story's vote deficiency. Might want to think about a few of those mentions as you move into new works, however.

Read other stories on the site, and pick up a few new terms that will fit with your style. I think "Wet Heat" would be a nice addition for you, as it mixes things up, while still not sounding too "romance novel" A little reading can probably find you quite a few more to pump up your sex vocabulary.

You get a five for heat, which is really the main criteria in a stroker - one closer to that magical 10 votes

 

[starrkers]

It's a fickle readership in Celebrities - I have two (well three if you count the one that went up yesterday) stories there, same subject. One has 15 votes. The other has 6.

 

[suckandfuck]

Thank you for your reply and vote

 

[starrkers]

Had a chance to read it now. Don't really know Charlie's Angels that well, but it was a good read.
Another vote closer to the magical 10