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[mia_erotica]

I didn't have time to write a new story for the Literotica Halloween contest this year. Instead I did a rewrite on my story from last year. It's called Dr. Cockburn's Medicine.

It's BDSM with an erotic horror twist.

I'd love feedback on my new version. And I'd love to see the score go up a little. I'm thinking about adding to the story - maybe turning it into a novel. I think there's more to explore there. That or I'd like to do an anthology of stories set in the Adirondacks. I'm not sure yet.

Mia

 

[CyberFrog]

Hiya,

I enjoyed this (left some feedback on the form at the end of the story too, 'cos thats always nice!).

BDSM isn't the section I would normally look in (not that I don't like it, I do!), but I'd like folk to read my work and give me feedback - seems only fair I would do the same for others!

Sooooo....

I haven't read a previous version of this so I couldn't honestly tell you my opinion on it in comparison to the original.

That aside - love the twist, REALLY love the concept of the evil Dr sewing her mouth and genitals up!

I like the 'uneasy' feel to it too.

My one concern throughout the story though was that I thought she should have been more conflicted; I think you could have played up that aspect a little more, the comparison between what she wanted, and the price she'd have to pay to get that...

However as I say - didn't see the original so I am perhaps missing something there, and for a story in a category I wouldn't normally choose to read - I definitely liked and voted as such! Off to read more of your work now!

 

[mia_erotica]

heartfelt

Thanks for reading and for the comments on Cockburn and Ghost of a Chance!