erotiklust
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- Dec 1, 2007
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1356 words, so says MS. Bi encounter. Looking for help with grammar, content, ideas to make it better.
Here's the first few paragraphs...
I was late again. I am going to be late to my own funeral - I am planning it that way. Always late to work, fortunately I could usually sneak by the boss’s office. My boyfriend had learned to tell me to be somewhere a half hour earlier than was required. I loved him for it.
But this time, I was on my way to my best friend’s house. We had known each other for about 6 years, met at our kids’ elementary school. Would always stand outside and bullshit while waiting for them to come out. Our kids got along well too, so we would hang out at the park around the corner afterwards some days. Things just progressed from there. We had a lot in common, had grown up with no fathers, & our kids’ fathers had taken off also. What a coincidence.
I arrived on her porch, out of breath and holding her bottle of wine and my 6-pack of Mike’s Hard Lemonade. The kids were with their grandmothers. We couldn’t really afford to go out much, so this was our time off.
Thanks
1356 words, so says MS. Bi encounter. Looking for help with grammar, content, ideas to make it better.
Here's the first few paragraphs...
I was late again. I am going to be late to my own funeral - I am planning it that way. Always late to work, fortunately I could usually sneak by the boss’s office. My boyfriend had learned to tell me to be somewhere a half hour earlier than was required. I loved him for it.
But this time, I was on my way to my best friend’s house. We had known each other for about 6 years, met at our kids’ elementary school. Would always stand outside and bullshit while waiting for them to come out. Our kids got along well too, so we would hang out at the park around the corner afterwards some days. Things just progressed from there. We had a lot in common, had grown up with no fathers, & our kids’ fathers had taken off also. What a coincidence.
I arrived on her porch, out of breath and holding her bottle of wine and my 6-pack of Mike’s Hard Lemonade. The kids were with their grandmothers. We couldn’t really afford to go out much, so this was our time off.
Thanks
