New writer exhibitionist voyeur story -or is it?

[georgie57]

Just published my first ever Lit story, which I posted in Erotic Couplings, but now it has been shifted to Exhibitionist/Voyeur. Not sure if this is a good thing or a bad thing. It crosses a few different categories. (Partly gay/Bicurious, bondage, interracial,breastfeeding, sounds very odd when you list them like that)I would be really pleased if anyone gave me feedback. I have loved reading the little I have had so far. It is so exciting thinking of someone being turned on by my story....

https://www.literotica.com/s/his-first-massage

 

[sr71plt]

This is your third round of asking for comment on this very short story (on the first thread, you went back and did corrections and then asked for comment again). I don't know how it got recategorized on the rebound (maybe on the basis of this: "You are watching all of this on the big screen."), but I sort of think it's time for you to move on to the next story now.

 

[georgie57]

In my defence....

I take your point, but I thought the idea of this area was to get constructive comments and thereby improve, and I take that seriously. So far you are the only person who has made substantive comments on the story itself, for which I was and am very grateful. You are clearly a very experienced and prolific writer here. I am not. So while I can quite understand you wanting to move on, and being bored by me going on about my very short first attempt, for me it was a big step, and I want to collect a reasonably broad sense of what readers feel works and doesnt, before doing anything else.

 

[sr71plt]

The surest way for you to become more pleased with your writing is to do more of it and not to sit on one attempt and beat it to death.