new story, new author

[thenry]

Cocking It Back
"Toys and Masturbation"

I'm looking for feedback of any kind, really.

I was surprised to see this story debut on the top lists with so many votes. Did I pick an "easy" category? Do people troll the new lists?

After receiving feedback, I am considering continuing the story. To authors who have written a multi-part story, some questions: Did you originally plan multiple parts? Is escalation necessary in a sequel? Is it more rewarding to continue or to start over with new characters?

Thank you for your consideration and time.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

I think you're getting high ratings not because it's an especially easy category, but because you've written a terrific fucking story!

You've created a believable character in a believable situation and described her encounter with her first artifical cock in a way that's intimate, emotional, and filled with exacting detail. It's a first rate piece of erotica. Not only is she learning how to use a dildo, but she's learning what it means to be a woman too, and it's just incredibly sexy for us to be in on it and watch her learn.

I loved the way she developed a real relationship with the artificial cock too. That kind of fear and intense curiosity is just so erotic to see.

As for a sequel, that's entirely up to you. Speaking for myself, I'd like to see what you can do when you branch out into other areas of sexuality. But you have a very likable character, very smart and perceptive, who's on the very threshold of her own sexual life, and I could easily picture a series based on that. Kristen's going to be doing a lot of learning and is going to have a lot to tell us, and I for one want to hear everything she's got to say.

Congratulations and welcome to Lit. Whether the next piece is a sequel or something new, please let me know when you post.

---dr.M.

 

[thenry]

Thanks, Dr. M

After reading a selection of your stories and more of your commentary and criticism, I am flattered to have been thought of so highly.

T

 

[Jeff818]

You wrote a very good story. You deserve the positive feedback.
Congratulations