New story! Homeless Man In My Locker Room. Check it out!

[Phallux]

Hi all. Thank you, in advance, for reading my stories. Here is my second story. It is far better than the first, Scent of a Handyman, because it is more bang than flash. Enjoy, and please give me feedback.

 

[Mike Tauron]

Read your story soon after it was posted and thought it read quite well. And a bonus point for using a combination I've never seen before (homeless man & schoolgirls). Nice to see there ARE some new ideas out there, despite the cliche that there are no new stories just new ways of telling them.

 

[Cg1369]

Just finished reading your story. AWESOME!!
Keep up the good eork.

 

[Sabrina]

I had a look at your story and I thought it was quite good. Despite the fact that homelessmen and cheerleaders together isn't really my thing,I thought it was very well written.

 

[#1derfulGuy]

Read your story and loved it. Who would have ever thought of coupling a homeless man and a cheerleader. What a concept! Looking forward to your next creation. Keep up the awesome work.

 

[#1derfulGuy]

Read your story and loved it. Who would have ever thought of coupling a homeless man and a cheerleader. What a concept! Looking forward to your next creation. Keep up the awesome work.

 

[Katerina Val-Kyrie]

Hi Phallux I read your story Homeless Man In My Locker Room. I thought it was very well written. Lots of descriptive and it flowed well, which is a plus! If a story does not flow, I think the reader becomes lost. The only thing I would have liked to see done differently is the way the story started. How did this homeless man get there? Where did he come from? That is what I found myself wondering. But then I tend to be a very descriptive writer myself. Personlly though, I would hate to lose my virginity to a bum... but I guess she didn't feel that way! I will definately check out Scent Of A Handyman as well, and let you know what I think. Hope you have time to check out my stories as well. I love to hear feedback from my readers! Take care...Katerina Val-Kyrie

 

[Phallux]

Thank you everyone for replying. You all made my day. Happy millenium!

Phallux