New girl

[pink_tulip]

Hi. I have been reading literotica for years but this is the first time I had the guts to post any work. The poetry is the best thing about Literotica and I hope my work can stand up to the fabulous poems I have read here.

Any feedback you have about my work would be appreciated.

 

[Angeline]

Nice to meet you and welcome to unlurk.

I read and really loved your poem, Bitter. I thought it was powerful. I think you'll get a lot of good feedback on it.


Ange

 

[Guest]

Welcome from me too. You'll be a great addition to the poets by the looks of your work so far.

Tess

 

[Liar]

Hi and welcome! I hope you stick around.

 

[Guest]

pink_tulip

Hi. I have been reading literotica for years but this is the first time I had the guts to post any work. The poetry is the best thing about Literotica and I hope my work can stand up to the fabulous poems I have read here.

Any feedback you have about my work would be appreciated.

Hey new girl... Welcome


- neo

 

[Lauren Hynde]

Welcome! I loved your poem. Great entrance.

 

[annaswirls]

Welcome!
Kick off your shoes and let your toes wiggle free.

Please continue to share your poems!

Anna

 

[Tathagata]

You are most welcome

 

[JCSTREET]

re. PINK_TULIP

BITTER has an adolescent tinge to me - just another blow job (he said ruthlessly)- just another wet cunt - we have all written these during early phases I spose but we have to move farther out into the world--beyond the rancid bedroom of now-vinegary wine--the cigarette butts, the used Kleenex--the tired tubes of lube

BUT I would not say this if I could not with the other hand point to loveliness

i.e.
PRAIRIE POEM

razor straps slash
pearl skin behind
my knees

tremble and listen
to the wailing
as the sky turns
green and battered

our house battles
to stay adrift
on the prairie's ocean


now there's a poem and we've all felt that - the way the tall grass whips at the back of the knees - that shudder of deja vu that Tulip evokes with thes butterfly-winged words.

house battling to stay adrift on the prairie's ocean seems--at first--a bit more mundane--but it is a cinema verite of survival on those endless plains where there is nothing to stay the wind's muscular arm

the house is a mere nipple on the breast of the prairie - and is so easily nursed to nothingness by those airy lips

that is a fine poem Tulip

SEX rarely works in poetry except by inference and writing good erotic fiction feels harder than The Caine Mutiny

 

[Merrymaker]

Greetings,
I'm glad you decided to post your work, it's not too tough after you jump in and get your feet wet for the first time.


~Merry

 

[WickedEve]

Hi, Pink. I would have said that earlier but I just now noticed the thread.

 

[UnseenChagrin]

from one new girl to another

welcome!

I've been a haunter here at lit for some time, but I myself also just posted my work (and boy did I, those poor people handling all the submissions!). I'm on my way to look at your stuff now- it seems everyone is enjoying it!