New story?

[Murakami]

I was writing more stuff for John Almighty, but this idea started getting interesting and too fleshed out for one of the side stories, so now I am thinking of making a new story out of it. I have a few things I am thinking about. One is that I can't think up a good title.

Here's the first chapter, I was wondering what people think.

Evan was in math class, the most boring class of his entire day. Mr. Veaty was droning on and on about some unintelligible formula, ignoring students raised hands. He was an old bald guy, a classical 50s era teacher, the days when students, in his words 'sat down, shut up, and paid attention'. In fact, until a few years ago when parent complaints had necessitated him attending a 'refresher course' on modern teaching methods, he repeatedly threatened students with rulers whenever they asked questions (not that he was allowed to use one, but he somehow thought that the empty threat would make the students shut up). These days, he just ignored them, firm in his belief that 'either you get it or you are stupid and should go work at a fast food restaurant'. Rumor around the school was that the district had finally found a way around his old-style tenured contract and that he wouldn't be returning in the fall.

Unfortunately, it was not soon enough to keep this group from suffering through him. Evan looked at the clock, hoping it was almost over, but no luck; there was almost another hour left in the double period. "I just wish this class would be more interesting..." he thought as he doodled away in his notebook. It wasn't like he learned anything here, he and just about everyone else in the class went to private tutoring.

Evan glanced up lethargically at the board, but something was off. He tuned in and suddenly noticed that Veaty was wearing a small blond wig, crowning his bare scalp and the darker hair around it. Evan wondered for a moment when exactly he had had time to put it on, or why he would, when the blond hairs twitched... no, they grew! As Evan looked on, the blond hair got longer, covering what little hair Veaty had had left and heading down his back.

Evan looked around the classroom, waiting for someone to burst out laughing or start pointing, but everyone was looking around similarly, wondering who had managed to pull this off. Listening to him for the first time in a long time, Evan realized that the teacher's voice seemed to be getting higher, several octaves higher in fact. It happened gradually, a transition from the worn out, gravelly middle-aged smoker voice to a cooing, breathy (and distinctly feminine) voice, the change so slow as to be unnoticeable from one minute to the next - but it was really obvious now. Hearing a sultry voice like that coming from the wrinkled face of that man was a surreal experience, his new blond locks falling down the sides of his face in shimmering curls. His face also seemed to be changing...

He turned his back to the students once again and strained towards the top of the board to finish writing out the equation, and at that point it becomes obvious that he was actually getting shorter. The teacher, formerly at a hunched 5'9, now looked to be closer to 5'2. At this point, most of the class has given up all pretense of whispering and was talking loudly amongst itself. Evan had leaned over to talk to his friends Sara and Mitch, located in the seats in front of him and to the right, but neither of them had any idea what the hell was going on either.

Veaty turned around to look at his lesson plan, and all of the students went nuts. Veaty had the face of a pretty Coed, probably in her early to mid 20's. Her shirt was slowly getting tighter as two fleshy mounds pushed out from her chest, pulling it from the now very loose waistband of her pants. "Those must be at least B-cups," Sara said, but as everyone looked on they continued to grow. Her pants were becoming incredibly tight around her hips as the expanded, almost in proportion to her waist pulling inward, the fabric pulling tight around her legs and showing them off.

She was looking at her plan for only a few seconds while all this was going on, and without seeming to notice the growing pandemonium in the room, she turned back around to continue writing, the equation she was working seemingly having shifted down the board to accommodate her. Turing around gives everyone a nice look at her tight ass, displayed clearly through the now skin-tight slacks. Her hair had reached her shoulder blades, and her breasts had grown big enough that they were showing around her sides. Her shirt finally gave out and the first 5 buttons popped off, something that everyone was aware of as they fly off to one side and pinged off the board. She turned a bit to give people a view of what she has been writing, and gave everyone a great shot of her cleavage through the now effectively V-neck dress shirt and and undershirt that had ripped completely apart down the middle. Her boobs were still expanding, heading past what Evan was sure were high C-cups and into the D-range. The whole class had settled into silently staring at what was happening; one person ideally wondered if they should leave the room, but no one moved from their desks.

As she stood there, gesturing at the board and talking about... well, no one was paying any attention to what she was saying at that point, but if they had been they would have noticed a major change in he teaching style... Her pants also seemed to be change as well. The slacks were retreating upwards, being chased by her growing socks, both now about to her knee caps, the socks growing progressively more transparent as the moved upwards. The shrinking pants stopped about mid-thigh and got even tighter, cinching up to her new waist, as she seemed to grow a couple of inches. Inspection revealed that this was due to the black, patent leather 2 inch heals that her shoes had become. The tight pants outlined a distinct camel toe at her crotch, signaling to all the world that she was no longer a guy, and then they grew slightly less distinct as though covered, before the crotch of the tiny shorts that had been the bottom of a suit grew downward and then fluttered free, becoming an incredibly small micro-miniskirt. The socks had become shear stockings, and a pair of garter straps stuck out from under the skirt to hold them up. While all this was happening, the shirt lost its loose button strings as the collar grew downwards, the wrinkles flattening down as it went from a tented out man's shirt to a tightly cut, almost see-through v-neck woman's blouse, and the shattered undershirt flowed upwards and formed a lacy, flowery bra, pushing her now substantial assets out still further and creating massive cleavage. The brown suit jacket that was slung over the chair had become a blue blazer that went with the micro-skirt, but from the look of it didn't cover much more when she wore it.

"So has everyone gotten that, class?" she asked, a bit loudly, and with a start Evan realized that she was asking for the third time, lightly rapping on the desk to try and get everyone's attention. She looked at Evan and said "Evan, do you understand what was I just saying?"

Also, I am debating if it is too long, and also how to work it. The first couple chapters are the setup, before I get my explanation in the third chapter. I'm not sure if I should lock out additions till the third chapter or let people take things their own way from the start. Please let me know what you guys think of this, or if you think I should throw it into John Almighty.

 

[BenjiDude]

Nice stuff there man, the odd typo though.

Anyway I'd say you should put this in the John Almighty thread as it's basically following the same premise. But if you do decide to make a new story out of it, then I'd leave it open for people to do their own thing.

 

[Murakami]

It's still in editing. I wanted to get some advance opinions to gauge interest and because I'll edit it differently for intro to new story vs continuation.

The difference won't really be apparent till later, in chapter three. People have complained that having an omnipotent main character makes it hard to write, so this one is a bit different. It could still fit into John Almighty, though, in the Maximoff syndrome area. I kinda wish there was a way to link from one story to another, then most of the stuff in that area would have there own place. I made that branch for the independent ideas that I didn't have enough material ready for to write a whole story on.

I'm a bit worried that if I put it in JA, nothing will happen. Nobody's been contributing lately . I put a lot of work into all my stuff, and I hate to see it sit there with no additions.

 

[Murakami]

BTW, if anyone tells me to call the story "Evan Almighty", I know a couple lawyers who have a boot they want you to see.

 

[BenjiDude]

I wouldn't worry about the apparent lack of interest, people focus ebbs and flows from one story to the next.

 

[Murakami]

There didn't seem to be interest in a new story, so I added it to John Almighty. Now I just have to make the next couple parts good before I post them.

 

[Murakami]

This is taking many more threads than I originally planned, but I am trying to put in well placed break points so you guys can add in wherever you get the inspiration. Please do!