philipcollin
Virgin
- Joined
- Feb 6, 2010
- Posts
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Hey all, im new to this game but i decided to start writing my own story for fun.
Just advertising it, and hoping for some feedback on how its going so far, also im waiting for it to be approved (i think i heard somewhere its takes about 2 weeks?)
anyway here is a link to the story:
http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/6845
any critiques on my writing, story or really anything i can do to improve would be much appreciated.
Oh and hello
Just advertising it, and hoping for some feedback on how its going so far, also im waiting for it to be approved (i think i heard somewhere its takes about 2 weeks?)
anyway here is a link to the story:
http://www.chyoo.com/index.php/main.story.cover/6845
any critiques on my writing, story or really anything i can do to improve would be much appreciated.
Oh and hello
