New thread for a new member

[2out_of3]

Hello,
https://www.literotica.com/s/rites-of-passage-1

Very new to the site.

I have written short stories for my own pleasure off and on for years. Also wrote RPG scenarios and acted as game master off and on for many years; never bothered to publish any. I have not done RPG work since the 90s so am out of touch with the technical aspects.

Am in the final editing stages of a more mainstream Sci-Fi novel and am about a hundred pages into books two and three. I'm writing two and three concurrently and will publish them after book one has generated some income, hopefully. Sorry, as much as I would like to promote it here I know that mainstream society can be brutally prudish. Maybe some of you will recognize my style when it comes out.

My recent submission is my first attempt at Erotica. I just decided 'what the hell, why not'.
I would be interested to hear some feedback from others, as I come from a technical/engineering background and want to improve the product as it were.

The story came to me recently and I wrote and submitted it that same night. Because of this I later noted some inconsistencies with character behavior and confusion between my intentions and how the wording flowed. I submitted an edit last night and hopefully that will fix some of those 'huh?' moments.

I expect some comments of 'need more sex' which of course is what many of you who frequent this site are after. Any other words of criticism or words of encouragement out there?

I do have several follow-up ideas, but only have so much time for creative writing for its own sake. If people seem to like it, I'm happy to turn the story into a multi-part series; even if I learn that I should probably start submitting in the non-sexual category.

I'm not sure when the edited version of the story "Rites of Passage" will go on line, but you may wish to wait for that before you let me know what you think.

I have lots of ideas and a tiny ego (that's tiny EGO), so talk to me.

 

[_Lynn_]

Good luck and welcome to the AH.

 

[blin18]

Don't forget to link your story

https://www.literotica.com/s/rites-of-passage-1

And post feedback requests to the Story Feedback forum

 

[2out_of3]

Thanks so much! I'm still learning to navigate this site.

 

[TxRad]

Welcome to the madhouse.

When the edited version is up, which might take several days longer than you want, Put a link in your signature line for the lazy people around.

From experience, never post a story the same day you finish it. Let it sit at least a few days and then reread it in a different font. The let it sit a few more days and read it aloud. Both of those will help with those pesky errors that you will never find all of anyway.

You also might look around and find a second pair of eyes or even an editor. Check out the editors forum for the latter.

 

[2out_of3]

Welcome to the madhouse.

When the edited version is up, which might take several days longer than you want, Put a link in your signature line for the lazy people around.

From experience, never post a story the same day you finish it. Let it sit at least a few days and then reread it in a different font. The let it sit a few more days and read it aloud. Both of those will help with those pesky errors that you will never find all of anyway.

You also might look around and find a second pair of eyes or even an editor. Check out the editors forum for the latter.

Agreed. My rough draft of the upcoming novel reached 300+ pages in just three weeks. It took me another three months of editing before I was satisfied enough to submit it to my editor.

I just couldn't help myself on this little story and threw it out there.

 

[2out_of3]

Re-posted in Story Feedback, as suggested.

 

[glynndah]

A welcome for the little newbie from the good little witch.

 

[2out_of3]

Thanks, much appreciated.