New writer seeking an editor/beta reader for POV/Pacing/Tone!

[PennyThompson]

Hello all!

I'm a new, developing writer. I already published my first two stories in quick succession -- the were written back to back -- and I'm fairly happy with them.

But I'm looking to level up my writing a bit, and would love to have a more experienced writer lend their eyes!

My goal is to write a collection of short (6,000 words or less) semi-episodic stories involving the adventures of a futanari college student.

I want to explore the futanari genre while avoiding some genre elements that I don't care for. The tone I'm aiming for is:

• silly but grounded
• fun and funny
• humane and wholesome
• sexy and sex positive

You could take a look at my first two stories on my profile, to get a sense of what I'm going for: https://www.literotica.com/authors/PennyThompson

I'm trying to develop a more interesting written voice, but I also don't want to go TOO overboard with the silliness, so I'm hoping for an objective perspective! Would anyone here be open to taking a look at my next story and providing some editing feedback? If so, message me privately and I can send you a pre-publication copy!

 

[verseandworse2]

Hello all!

I'm a new, developing writer. I already published my first two stories in quick succession -- the were written back to back -- and I'm fairly happy with them.

But I'm looking to level up my writing a bit, and would love to have a more experienced writer lend their eyes!

My goal is to write a collection of short (6,000 words or less) semi-episodic stories involving the adventures of a futanari college student.

I want to explore the futanari genre while avoiding some genre elements that I don't care for. The tone I'm aiming for is:

• silly but grounded
• fun and funny
• humane and wholesome
• sexy and sex positive

You could take a look at my first two stories on my profile, to get a sense of what I'm going for: https://www.literotica.com/authors/PennyThompson

I'm trying to develop a more interesting written voice, but I also don't want to go TOO overboard with the silliness, so I'm hoping for an objective perspective! Would anyone here be open to taking a look at my next story and providing some editing feedback? If so, message me privately and I can send you a pre-publication copy!

Just saw this. As you know I have read both your stories and commented on them too. At your level of expertise you don't need an editor, that is my sincere opinion. Your descriptions, pacing and more are fine, and will get better the more you write. I say this as one who has been a copy editor for years, and currently work for a think tank editing academic papers . At best, in your second story, in the first few paragraphs, "concentrated" could have been "concerted", but that's the only 'editing' I could think of at first glance. Obviously if I went through it line by line with a toothcomb, I might have moved a few paragraphs around, checked if your description of the doctor's room in the second story was consistent with what you had said in the first, etc. But honestly YOU DO NOT NEED an editor.

Conversely more than half the stories by Indians on this site so badly needed an editor, I'm ashamed as an Indian to read them...

 

[PennyThompson]

Just saw this. As you know I have read both your stories and commented on them too. At your level of expertise you don't need an editor, that is my sincere opinion. Your descriptions, pacing and more are fine, and will get better the more you write. I say this as one who has been a copy editor for years, and currently work for a think tank editing academic papers . At best, in your second story, in the first few paragraphs, "concentrated" could have been "concerted", but that's the only 'editing' I could think of at first glance. Obviously if I went through it line by line with a toothcomb, I might have moved a few paragraphs around, checked if your description of the doctor's room in the second story was consistent with what you had said in the first, etc. But honestly YOU DO NOT NEED an editor.

Aww, well thank you for the encouragement! I've done a bit of writing in my real life, but erotic fiction is an entirely new experience for me, so I appreciate the reassurance!

 

[verseandworse2]

I mean it.

I'm also very new on Literotica, with just 2 submissions so far (they will increase). I would really appreciate it if you read them and sent some feedback. (They are poems, fairly short, won't take 5 minutes.)

https://www.literotica.com/p/lovers-quarrel-a-hinglish-poem and https://www.literotica.com/p/limericks-1-indian-metro-cities