New Lit Author

[shiresa]

Finally got a story posted and I am interested in what other writers think about it. It is a "classic" Fantasy story with a (I hope) unusual twist.

Edit: Forgot to add that the story is "A Wife for Owa"

Edit again: Adding link as suggested. A Wife for Owa

 

[dr_mabeuse]

You should always include a link when you're asking for feedback. Readers are a lazy lot.

Here's your story:

http://english.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=207049&page=1

This kind of Fantasy isn't my cup of tea, but your approach was very original and it kept me reading. It's an interesting tale.

---Zoot

 

[Teela]

I read your story. I'm a LOTR fan, but this was a first for me! Orc love. Go figure!

I thought it was nicely handled, though I wish you'd taken more time and been more descriptive in certain places. Specifically, you seem to rush through the acts of sex. I would have preferred a slower conversion of her feelings the first time - it seemed too abrupt. I know it was the magic at work - after. But at the time I found it hard to go along with. That's my main advice. Slow down, give more details about how the sexual encounters make them feel. Take me there.

Teela

 

[shiresa]

I read your story. I'm a LOTR fan, but this was a first for me! Orc love. Go figure!

I thought it was nicely handled, though I wish you'd taken more time and been more descriptive in certain places. Specifically, you seem to rush through the acts of sex. I would have preferred a slower conversion of her feelings the first time - it seemed too abrupt. I know it was the magic at work - after. But at the time I found it hard to go along with. That's my main advice. Slow down, give more details about how the sexual encounters make them feel. Take me there.

Teela

I agree completely actually. My first instinct is to leave the sex almost entirely up to the reader's imagination, this story is my first attempt at erotic fiction and I am finding that as I read more of the other stories here I am getting more of a feel for it.

At least I hope I am

Thanks for the advice