happyhooker
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i am a new poet , although the site has 3 of my poems, i am in need of help and guidance, a lady pointed me to this thread( am i in the right place) so any advice is wanted
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annaswirls
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Welcome Ms. Hooker!
You have come to the right place indeed. If you scroll down, there is a roll call thread as well, so you can let people know you are looking for feedback. I will go check your poems and see if I have anything helpful to offer.
A good start is reading new poems, seeing what you like about them, and trying to figure out why, what you see that doesn't work, and why.... it is helpful to get analytical on other peoples poems, it is sometimes hard to start with your own. They are like babies to us in a lot of ways.
Again, welcome!
~anna
You have come to the right place indeed. If you scroll down, there is a roll call thread as well, so you can let people know you are looking for feedback. I will go check your poems and see if I have anything helpful to offer.
A good start is reading new poems, seeing what you like about them, and trying to figure out why, what you see that doesn't work, and why.... it is helpful to get analytical on other peoples poems, it is sometimes hard to start with your own. They are like babies to us in a lot of ways.
Again, welcome!
~anna
happyhooker
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thank you anne my three poems are
waiting for you
still wet
saturday night
hope you like them
ray
waiting for you
still wet
saturday night
hope you like them
ray
Angeline
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Hi Ray and welcome to the poetry forum.
Get involved here, post in the threads, ask for feedback if you want it, do the challenges and contests. We all try to help each other to learn and grow as writers. There are wonderful poets here and they're pretty nice people, too, lol.
I'm a moderator on this forum, (as are Lauren Hynde and Wicked Eve). If you ever have questions, feel free to get in touch with me.
Angeline
Get involved here, post in the threads, ask for feedback if you want it, do the challenges and contests. We all try to help each other to learn and grow as writers. There are wonderful poets here and they're pretty nice people, too, lol.
I'm a moderator on this forum, (as are Lauren Hynde and Wicked Eve). If you ever have questions, feel free to get in touch with me.
Angeline
Du Lac
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Welcome!!!
You are in the right place! Happy that you found this forum. I look forward to reading your poems. I am also relatively new here and have found many gracious, witty and helpful people in this forum. Ask and you shall receive... in the helping way..
Again welcome to the site!
Du Lac
You are in the right place! Happy that you found this forum. I look forward to reading your poems. I am also relatively new here and have found many gracious, witty and helpful people in this forum. Ask and you shall receive... in the helping way..
Again welcome to the site!
Du Lac
Reltne
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saturday night
You write in a rhymed form with fairly steady metre. I am not personally enthralled with erotic poems that use street language and I think it weakens a bit towards the end, but it is still better than the average Lit. erotic poem. - That does not mean that it cannot be rewritten and improved.
waiting for you With this one you change the rhyme scheme and the number of lines in the stanza. - This is not usually a good idea in a rhymed and metered poem.
still wet I wish the order of your postings were reversed. Then I could say that you are definitely learning and improving.
I suggest (IMHO) that you make your erotic offerings less "graphic" (avoid street language; use metaphors for body parts/ functions). It is difficult to write an interesting poem when your words have been used so often before.
You do show talent in your writing. Keep writing, but also at least as importantly, keep
reading! - all poems, and this forum of analysis/criticism. (Just don't take anyone's, or even everyone's words as gospel.)
It is also a very good idea to put a newly written poem aside for awhile. - Wait until you can come back and read it as if someone else had written it. I guarantee that you will find things that can be improved and that you won't believe you wrote what you are reading.
An honest response from Reltne.
You write in a rhymed form with fairly steady metre. I am not personally enthralled with erotic poems that use street language and I think it weakens a bit towards the end, but it is still better than the average Lit. erotic poem. - That does not mean that it cannot be rewritten and improved.
waiting for you With this one you change the rhyme scheme and the number of lines in the stanza. - This is not usually a good idea in a rhymed and metered poem.
still wet I wish the order of your postings were reversed. Then I could say that you are definitely learning and improving.
I suggest (IMHO) that you make your erotic offerings less "graphic" (avoid street language; use metaphors for body parts/ functions). It is difficult to write an interesting poem when your words have been used so often before.
You do show talent in your writing. Keep writing, but also at least as importantly, keep
reading! - all poems, and this forum of analysis/criticism. (Just don't take anyone's, or even everyone's words as gospel.)
It is also a very good idea to put a newly written poem aside for awhile. - Wait until you can come back and read it as if someone else had written it. I guarantee that you will find things that can be improved and that you won't believe you wrote what you are reading.
An honest response from Reltne.
twelveoone
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Excellent Advice.Reltne said:saturday night
You write in a rhymed form with fairly steady metre. I am not personally enthralled with erotic poems that use street language and I think it weakens a bit towards the end, but it is still better than the average Lit. erotic poem. - That does not mean that it cannot be rewritten and improved.
waiting for you With this one you change the rhyme scheme and the number of lines in the stanza. - This is not usually a good idea in a rhymed and metered poem.
still wet I wish the order of your postings were reversed. Then I could say that you are definitely learning and improving.
I suggest (IMHO) that you make your erotic offerings less "graphic" (avoid street language; use metaphors for body parts/ functions). It is difficult to write an interesting poem when your words have been used so often before.
You do show talent in your writing. Keep writing, but also at least as importantly, keep
reading! - all poems, and this forum of analysis/criticism. (Just don't take anyone's, or even everyone's words as gospel.)
It is also a very good idea to put a newly written poem aside for awhile. - Wait until you can come back and read it as if someone else had written it. I guarantee that you will find things that can be improved and that you won't believe you wrote what you are reading.
An honest response from Reltne.
I would and to annaswirls comment;
also read the comments, if the comment looks good, click on the name of who left it, see what they wrote. Start with those who leave comments on yours, and start leaving comments yourself.
It is helpfull to get outside yourself, to see what others are doing to find the path you wish to take and improve.
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