New writer looking for feedback

[cthulhu]

Howdy,
I'm a brand new writer, and I'm hoping for a bit of feedback on my first story. Any comments or critisisims would be greatly appriciated.
The story itself is a pretty straightforward Teacher/Schoolgirl fantasy, but I hope some of you will like it.
Thanks for reading, and heres the link...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=54586

 

[sugargator]

great

ohhh me like
whens the next part?

By the way ...check your very first sentence...its missing a word

 

[cthulhu]

Ahh poop! Your right, only it's the second sentence. Should be high SCHOOL english teacher.
Rats.
Ah well, I'm glad you liked it anyway, and part 2 should be on it's way soon.

 

[sugargator]

well..

Well ya never know
He could be a HIGH teacher... inhale deeply... but i doubted that that was the way you were going...

uh your not a high school teacher are you??
hehe

 

[Guest]

With my spelling? Ha! Hardly.

 

[sugargator]

hehe

True...what was i thinking?!?!

well its good to know

 

[the_bragis]

feedback

One word........winner!

Alex(fem)

 

[cthulhu]

Thank you so much!
I've recieved lots of positive feedback in my email, and it's given me a big chunk of motivation to finish Part 2.
Thanks to everyone for taking the time to write!

 

[cthulhu]

Hi all,
Part 2 is up, at last, and awaiting any feedback you may have to give.
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=55032

 

[sugargator]

oh goodness...so wonderful, I had my b friend read them...he loved them too...letme know when you post stuff and ill go looking for it...

 

[cthulhu]

Thank you Gater! I'm turning into a feedback junky. Is there a better motivation to write than the words of praise from unbiased readers? I think not!
I just now submitted the first part of a brand new story. I'm sure it'll take several days before it's posted, but as soon as it is I'll drop a link here.
Thanks again to all of you who have taken the time to vote or to write me

 

[Dolma Kalem]

Those are really good, cthulhu. I enjoyed them. Easy to read, and very sexy.

You're off to a flyer!

 

[cthulhu]

OK, part one of Audry's Punishment is up and ready for any gentle reader who wants to check it out. HHeres the link.

http://literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=56814

I'll warn you now, it's a long one, and things don't really heat up untill the second half of the story. Still, the build up makes it (to me at least) that much more believable. And even with the long intro, theres some fairly hot forshadowing in there.
So far the email comments have been good, so that bodes well. I hope some more folks will check it out and shoot me a line of critique or two. It's reader comments that make me want to get back at the keyboard and pound out Part 2.
Hope you have as much fun reading as I did writing!