nextdoor wife

[Guest]

how about a story about a happly married white wife who agrees to baby sit her black next door neighbor's young boy. the young boys brother comes home to find the wife over his house, looking after his brother. he cant resist his urges and forces himself onto the wife.

 

[Monazwx]

Personally, I don't like the forcing himself on her part.
Maybe there can be an attraction that they both feel,
and he seduces her (or she seduces him) and they have
wild and passionate sex.

Sounds like a good storyline though.

 

[Shaq]

Or you could state that the husband no longer loves the wife and wants to divorce her. But the only way he can divorce her and not give her half of his estate is for him to have proof that she cheated on him.

The neighbor owes the husband a favor so the sons are used to seduce the wife...

 

[MsLinnet]

Personally, I don't like the forcing himself on her part.
Maybe there can be an attraction that they both feel,
and he seduces her (or she seduces him) and they have
wild and passionate sex.

Sounds like a good storyline though.

love this idea better.

Love Linnet

 

[Chicklet]

Or you could state that the husband no longer loves the wife and wants to divorce her. But the only way he can divorce her and not give her half of his estate is for him to have proof that she cheated on him.

The neighbor owes the husband a favor so the sons are used to seduce the wife...

Yes, very nice.

Rape, or not? The son comes home and tries to seduce the wife, and she sort of plays along. She flirts back with him, but won't go any further when urged a little bit. The boy *does* force himself, but only after it's established that she'd enjoy it if he did.

 

[fanzee1]

i really like shaq's idea too. But then, the whole notion of the black guy not being able to control his urges politicizes things for me. And you KNOW that kills the mood.

But shaq, your idea sounds great. Potential for a real hot one there.

 

[Tatewaki]

i really like shaq's idea too. But then, the whole notion of the black guy not being able to control his urges politicizes things for me. And you KNOW that kills the mood.

But shaq, your idea sounds great. Potential for a real hot one there.

So don't make it about a black guy who can't control his urges. Make it about a guy who can't control his urges who happens to be black.

I'm not being funny, here. If the skin colour is stated once or implied in the action it will not have as much prominence or importance in the story. When I write stories meant to be classified in the Interracial category, I pack it full of chocolate, like a Chips Ahoy cookie. In these tales, the colour differences IS the most important thing, so I present it as such. He doesn't run fingers through her hair, strong black fingers rake through her flaxen tresses. A dark hand cuts a swath over her alabaster flesh. Bright white teeth gleam in his dark face. His deep-brown figure cuts across her spread, pale body like a shadow does a snowfield at noon.

To truly dis a race the comparisons wouldn't be this neutral. There you have angry brown eyes, pitiless black hearts as dark as their skins, kinky black hair, prominent bulging foreheads and the like. Comparisons made to dehumanize and vilify the black man.

Am I making any sense at all?

-T

 

[fanzee1]

So don't make it about a black guy who can't control his urges. Make it about a guy who can't control his urges who happens to be black.

I'm not being funny, here. If the skin colour is stated once or implied in the action it will not have as much prominence or importance in the story. When I write stories meant to be classified in the Interracial category, I pack it full of chocolate, like a Chips Ahoy cookie. In these tales, the colour differences IS the most important thing, so I present it as such. He doesn't run fingers through her hair, strong black fingers rake through her flaxen tresses. A dark hand cuts a swath over her alabaster flesh. Bright white teeth gleam in his dark face. His deep-brown figure cuts across her spread, pale body like a shadow does a snowfield at noon.

To truly dis a race the comparisons wouldn't be this neutral. There you have angry brown eyes, pitiless black hearts as dark as their skins, kinky black hair, prominent bulging foreheads and the like. Comparisons made to dehumanize and vilify the black man.

Am I making any sense at all?

-T

sure you are. i know what you mean. Doing what you say makes it a different story though, from the one the guy brought up to start this thread. For reasons you point out in your post. I may attempt the story shaq brought up at some point and if i do, then physical descriptions of the character in the story who is black will show up when required, they won't be all over the place just because i would be uncomfortable writing that type of story. Plus, there is plenty of interracial-themed stuff out there. Writing multicultural erotica that includes many ethnic groups but builds themes around none would be much more original.

Thanks tate.

 

[penguindance]

 

[Tatewaki]

sure you are. i know what you mean. <SNIP!> Writing multicultural erotica that includes many ethnic groups but builds themes around none would be much more original.

Thanks tate.

Anytime. Do yourself a favour and if you do decide to post on Lit, post it under ANYWHERE else than Interracial. Stories there get shredded unless you have such a large following that you can get 100+ votes in the first 24 hours. Otherwise, the serious amount of 1s you'll get from our semi-literate KKK readers (Unregistered, or course!) will snuff your story like a candle in high wind.

Get ready for lots of fun hate mail, too. I love writing stories about black men and Japanese women. I got to read some fun stuff from those who hated both niggers AND gooks.

Cool, no?

Also, by placing it in categories that emphasize the action or genre and not the participants, you better make the point that a story is hot because of the scorching action between the members of different backgrounds, not solely beacuse they are of differing backgrounds. The ethnic differences bercome the seasoning, not the meal.

-T

 

[fanzee1]

i'd have to do stories that didn't focus on ethnic differences, rather just included them. I'd never feel comfortable writing about mandingo fantasies and the like.

A question for you, tate. I have not posted a story yet but the time is coming, in the next couple of days. Why should i care about what my stories get rated? I mean, yeah, for ego-stroking and all but is there any tangible reason to be concerned about this? Do your stories stay up longer with higher ratings? Can you win a car at the end of the year? What?

 

[Tatewaki]

A question for you, tate. I have not posted a story yet but the time is coming, in the next couple of days. Why should i care about what my stories get rated? I mean, yeah, for ego-stroking and all but is there any tangible reason to be concerned about this? Do your stories stay up longer with higher ratings? Can you win a car at the end of the year? What?

The higher your stories rate, the more people are inclined to read them. A lot of people see a story that rates a 3.0 as shit and a 4.5+ as brilliant. I'm talking about even BEFORE they start reading them. A story of more than 10 votes and a 4.5 average gets a red 'H', for 'Hot.' Often, readers only read these tales. Others look for the 'E' for Editor's Pick.

I write these things and post them here in order for them to be read and commented upon. It is the feedback I like. Unfortunately, I've found that high scores generate feedback. Having your stories in the top 20 (read, easily found amid the thousands of stories here on Lit) make them more accessible which in turn generates more reads, which generate more feedback.

It isn't the kindergarden style gold-star-on-your-homework mindset that drives me. If my stories aren't being read here, I am wasting my time posting them. I'd be better off joining a local writer's group and getting feedback that way.

But no writing group I know of gets 31,000 readers to look over a story. That was the count for my highest rated tale. Even the lowest rated one got 2,000 reads, about 1,980 more than I could garner on my own by passing it around. My numbers are small compared to some other authors here on Lit, but are still gratifying, regardless.

-T

 

[fanzee1]

thanks tate. I wasn't trying to poke fun, it's a question i've wondered about for a while. That clears it up.

The page i have bookmarked at Lit's story index is the one that shows new stories. I always just go there. That's probably why the connection between ratings and readings didn't occur to me.

thanks again.

 

[Tatewaki]

thanks tate. I wasn't trying to poke fun, it's a question i've wondered about for a while. That clears it up.

The page i have bookmarked at Lit's story index is the one that shows new stories. I always just go there. That's probably why the connection between ratings and readings didn't occur to me.

thanks again.

No worries.

-T

 

[Axeltheswede]

What he said

I agree with Tatewaki. The feedback is the reward. In order to get it, you have to get a story read.

I recently passed a small milestone, of sorts. With eleven stories posted, my total reads just went over a collective total of 350K reads. Feedback emails are a daily thing. It is interesting to respond to them.

And those little "H"s next to a story are a real ego boost. It is possible to build a following here. Just like the commercial fiction world, people read authors. It is even possible to post in various categories and have readers follow.

My experience with an interracial story was the opposite of what I expected. Over fifty feedback emails were all positive and interesting. Guess the hate mailers missed me.

 

[Guest]

But then, the whole notion of the black guy not being able to control his urges politicizes things for me. And you KNOW that kills the mood.

I agree, when I stumble across a story that falls on the worn out stereotype of "animal-like" blacks who cannot control their urges and only want to violate innocent white women, I immediatley move on. Stories about real people of whatever race losing control and giving into their hidden and sometimes improper desires are by far more enjoyable to me.

Personally, I like the type of stories where a white wife ends up being seduced by a non white (doesn't always have to be black) man or group of men for a one time fling. She does not always have to become a superslut afterwards, and the men do not have to be superstuds.

Just my 2 cents.

 

[Guest]

... A story of more than 10 votes and a 4.5 average gets a red 'H', for 'Hot.' ...

I wondered what that "H" by my story was. Of course, now I know, it's gone! The 1 brigade have been in.

... It is the feedback I like ...

Originally posted by Axeltheswede
The feedback is the reward.

Yes. 7500 reads, 20 votes, One anonymous abusive feedback. It was the same last time I was registered and posted here.

... is there any tangible reason to be concerned about this?

They tell me there are prizes, but I don't know what. I never vote because i don't know what it means. Are these "Artistic Impression" or Technical Merit" or some combination of the two? Why do 90% of the stories get more than 4.0 as a mark. Why do totally illiterate stories which need a full edit before it is possible to read them get into the "H" class?

 

[Guest]

I wondered what that "H" by my story was. Of course, now I know, it's gone!

Wow, vote number 21 was a 5 because it's back!

 

[JerseyBoy]

Wow, vote number 21 was a 5 because it's back!

You should add a link to your Sig line so we can get to your stories...I dont know WHY there isn't a link automatically in the profile page. It's such a pain to find someones stories...got to go to search members...blah blah blah...Im too lazy

-WS

 

[JerseyBoy]

one other thing....

I still can't make heads or tails of your Av...is that guy peeing on the train?

I'm so confused...

Wow, vote number 21 was a 5 because it's back!

 

[Guest]

Re: one other thing....

...is that guy peeing on the train? ...

No. He's touching her up with an oily rag!


PS. Damn; vote 22 was a 4 so I lost my H again!

 

[MsLinnet]

abusive feedback

I have only had one piece of abusive feedback since I have been using this site and I have a good idea who it was from.

All other feedback has been good and encouraging.

Love Linnet

 

[Axeltheswede]

finding authors

I know I keep repeating this "use the search engine" thing. Indulge me one more time.

The easiest way to check out an author is the search engine. Type in the screen name exactly as it appears here. You will get a chronological list of stories, "H's" and categories included.

When you punch up an author's home page, you get a list of stories in random order. No categories are listed, and no "H's".

If someone finds this info useful, I'm vindicated.

 

[MsLinnet]

Re: Re: one other thing....

No. He's touching her up with an oily rag!


PS. Damn; vote 22 was a 4 so I lost my H again!

You could touch me with your oily rag if you like

love Linnet