New Story: Quick Ones: After School

[J.Q. Hack]

I'd really like to get some comments and feedback on my latest story. What I'd like to do is start a series of erotica short shorts of about a thousand to two thousand words under the heading "Quick Ones." These stories would not be related nor would they be chapters in a longer series. All they are meant to be are just short one scene stories with only two or so characters. Please check out the story and let me know what you all think.

Thanks,
J.Q.

Quick Ones: After School

 

[kbate]

Well written, only one minor editing problem, which I shall not reveal.

Overall, didn't particularly excite me, but it is a good story and should do well.

 

[janiexx]

I'd really like to get some comments and feedback on my latest story. What I'd like to do is start a series of erotica short shorts of about a thousand to two thousand words under the heading "Quick Ones." These stories would not be related nor would they be chapters in a longer series. All they are meant to be are just short one scene stories with only two or so characters. Please check out the story and let me know what you all think.

Thanks,
J.Q.

Quick Ones: After School

I read and enjoyed. I liked the thought they might get caught out at any minute. That always adds a frisson of excitement and I think you captured that feeling very well.

I'm looking forward to reading more.
janiexx

 

[bandelero]

Read and enjoyed the story very much. The excitement magnified lots by the "Will we get caught?" theme.....I've been in much the same position and it definitely adds to the thrill.

 

[J.Q. Hack]

Quick Ones: After School

I thank everybody for the replies I've received so far on my story. Does anybody have an opinion on whether this particular type of format works well for ertoic stories and should I continue to try my hand at others?

Thanks,
J.Q.

 

[DeeplyHisForever]

Wow I really love your stories Making the Grade was amazing

 

[DeeplyHisForever]

HEHE i didn't know i was a virgin lol .... sorry it just made me giggle

 

[janiexx]

I thank everybody for the replies I've received so far on my story. Does anybody have an opinion on whether this particular type of format works well for ertoic stories and should I continue to try my hand at others?

Thanks,
J.Q.

I liked the length of the story - it was quick and satisfying. What about (just a thought here) somehow connecting all the stories? So in the next one you could mention the characters from the first, and so on, but introduce a new set in each one?

We had a series here in the UK recently called "The Street" where each set of characters had their own episode, but they were also part of other episodes too. I think it worked quite well and it was interesting to see how the characters interracted with each other.

Anyway, just an idea

janiexx

 

[J.Q. Hack]

I liked the length of the story - it was quick and satisfying. What about (just a thought here) somehow connecting all the stories? So in the next one you could mention the characters from the first, and so on, but introduce a new set in each one?

We had a series here in the UK recently called "The Street" where each set of characters had their own episode, but they were also part of other episodes too. I think it worked quite well and it was interesting to see how the characters interracted with each other.

Anyway, just an idea

janiexx

Now that I think about I like the idea of trying to loosely interconnect the stories. I guess at one level they don't have to be related or affecting one another only connected with a few common threads. I'm thinking about writing another story that involves Carrie's sister and perhaps her boyfriend (the narrator of this story).

Any other thoughts or ideas would be appreciated.

Thanks,
J.Q.

 

[RogueLurker]

I liked the length of the story - it was quick and satisfying. What about (just a thought here) somehow connecting all the stories? So in the next one you could mention the characters from the first, and so on, but introduce a new set in each one?

We had a series here in the UK recently called "The Street" where each set of characters had their own episode, but they were also part of other episodes too. I think it worked quite well and it was interesting to see how the characters interracted with each other.

Anyway, just an idea

janiexx

I like that idea ...a series of vignettes with some sort of theme or continuity of characters as you move through the stories.

Nice idea, janiexx.

 

[janiexx]

I like that idea ...a series of vignettes with some sort of theme or continuity of characters as you move through the stories.

Nice idea, janiexx.

Vignettes!

That was the word I was looking for!

janiexx

 

[Gus Aspar]

nice one!

Nice story. My dirty mind is already playing with the possibilities of a sequel, in which her mother has more of a part to play.