New Story by LonelyMom

[LonelyMom]

My new story, An End To Loneliness, has just been posted. It fels so good to be back to writing again. Thanks to those of you that wrote to express their best wishes during a rough stretch in my life. You will never know how much those thoughts meant to me.

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=337046

 

[mjl2010]

Well done.

Nicely written and you kept my attention throughout. From giving a little background information all through to her growing anticipation and finally meeting her lover for a passion filled tryst.

Very nice.

MJL

 

[LonelyMom]

Smiling

Thnakyou, MJL, for the kind words. The public comments and emails have all been very sweet so far.

You know how when you buy something really expensive you start scolding yourself even before you get home? "That was stupid." "I shouldn't have spent that much!" I was wondering if there is also such a thing as "writer's remorse"?

While I'm writing a story, sometimes I think that it is really, really good. However, after I get it done and read it back to myself, I don't like it even half as much. It's always such a relief when readers take the time to let you know they enjoyed your work. I wish I could hug you all!

 

[mjl2010]

Thnakyou, MJL, for the kind words. The public comments and emails have all been very sweet so far.

You know how when you buy something really expensive you start scolding yourself even before you get home? "That was stupid." "I shouldn't have spent that much!" I was wondering if there is also such a thing as "writer's remorse"?

While I'm writing a story, sometimes I think that it is really, really good. However, after I get it done and read it back to myself, I don't like it even half as much. It's always such a relief when readers take the time to let you know they enjoyed your work. I wish I could hug you all!

Every story and poem I've posted I've done the same thing, worried everyone would think it was crap. And of course....once it's posted you suddenly see the misspelled word or the two words out of order. And I go through them line by line too, even after my editor is done.

MJL

 

[walkerlong]

Well done

I thought the story was well done. I especially love how you portray her inner conflict. A really believable character.

I can relate to your ambivalence about your writing. Every time I write I go back and forth between "this is the greatest thing ever" and "this is total crap." The secret, I think, is to just keep writing and sort it out later.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Nice. This is what I like to see - a story that's really a story and not some disconnected fuck scene like thousands of new writers have submitted. Well done.

The one thing I could point too is you punctuation of dialogue. The rule is - Every pair of quotation marks has a punctuation. You sometimes did it correctly, sometimes your punctuation is outside the quote.

But that doesn't really detract from a good story. Keep writing. You are doing well.










God! Did I actually compliment someone? I must be loosing it

 

[LonelyMom]

Nice. This is what I like to see - a story that's really a story and not some disconnected fuck scene like thousands of new writers have submitted. Well done.

The one thing I could point too is you punctuation of dialogue. The rule is - Every pair of quotation marks has a punctuation. You sometimes did it correctly, sometimes your punctuation is outside the quote.

But that doesn't really detract from a good story. Keep writing. You are doing well.










God! Did I actually compliment someone? I must be loosing it

Thank you, Jenny. Punctuation is one of many things that just won't sink into my brain. It's almost like throwing a dart sometimes. I have no idea where it will end up. I'm just happy if it makes it onto the right line!

As far as the compliment - My lips are sealed. I won't breathe a word of it to anyone. I may put it on a billboard, but I'll never utter a word.

 

[Camilleon]

Nice story

Your story is very nicely done. I enjoyed reading it. You are much better at explaining your feelings than I am - like someone else said about describing the inner conflict.

I'll certainly read your other stories.

 

[LonelyMom]

To WalkerLong and Camillion

Thank you both so much! I only wish I could bottle some of the confidence that you guys give me with your positive comments and keep it for the next time that I write something. Maybe it would keep me from chewing my fingernails all off!