New Writer feedback requested

[taurents]

Hi all I'm a newbie here , I have 3 stories on the site and more working their way through the selection process . I'd really appreciate feedback from you even if its critical , in fact especially if its critical then I'll know what to do to improve things , here are the links to the first 3 stories http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=33604


http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=33603

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=33602