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[coldfire69]

Hey everybody!

Noob erotic author coming at you from western Canada. Wonder if I could entice any brave souls to take a quick boo at some of my stuff and leave some comments. I've got the six-chaptered Devil's Equinox starting here ...

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=442520

I'm still figuring out pacing, ie. just exactly how much fiction to throw in with the erotic had a few helpful anonymous comments so far.

Am blown away by the community here. Will of course comment on your stuff too!

Thx for your patience, and nice to meet you all!

 

[Timbledore]

Link is no good. Try to re-link and I'll be happy to check some it out.

 

[coldfire69]

Link is no good. Try to re-link and I'll be happy to check some it out.

try it now, Timbledore, I edited the link and it seems to work

 

[Timbledore]

try it now, Timbledore, I edited the link and it seems to work

Thanks! I'll read through them and let you know.

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Okay here is what you have - the beginning of a story - almost a forward, I suppose, but NOT a story.

Stories have several elements. Characters (which you did pretty well), setting (which you sort of did okay but you could have done a little better) and PLOT which you totally forgot about.

Look... your characters are introduced, there is some play between the characters, the story takes off then comes to some conclusion.

What you have here is an introduction to your characters, they get lost and run into a bunch of freaky nudists then...??? I have no idea what this story is about.

I realize this is CHAPTER ONE, but each chapter needs to stand alone. What you have done is about 1950 words or so that makes an introduction but then rather than giving the reader some idea of what your are about, you drop him in the middle of something and end.

You would have done better to double the length and make the story go somewhere...anywhere. As it is, I don't know what this is but it's not a story at all.

 

[coldfire69]

Okay here is what you have - the beginning of a story - almost a forward, I suppose, but NOT a story.

Stories have several elements. Characters (which you did pretty well), setting (which you sort of did okay but you could have done a little better) and PLOT which you totally forgot about.

Look... your characters are introduced, there is some play between the characters, the story takes off then comes to some conclusion.

What you have here is an introduction to your characters, they get lost and run into a bunch of freaky nudists then...??? I have no idea what this story is about.

I realize this is CHAPTER ONE, but each chapter needs to stand alone. What you have done is about 1950 words or so that makes an introduction but then rather than giving the reader some idea of what your are about, you drop him in the middle of something and end.

You would have done better to double the length and make the story go somewhere...anywhere. As it is, I don't know what this is but it's not a story at all.

Good points. Those six chapters aren't the original chapters; I tried to break up the original chapters to make it easier to digest one piece at a time. I truncated them according to word length, not plot, figuring the reader would simply go on to the next "chapter." Not quite sure what a good maximum length per read is; all I've got in my head is the 750 wrds minimum.

Thx though!

 

[Jenny_Jackson]

Good points. Those six chapters aren't the original chapters; I tried to break up the original chapters to make it easier to digest one piece at a time. I truncated them according to word length, not plot, figuring the reader would simply go on to the next "chapter." Not quite sure what a good maximum length per read is; all I've got in my head is the 750 wrds minimum.

Thx though!

Chaptered stories always have that problem. There really is not set number for the maximum number of words for a chapter. If you look you will find the best are 2 to 4 Lit pages. One Lit page is about 2500 words depending on the amount of dialogue and formating. Another way to measure (the way I do) is 7 MS Word pages = 1 Lit Page or a little more. But that depends on the word processor you are using and on your default settings.

The real error in your thinking is that after reading Chapter 1 as it stands, there really is no desire to look for Chapter 2. The impression is a budding Gunther Gras playing mind fuck as in Giles Goat Boy which consts of 800 pages of nothing going on and the author laughing his ass off at you on the last page.

 

[driphoney]

Jenny's right. I've heard several around here say that 2 or 3 Lit pages is about where they draw the line on if they will start reading a story. Until I tried to write a story and submit, I honestly never looked at that. I still tend to not. If it starts good, I read it, if it doesn't or it gets dull at some point, I back click. One day I decided to see why this story called Checkout had such high ratings. I didn't like the title. It sounded like just one more stroker about the check-out girl. I opened that page and didn't stop reading until it was done--nine Lit pages later, I, too, give it a 5-star! If your story is good, length won't matter either.

If I were you, I wouldn't worry about length until I went past 3 Lit pages. My chapters tend to be 2 to 3 Lit pages, which is usually 25 Word doc pages or 6,000-8,000-ish words. (Cause I write really tiny words! )

But then, I'm just a beginner like you, fumbling along. Good luck.

 

[coldfire69]

Thx for the tips, Jenny and driphoney .... I actually had 6,000 word chapters and broke them up LOL oh well ... but now that I know that ...

Here's to fumbling!

 

[Timbledore]

These are all great points and thanks for posting. I wasn't too sure as well on how long to make a chapter. My story started off short because I didn't want to make it too long, but I thought it was not too short for the content. Chapters 2 and 3 are a bit longer, but I am still not hitting those markers.

Thanks again!