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[Aaron Dazer]

Feedback Plz Sci-Fi

I've got a Second part of a previous story up I’d like some feedback on. Mostly want to know what to change or improve on in the 3rd chapter. Mosquito CH. 02Mosquito CH. 02 all input Appreciated. It's a Sci-fi with a control theme. A very hard subject to convince people of.

 

[Scribbleros]

wonder why nobody has commented yet.

Wonder why nobody has commented yet on this one. Sounds like the comics we used to read in the 1980's

 

[Aaron Dazer]

Really could you elaborate? and is that a good or bad thing?