New here and looking for feedback.

[Effera]

Hi all

I just submitted my first story and am looking for some serious feedback and critiquing. I was posting my stories in a blog forum and got so much encouragement I decided to flap my wings *grins*

Tell me what you think, and or feel *winks*

Title is Nightly Ritual
Linked as follows:

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=388656

Thank you!

 

[zowiegus]

I thought your story was pretty arousing. A very nice morning read indeed.