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xquisitebliss

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Hi everyone,

I've recently been reading a lot of stories on Literotica and I decided to write a few for my boyfriend since he is the one that introduced me.

I've written two stories with similar themes but I hope they don't seem too repetitive. Please let me know what you think and what I can improve on. :heart:



The loud pounding at my bedroom door startled me as my stepfather stood at the entrance wearing his usual raunchy boxers. He grunted,"You're going to be late for school and it's only your first day." I waited until he left before pulling the sheets off. I don't know why but it seemed that he had been leering at me ever since my mom had left for for work. As a flight attendant, she was gone most of the time but this had been almost two weeks since she was home. On her last trip she missed my eithteenth birthday party by a couple of days.
She had met my stepfather, Joe, a few years ago when he was a pilot for the same airline. Their engagement and marriage surprised my little sister and me but we later found out that mom was pregnant. I suppose that I should have figured it out when she stopped borrowing most of my clothes. Since middle school my mom and I began wearing each others clothes including our bras and panties. We both weighed a little under 130 lbs and had similar figures. The only real difference between the two of us was that I dyed my hair bleach blonde to make my green eyes stand out. I remember feeling like such a grown up when she let me wear her lacey thongs instead of the same old Disney print panties. One day I put on one of her new bras but it was bigger than our usual 34DD. I asked my mom if she had bought the 34E cup bra on accident and she nervously snatch it from me.
A few months after their wedding, my stepfather was fired because he was drinking on the job. Again. The stress of onlyhaving one income really stressed my mom out to the point that she miscarried. The two really weren't the samesince then. When they met, he was actually very attractive but the heavy drinking and laying around the house added several pounds to his waistline. His scruffy beard and the dingy clothes gave him the appearance of a hobo at times.
As I headed to the bathroom, I turned on the shower and brushed my teeth as I waited for the water to get hot. Ten minuteslater, the water was lukewarm but I stepped inside knowing my bus would be here any minute. It wasn't long before the water was completely cold making my pink nipples very hard and noticable. I hated when Becky took her long showers before me.
Hurridly, I shaved my arms and legs. I didn't want to make a bad first impression in my last year of high school. I lookeddown and wondered what it would be like to shave all my pubic hairs as well. I thought what the hell and when it I was doneit was baby smooth. It's not like I had ever let anyone touch me down there and I didn't think I was ready to start this year.
My body was shivering when I stepped out of the shower. I quickly wrapped a towel and walked down the hallway to my room.
I opened the top drawer of my dresser and only saw a crimson red thong and matching red bra inside. I didn't recall doing laundry in a while but I could have sworn that I had more clean bras and panties than that. The strange thing was that I didn't recall everwearing them or even seeing them in mom's dresser before. Looking at my alarm clock, I realized that I didn't have much time to search for anything else in her bedroom. Besides, I really didn't want to run into my step dad in case he happened to be in there.

I dropped the towel on the ground and put them on. I walked towards my closet to get my school uniform that every girl at school dreaded wearing. It was a boring gray skirt and a white buttoned up shirt. Even the black shoes were attrocious. But as I opened the door there was only one uniform hanging in the closet. In a hurry I grabbed the clothes and threw them on my bed. I pulled out the bra from my dresser and put it on. After initially struggling to clasp it, I looked down to see my boobs pushed so far up thatthey almost touched my chin. I couldn't imagine my mom ever wearing something so slutty. I reached for my white blouse and put it on but it was incredibly tight and the top three buttons appeared to be missing. There was nothing I could do about it now so I put my gray skirt on but I immediately noticed that something was wrong. When I wore it last year, the hem was two inches above my knee.
It was now at the middle of my thighs but only when I pulled it down far enough. There's no way my clothes could have possibly shrunk this much. I ran back into my closet but I couldn't find any of my other skirts.
I couldnt' believe that this was happening to me on my first day of school. It as already 7:10 and the bus would be here any minute.
I went into the bathroom to get my makeup bag when I saw my reflection in the mirror. "Oh my God, I look like a total slut!" The blouse was being stretched to the point where anyone could easily see my bra and my cleavage was pouring out the top thanks to the missing buttons. And not even ten steps in my skirt and it had already gone up a few inches. I knew then that I'd be fighting tokeep it down all day.
I tossed the makeup bag into my backpack and headed down the stairs. That's when I saw my step dad waiting at the bottom of the steps.
I slowly walked down the steps as he gazed up at me.
"God damn Brittany, you're looking really hot this morning," he said.
I nervously replied, "Umm thanks, I guess."
It felt that my boobs were ready to bounce out of my bra with each step I took down the stairs. He took approached the steps and placed his hands on the hand rails essentially blocking me.
His eyes examined my body as he asked, "Do you like how Daddy has altered your little school girl outfit?"
I hated when he refered to himself as Daddy and especially when he demanded that Becky and I call him that.
"Oh my God, did you do this?"
"What's the matter? I thought you'd like the thong and push up bra. Don't you love the attention you'll be getting from all the boys at school when they see the changes I've done to that blouse and skirt?"

I screamed at him, "How could you do this to me on my first day of school, Joe? I look like a total slut! Where are the rest of my uniforms?
I have to change before I leave!"
He gave me and evil smile when he said, "Oh those are still getting altered and I promise that those skirts will look even better on you when you try them on for me."
He let go of the hand rail with his left hand and placed it on my leg. It slid up under my skirt before I could take a step back.
"What do you think you are doing?" I yelled.
He grabbed my ass pulled me down towards him. I could instantly smell the reeking odor of beer on his breath. He snatched my hand while I was fighting to regain my balance and placed it right on his buldging boxers. He glared at me when he stated, "You're going to take care of Daddy while your mom is gone. Unless you want Becky to take your place."
My eyes welled as thoughts ran through my mind of what he wanted to do to me. I had never gone passed kissing and touching over my clothes with any boyfriends. The closest I came to giving someone a handjob was over a guy's swimming trunks at a pool party one time.
I didn't know what to do as his hand lift my skirt exposing my red thong. His other hand kept forcing mine to rub his growing bulge beneath his boxers. I could feel it getting harder as our hands moved up and down his dick.
"That's right Brittany. Keep rubbing Daddy's cock like that." He let go of my hand and shoved me down. Sitting at the edge of the steps, he leered over me and with both hands he began to grope my boobs over my blouse.
I turned my head in disgust as he said,"MMM Daddy's going to have fun with these big soft titties of yours."
I winced as he started to squeeze them roughly.
His cock was now rock hard when he ordered, "Pull my boxers down." I grabbed his boxers and slowly tugged them down.
"Now take a good look at how hard you've made Daddy's cock."
I turned my head and as I opened my eyes, I was stunned at how large it was. Hanging there was a dick much bigger than what I had ever seen in my health classes. It was easily eight or nine inches long and incredibly thick.
I stared in amazement when he startled me, "Do you like what you see Britney?"
His right hand released his grip and grabbed the back of my head. I could feel him pulling my down as he directed hiscock towards my face with his other hand. I knew what he wanted me to do but I just couldn't open my mouth. My eyeswere cliched shut when I felt a thud hit my cheek. when I looked up he was laughing as he slapped my face with his cock.
He did this several times until he stopped and pressed the head of his dick against my lips. "Lick Daddy's cock like a good little girl!" he commanded.
I reluctantly opened my mouth and began to lick the tip as he instructed. It tasted salty and before I knew it, he pulled my head with such force that his cock hit the back of my throat. I began to gag as he trust his hips back and forth fucking my face. I tried to push him off but he keep ramming his dick into my mouth again and again.
My eyes began to well up. Perhaps it was realizing that I was sucking my own step fathers cock or because I was choking on it. He finally eased up and pulled it out giving me just a second to catch my breath.
All of a sudden he pushed me by my shoulders jamming my back against the edge of the steps. He manuevered his hands inside my shirt and pulled my bra down revealing my tits. He then straddled me and dropped hismassive cock between my tits. "Squeeze Daddy's cock with those titties of yours, Britney."
I pleaded, "Please stop, your hurting my back," but this only turned him on more.
"If you want me to stop, you better start calling me Daddy from now on."
I stammered, "Yes. Yes Daddy."
He lifted his body and hovered over me as his cock kept sliding in between my boobs.
"MMM Daddy loves titty fucking his littler girl."
I looked down to see the his cock going back and forth between my cleavage. He was fucking my tits faster and faster as he yelled at me,
"Tighter you fucking slut." I pushed them together as tight as I could.
OH BRITNEY!!! I'M CUMMING!!! OHHHHHHH!" Cum was streaming out and landing on my face. He stood up and starting jerking his dick off as he came all over my tits.
After completely soaking my face and chest he grabbed my hands and dragged me down to the floor. Kneeling in front of him, he shoved his cock back into my mouth.
"Wipe Daddy's cock clean Britney with your tongue." I did exactly that and licked the remaining cum off the head. He pulled it back out and held my mouth shut.
"Now swallow what you have in your mouth," he commanded. I gulped his salty seed down and stood up. I looked around for something to cleanmyself off with when he stopped me. His hands fondled my cum covered tits and rubbed it all over as if it were lotion.
Having missed my bus, I had to walk to school dressed like a slut and with the pungent odor of his sticky juice.



2nd Story

Carter blared his horn of his brand new convertible. Several minutes passed before she ran out the front door of her parents' enormous beach front home. She flashed a smile as she approached the car.
"I can't believe they actually got it for you!"
She opened the passenger door of the black Maserati and jumped into the seat with such force that her tits damn near fell out of her pink top. Her DD cup size would have been impressive on a larger frame but they definetely stood out on her petite 5'5" body. Like Carter's sportscar, those were her graduation gifts. Her doctor protested but Tasha never took no for an answer and wasn't about to start with some Beverly Hills plastic surgeon.
Carter turned the key and sped out of the drive way coming within inches of the marble fountains lining the path.
"So where are you going to take me shopping?"
"I was thinking about the mall."
Tasha grumbled, "Well it better not be Fashion Valley. You know I can't stand all those trashy stores like Abercrombie," as she tended toher wavy blonde hair blowing in the wind.
Carter grinned, "No, we're going to Vegas."
"But that's at least two hours away."
"Not when we can push 150."

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The car entered the highway blowing past all the traffic finally exiting on the lonely two lane road that led to their destination. They easily overtook car after car making great time.
Carter took his hand off the shifter, placing it on Tasha's tanned legs. He knew she wasn't sleeping even though her eyes were closed under the sunglasses. There was no wayanyone could rest with the wind blowing this loud.
His hand moved up towards the tiny jean shorts she had on. But just before he could begin to even think about rubbing on her mound, she blocked his hand.
"Just where do you think you're going?"
"Oh quit being such a fucking prude!"
"You've been sitting there with your legs spread and showing off your tits since I picked your ass up."
"well we'll see how things go and maybe I'll be in the mood tonight."
Carter knew full well what she meant. The more he spent, the better chances he had of getting anywhere with her. He finally took his eyes off her ample cleavage and back to the road. All of a sudden he slammed on his brakes,narrowly avoiding the slugglish 18-wheeler traveling in front of him. Tasha's very expensive sunglasses flew off her face and shattered on the dashboard.
"Who the fuck drives 45 on the highway!" yelled Carter as he incessantly honked his horn.
He had no clue that trucks inevitably slowed down when climbing up steep hills.
Tasha picked up her sunglass and furiously threw them out of the car.
"What a fucking asshole!"
Carter tried to pass the truck but was unable to with all the twists and turns Not only that but the truck
driver seemed to be amusing himself as he brake checked them whenever they came too close. They finally came up on a straightaway and the Maserati roared as they overtook the truck.
Now it was Carter's turn to mess with the trucker.
The two of them laughed histarically as Carter tapped his brakes getting perrilously close the truck's front bumper.
Tasha had her own idea of irritating the trucker. She unbuckled her seatbelt and kneeled down on her seat.
"Oooo I know where this is going."
Tasha pulled his seatbelt up and began unzipping his shorts. She reached into his boxers and pulled out his five inch dick. She began jerking him off furiously. No build up or anything. She just wanted the truck driver to see what he was missing out on.
Within minutes, Carter felt close to cumming so he grabbed the back of Tasha's head and pushed it down.
She protested, "What the hell Carter!"
"Just finish with your mouth. I'm not about to mess up the seats after just one day."
with that remark, Tasha took her hand off his dick.
"You know I hate the taste and the only time you've ever done that was with I was completely drunk."
Carter zipped his shorts back up. "Whatever you fucking tease!"
As he looked down at the gas gauge, realized that they were almost on empty. They took the first exit and pulled into the nearest gas station.
It was gas station was small and family owned rather than the bigger franchises that had better amenities. As Carter filled up the tank, Tasha walked inside and asked the attendent where the restrooms where.
"We only have one and it's out back."
Without a thank you, she walked out of the store and around to where the old man had pointed. She pulled on the door but it was locked.
Tasha stormed inside. "It's fucking locked."
"Well you didn't ask for the key did you?
She snatched the key as he handed it to her and again left without a thank you.
She opened the door and was shocked by the putrid odor coming from the bathroom. She walked to the last stall and was relieved to find that at least there was toilet paper. It was the biggest of the two and she assumed it was for handicapped customers.
She lined the seat before sitting down and as she did, she heard the door open.
"Carter, wait outside until I'm done."
The footsteps got closer and she looked under the stall door to see old dingy boots and jeans and not the sandles that Carter was wearing.
With a much nicer tone, she said,"I'll be out in a minute."
Suddenly the door flew open as the other occupant kicked it in.
"Oh Sweetie, it's going to be a long longer than just a minute."
Tasha quickly reached down for her shorts when she felt the back of his hand strike her cheek knocking her off thetoilet.
"Get up."
Sobbing, she placed her hands on the grimey floor and began to stand. But before she was able to, she grabbed her by her shoulders and sat her back down on the toilet.
His eyes leered down, "I knew you had a great fucking rack."
"Now take off your shirt, nice and slow."

She did exactly that and her tank top rose revealing her flat tanned stomach. She kept lifting exposing her pink laced bra that was pushing up her perfectly sculpted tits. He stopped her as she raised her arms, with her tank top covering her face. She could hear the car honking in the background.
He boasted"Yeah, this will teach the two of you to honk at another trucker."
With one hand gripping her wrists, he started groping her firm tits over her bra. He stopped for a while, and yanked the top and tossed it to the ground. As she opened her eyes, Tasha gasped as she could see the trucker'senormous black cock.
"You're going to do for me what you wouldn't do for your little rich boyfriend. His hand clinched her hair and pulled her face down towards the ten inch rod. He pressed the tip against her lips as she hesitantly opened her mouth. With one quick thrust, his cock was slamming into the back of her throat.
Tasha had never seen a dick of this magnitude let alone have one stuffed down her mouth. Her eyes welled up as she struggled to breathe. His hips swaying back and forth as he fucked her mouth.
Carter entered the bathroom and walked to the second stall. The door was wide open when he noticed the 6'6"beast with his pants down by his ankles.
"What the fuck is taking you so long?"
The trucker turned his head and he snatched Carter by his shirt. He pushed him down to the ground without much effort. Before Carter could utter a word, the trucker spoke, "Just sit there and watch how its done and maybe next time you won't be left with your dick hanging in the wind.
All of a sudden Carter realized that this was the same truck driver that he had toyed with on the highway.
Without losing his rythm, the trucker kept fucking Tasha's mouth. Inch by inch, she was taking it all in.
He grabbed her head with both hands and began to pump his cock faster and faster.
"Look up at Daddy with those pretty blue eyes."
Tasha looked up with her blood shot eyes, when suddenly his cock blasted her mouth with his hot creamy load. It wasjust to much for her to handle and most of the came dribbling out. The trucker pulled his cock out and jerked it off as a few more spurts of cum landed on her pouty lips. With the tip of his cock, he smeared the sticky liquid all over her face.
With his cock still rock hard, he picked Tasha off the toilet. He stepped on her shorts that were still down ather ankles as he lifted her into the air. With her legs now free, he slowly eased her down onto the tip of his cock. Even though she didn't want to admit it, Tasha's pussy was already wet.
Her eyes looked glazed as the truck driver's thick black cock entered her tight pussy. The pain of being stretched out was unavoidable but her body seemed to be helping. She straddled his cock and her legs wrapped around his.

Tasha's bra-covered tits were bouncing in his face as he impaled her with his dick. The two fucked furiouslyand didn't even noticed when Carter snuck out. Crying that he was helpless he walked to his car and drove back home.
He pinned her body against the bathroom wall as his hands held on to her tiny ass floating in the air.
"Tell Daddy how badly you want this cock!"
"Oh my God, Daddy. I love your black cock."
Her hips were now grinding against his body and she tensed up.
"More Daddy, more!"
"Oh yes Daddy! I'M CUMMING!!"
He grunted as his cock slammed into her soaking wet pussy.
"Take all of Daddy's cum! Daddy's cumming deep inside of you!!"
His cock filled her pussy with load after load. He lowered her down as she leaned against the wall gasping for air. The truck driver grabbed his pants off the ground, zipped up, and walked back to his truck. He looked around for the Maseratit but it was no where to be found.
Tasha asked as she gathered herself, "Did he just leave me stranded here?
"Well you're more than welcome to go on the road with me Sweetie."
Knowing she had no other choice, Tasha followed him to his truck.
The trucker laughed to himself, "Looks like Daddy won't be needing a lot lizard for a long time."
With a puzzled look, Tasha hesitantly stepped up into the cab and asked, "What? Umm what is a lot lizard?"
 
We all have to start sometime. I had a lot of help from Lit when I began and I'm still learning all the time. May I suggest you submit the stories to an editor (there is a special thread for that - experts, not amatures like me) and then submit them to the story threads.

Well done. :kiss:
 
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