New Story and links to others

[woodcarverII]

I have a new story being posted and wanted to show a little of it here before going to bed. I also want to add the links to my other stories because I'm vain and want to hear what others think about them.

 

[woodcarverII]

here is the snippet from the new one:


“I know you’re a smart man Mike, tell me what you’re thinking right now, right here.” I could feel her sweet breath on my mouth.

“I think that this is the point that I’m supposed to kiss you or something.” We were so close at this point that I could feel the heat from her mixing with my own.

“You get an A.”

How many people remember that first grown-up kiss? You know who it was. You know where it happened. You remember the taste, the feel and the excitement. The thing is you remember every last detail and it becomes a living thing. It’s a memory that you relive and it never looses a bit of the magic.

It was several moments before we pulled apart. Now mind you, there was no tongue or anything, but it was totally the sensual thing that I will ever experience. Well, up to that point.

“Now, Mr. Jones, let’s stay on the subject. Oh and by the way, you get an A for effort as well.” She settled back a little, but snaked her feet into my lap. Without thinking, I dropped my hands to them and started rubbing them.
“I want you to go with me. This is a one-time offer and I need an answer before the end of the evening. So here’s my offer.”

I was trying to think and rub her feet. That kiss did something to me that seemed to ease all the nervousness. “I’m listening.”

“I want you to go with me and live with me. You will pay your own way, but I think that I can help you secure either a student loan to help with your school expenses, or we can apply now for a scholarship.” She eased down into the couch a little more and I swear she was trying to feel the newly reborn erection I was sporting at the time.

 

[woodcarverII]

here are the links to the other stories.....I hope:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=119458

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=119459

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=119460

 

[woodcarverII]

I hope that at least someone well take the time to read all this and respond. Of course all the U.S. readers might be busy tonight and to them, Happy 4th of July.

To the rest of the world, have a safe day and sleep well.

That should about cover it all.

Thanks

 

[woodcarverII]

LOL.......


I actually got out of bed to see if anyone had responded or not.

Guess not so this serves as a cheap bump in the night!!!!!

 

[woodcarverII]

Morning bump out of desperation.

 

[neonlyte]

Woodcarver
I looked at the first two you listed.

Not really my cup of tea but reasonably well written in a style that made me feel slightly uncomfortable as if I were intruding upon a private event.

I admire your guts in omiting any description of where they were, surroundings, furnishings, ambience, except where directly relevant to the story, for example the shower scene. It will not be to everyones taste but that should not deter you from developing you individual style.

Best of luck.

neon

 

[wishfulthinking]

He has to pay his own way? Man, I've had better offers

It is an except, so I'm probably confused because I came into it midway, but if this is his first adult kiss, then how does he know that he will relive it and that it will never lose its magic?

But otherwise, great, keep writing! You seem to have a knack for it, and I would be surprised if you didn't get a great response from readers. But you probably might get a bigger response from the feedback forum, because most of the AH regulars are the biggest bunch of flirts you will ever come across, and have nothing on the brain but talking about sex

 

[woodcarverII]

thanks guys. The exerpt is from a story that is written in a slight past tense. It's a catching up to current events if you will. It should post in the next couple of days I hope and I will post the url for it here.

As far as the other stories are concerned, they were my first attempt and you're right. I stuck to the moment and didnt invovle anything other than the needed descriptions. This new story is somewhat different. I'm trying to refine my so-called skills and accomplish some depth to the characters. I certainly dont want it to be only about the sex.

 

[woodcarverII]

a shameless bump for the afternoon crews.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

WC,

You'd really be better off posting this request on the Story Feedback board, which is designed for this kind of thing. I just don't think you;re going to get many responses here.

---dr.M.

 

[woodcarverII]

thanks...I WAS starting to wonder about that.