No-no subjects?

[Randi Grail]

There are things you can't write stories about and post on Lit, like underage stuff. How about poems? I mean of course not not as erotic poetry.

Could this offend, or would it pass through?

Fiona

hey mister, dance
like you did before
like yesterday in holy heat
of summer afternoon
sun, señoritas, and sangria
fuelled fantastic, frentic

immortal, all man
conquerer casanova

hey mister, say it
say it once again
all those powerful pretty little lies
that makes the pretty little
giggly things in their
summer short pretty little things
swoon and flutter beneath your voice

hey
mister

tell us how

how you sweet talked
wooed, winked, sang
swirled those feet like magic

stirred the lemonade
with your pocket stash
clear liquid fire, almost tasteless
in the right doses

for her

remember her?

all sweet, all smiles
nigthengale laugh, ponytail on the side
and big, beautiful hazel brown eyes

dancing with the grown-ups
for the very first time

she has a name
do you even know it?

did you ask
when you swooped her slender frame
and let her bask in adult attention
and a reassuring smile

under lantern light
in incoming night
and carried her, drunken drowsy
stunned silent by surprise
until escorted out if sight

and still
she didn't realise
you'd stake that claim
and shatter a world harbored holy
in a too young heart

hey mister, tell us why
lost in lust, rioja high
you didn't care
or couldn't hear
her cry

 

[tarablackwood22]

Randi, that shouldn't bother anybody....it sure doesn't bother me......I think it's right on!


escape from misery -new poem....please read.

 

[Angeline]

It's an excellent poem. I'd have no problem submitting it--it's certainly not condoning anything illegal. And to my thinking something so sad shouldn't be swept under the carpet...

 

[Guest]

There are things you can't write stories about and post on Lit, like underage stuff. How about poems? I mean of course not not as erotic poetry.

Could this offend, or would it pass through?

I agree with the others - it's a good poem, Randi.

If this was accepted yours will surely be.


edited to add be prepared for some hate PMs etc.