Newbie questions.

[ktmatk]

Hello all.

Right now I am trying to write my first erotic story. The the theme is one of an adopted son, mother, and aunt who realize the love they have for one another and take the step to physicalize the love. Right now I have about 1.3 meg of text (microsoft word document) and I have yet to get to the first love scene. So far it has been character developemnt. I have a pretty good out line to follow so I won't stray as I type but I have a feeling that the reader is going to get bored reading the text until the "action" starts. I am just having a hard time just having them jump in bed. I need to put some character background in.

Do you feel this is to much.

Thanks and tips would be appreciated.

 

[Whispersecret]

I'm not sure what 1.3 meg is, so I can't tell you if you have too much intro or not.

Regardless, the truth is that some people will get bored no matter how good your intro is. Some people scroll to the sex and don't even bother reading the beginning. So I'd suggest dismissing those jerk-off junkies and concentrate on the real reader.

The real reader will want a decent introduction because it will give the sex scene more impact. Character development is essential in a good STORY (as opposed to a sexual scene.) However, beware of dumping all the background (including the banal physical descriptions) all at once in paragraph after paragraph of boring narrative. Most beginning writers do this. Instead, choose the point at which the action starts. I'm not talking about the sex. Pick a point where someone's talking or doing something.

Here's a way you could accomplish this. First, write the whole story with the background at the beginning. Then find the place where the background stops. Start the story there instead. Then find ways to dribble in that background information here and there, bits a time. The result will be a much tighter, faster paced story.

Also, "physicalize" isn't a word. If you used it in your story, you might want to consider saying something like, "brought their relationship to a more intimate level," or "took the next step from fantasy to reality."

 

[ktmatk]

Thank you for the information. The part about putting the physical description of the character in the love scenes makes sense.

What I am trying to write a story about is a mother with an adopted son who she directed all here love and affection to after the loss of her husband. She did not devote her life to him rather he was the outlet for her feminim giving. As such he has subconscienly (sp) changed his response to her. He has become not just a son, he has become his mothers companion and she his. They both do not realize this. The Aunt (mothers younger sister) is the pivitol role in them realizing their love. This realalization is of love is made in an independent setting. It is only after this realization that the mother and son will come together.

Neither the mother or son will play the role of seducer. The physical step of their love will occur after they both desire one another. The mother due to her experience will guide a portion of the initial love scene, (son is totally inexperienced in the ways of women and love) but as the join mentaly, emotionally and physically they both become active participants.

There is one scene prior to the mother and son scene that I a debating over.

The mother realized first that she loves her son. The aunt, based upon the mother wondering if her son truly does love her, promts the son to realize his love for his mother in a seperate setting. I have a time delay in the story at that point. The son has to go and finish a task. The aunt is to report back to the mother if her son loves her or not as much as she now understands that she loves him. The time delay is about three hours before the son comes home (I felt I had to build in time for him to really think over how much he loves his mother). Now the aunt is going over to her sisters house to tell her that her son does love her and the depth of love is equal to hers.

The scene.

Aunt and Sister talk about what the sister plans on doing. They talk about the possibility of mother and son making love that night. The aunt then asks her sister what she plans on wearing just incase they do make love. They go over some clothing options. During this the aunt notices that the mother has (by todays displayed images of a vulva) an abundance of pubic hair. She informs her sister that it might be a good idea to shave and trim a little. The mother has never performed this task. The aunt volunteers. The mother accepts...... a lesbian scene between the mother and aunt occurs. The son never becomes aware of the intemacy (sp) the two share until later in the story.

Would this add to or detract from the story with the lesbian scene being this earyl? What I thinking is that I need to build the reader up to the mother and son scene. Have the reader wonder and anticipate this mutal expression of love. I could add it in during a son/aunt scene where the mother consents to sharing her son and becomes aroused to the point she joins them.

Again thank you.

Page count as of date is 28, using a times new roman 12 sized font.

 

[P. B. Walker]

28 pages and no sex scene yet? WOW. That's alot of background... I'm not sure if too many readers will go thru all that to get to a sex scene. Course you may not care about those kind of readers.

One way you could maybe spice it up (i.e., get a few sex scenes in those early pages) is maybe have one of the characters recount a hot steam sex scene in their mind while they are daydreaming or something. That would be one other way of also giving each character a background experience. Just a thought...

- PBW