New Writer Seeks Feedback

[Mark James]

Hi:

I'm not sure if I'm doing this the right way, but here goes:


I'm new to Literotica and I've just posted a fairly long short story. It falls into the category of Gay BDSM. It's posted in the Gay Male category.

I'm posting here because the opportunity to get genuine feedback is a rarity for most writers.

Please be warned, this story is not mainstream, nor is it intended to be. It's a heavy duty S&M story that involves sex between two men.

My goal is to write gay generational stories about powerful men who enjoy making other men their "boys". I basically write about a Daddy and boy kind of relationship. I mean "Daddy" in the sense in which it is used in the world of S&M, not incest. The setting is in a fantasy world. All my slaveboy characters are intended to be at least eighteen years old.

If any of the topics above offend you, DON'T read my story. You won't like it.

However, if you like your stories on the very rough side, please feel free to read it and let me know what you think.

If it's not too much trouble, I'm particularly interested in finding out the answers to questions like, after reading it, did you feel that the characters were given enough depth for you to understand what motivated their actions?

What confused you about the world?

Was the writing itself clear enough to convey the story?

To anyone who takes the time to read it (11,000 words!), thank you in advance.

Again, this story is NOT mainstream. Please do not read it if you are offended by male/male sex or BDSM or discipline or very rough sex.

Here's the link:

http://english.literotica.com/stori...y.php?id=169742

The story name is "Assassins After Dark".


I anticipate participating in discussions mostly on the weekends. If I haven't posted this in the right place, please be so kind as to let me know and I'll amend my posting.

Thanks in advance for your time and support

Mark

 

[TheEarl]

Mark: You have to make this post as a reply to the main Sticky of the forum. Then you critique a couple of other stories and Pure (our driector of traffic) will then put your story up for discussion.

Welcome to the SDC.

The Earl

 

[Mark James]

Thanks!

Thanks Earl, much appreciated.

I'll do that.

 

[canttrustagain]

I was just wondering if there is a way a new author can check a new post to find out if it made it through?

 

[canttrustagain]

I"m a new author and am trying to figure out how does a story get reviewd?

My first story published on Literotica was Anniversary Surprise


My newest submission if it made it through is called Her Affair

i hope to be submiiting more stories in the future

 

[Black Tulip]

If you have questions, go look here:

The Newbie Support Forum

Oh, and welcome.

 

[Pure]

Let's consider this thread closed. Mark to post his 'own' thread, 11-21, as part of the main queue.