Do a newbie here a favor. Check out my first story "The Ache Inside Us All" and give me some feedback please -good, bad, indifferent, etc. I am a writer but this is my first venture into erotic writing. Reading and sharing in some posts here gave me the confidence to do it. The story was really inspired by some of the posts/topics in particular here and some of the interaction I've already had with others here.
Here is a brief taste:
"Her whispers mixed with sighs and our lips came so close that our breath passed from our lips and directly into the mouth of the other. We established a rhythm and breathed in and out, directly giving and directly taking from the other. We didn’t kiss, we didn’t touch except for our chests, but I was dizzy with her, and I was drunk with her.
Four hands carefully undid my pants and slid them down my legs. Four hands did the same to Melinda. We continued to make love with eyes and breath."
I just submitted it this morning, so I dont know how long it takes to appear, but Im anxious to learn and hear your thoughts so story number two can be better...
Thank you in advance
Here is a brief taste:
"Her whispers mixed with sighs and our lips came so close that our breath passed from our lips and directly into the mouth of the other. We established a rhythm and breathed in and out, directly giving and directly taking from the other. We didn’t kiss, we didn’t touch except for our chests, but I was dizzy with her, and I was drunk with her.
Four hands carefully undid my pants and slid them down my legs. Four hands did the same to Melinda. We continued to make love with eyes and breath."
I just submitted it this morning, so I dont know how long it takes to appear, but Im anxious to learn and hear your thoughts so story number two can be better...
Thank you in advance
