Need tips on adding psychological humiliation

[Mothbite]

So, a few weeks back, I put out a thread requesting a Dick Tracy story, specifically dealing with noncon involving his wife Tess with a low-level villain. Unlike many other times, I actually decided to write this one out after no responses. The overall plot can be found on the first post here: http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=719931&highlight=tess

So, Ive decided the main driving force for this story is sexual humiliation...not in the physical sense, but more the psychological sense. Here are some bigger examples:

1) The obvious one: Tess is coerced into giving up her body to a villain, in order to save her husband from a sure to be fatal ambush. No, the villain is not a powerful crime boss....this is a B-grade villain who hasn't had much luck with any criminal exploits in the comic strip. Yet, in terms of revenge, he's going to surpass every other villain by taking the detective's stacked hot blonde wife. This is happening in their own home, in their own bedroom.

2) An element of doubt on Tess's part: she's only going through with this to save her husband. But she's going to be haunted by the thought of whether she could have resisted in any other way, taken a third option.

3) Cliche, but she's going to end up enjoying the intercourse. Due to the villain inevitably being better hung/better in bed than the detective.

4) The villain is Brow Jr. (son of a famous villain, his deformity being a large brow with many folds). Now, my idea is that because of his deformity, no woman would have him, and he only got with his now-dead GF because she also had a villain-deformity. The contrast between his ugly self and Tess's beautiful figure would factor into the humiliation. Heck, I'm even considering making him a virgin (which I somehow find hot: that this virgin loser of a hoodlum is getting to lose it to Tess).

Those bigger factors, Ive got down. What I'm looking to get help on is inserting smaller bits of humiliation, actions, information, and/or circumstances that I can insert into the story that add to the humiliation of revenge that arouses the hoodlum (and hopefully the reader).

 

[silverwhisper]

well, of course she's going to enjoy it!

something to consider: tracy's a real straight arrow, isn't he? maybe that means he just isn't very interesting in the sack so if brow jr is a big-time kinkster & has tess doing things for the first time, that's gonna be huge.

maybe tess finds she likes giving head, or tasting herself on cock, or having his jizz run down her thighs cuz she isn't wearing panties afterwards.

ed

 

[Emptysodabottle]

Dialogue can be highly effective too. You can have Brow Jr taunting Tess as he's fucking her and getting her off, insinuating that maybe she secretly welcomed the opportunity of getting taken, wanting the virility of a young cock like his. Of course, don't make this the truth, but Tess could be at a loss for words, not being able to deny it (as she IS getting off).

Hey, even her maiden name is cause for her humiliation. Tess Trueheart. Looks like she couldn't stay true to the end.

 

[Bob Waters]

So, a few weeks back, I put out a thread requesting a Dick Tracy story, specifically dealing with noncon involving his wife Tess with a low-level villain. Unlike many other times, I actually decided to write this one out after no responses. The overall plot can be found on the first post here: http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=719931&highlight=tess

So, Ive decided the main driving force for this story is sexual humiliation...not in the physical sense, but more the psychological sense. Here are some bigger examples:

1) The obvious one: Tess is coerced into giving up her body to a villain, in order to save her husband from a sure to be fatal ambush. No, the villain is not a powerful crime boss....this is a B-grade villain who hasn't had much luck with any criminal exploits in the comic strip. Yet, in terms of revenge, he's going to surpass every other villain by taking the detective's stacked hot blonde wife. This is happening in their own home, in their own bedroom.

2) An element of doubt on Tess's part: she's only going through with this to save her husband. But she's going to be haunted by the thought of whether she could have resisted in any other way, taken a third option.

3) Cliche, but she's going to end up enjoying the intercourse. Due to the villain inevitably being better hung/better in bed than the detective.

4) The villain is Brow Jr. (son of a famous villain, his deformity being a large brow with many folds). Now, my idea is that because of his deformity, no woman would have him, and he only got with his now-dead GF because she also had a villain-deformity. The contrast between his ugly self and Tess's beautiful figure would factor into the humiliation. Heck, I'm even considering making him a virgin (which I somehow find hot: that this virgin loser of a hoodlum is getting to lose it to Tess).

Those bigger factors, Ive got down. What I'm looking to get help on is inserting smaller bits of humiliation, actions, information, and/or circumstances that I can insert into the story that add to the humiliation of revenge that arouses the hoodlum (and hopefully the reader).

She finds him physically repulsive and being forced to service him turns her on - which disgusts her. It's a common sub fantasy being 'forced' to service someone she finds repellent - and they turn out to be amazing in bed.

 

[HeyAll]

Anal is always good.


Perhaps force her to tell him how much awful it is with her husband, and that she loves his cock better.

 

[psyburn21]

She finds him physically repulsive and being forced to service him turns her on - which disgusts her. It's a common sub fantasy being 'forced' to service someone she finds repellent - and they turn out to be amazing in bed.

That works perfectly into the villian's deformity idea. She's disgusted by him and his deformity and yet oddly turned on by it as well. You could also have her kissing his brow during sex (another act that would disgust her outside of sex) or other little things.

 

[psyburn21]

3) Cliche, but she's going to end up enjoying the intercourse. Due to the villain inevitably being better hung/better in bed than the detective.

4)
Heck, I'm even considering making him a virgin (which I somehow find hot: that this virgin loser of a hoodlum is getting to lose it to Tess).

I like those ideas but you may wanna spell out why or how he's better at sex, especially if he's a virgin at the start. While better hung can be part of that, there should be other reasons for why he's better. You could even have that come out when she finally breaks down and admits to loving sex with him.

 

[katt2007]

This sounds great! I can think of lots of humiliating things he could make her do, or do to her.

For example, cum all over her face, piss in her mouth, make her lick his asshole, dress up in tarty clothes, be gangbanged by his henchmen, forced to strip at a sleazy strip joint (maybe he owns it).

I think the most humiliating of all though is to make her play a part. In order to get her husband off the hook, she has to act the part of a whore for the night, actually finding customers herself in sleazy bars. She has to take them into the restrooms to fuck them and must do a certain number in the evening to keep her husband alive.

I love this sort of story.

 

[busty_jessica_2]

This sounds great! I can think of lots of humiliating things he could make her do, or do to her.

For example, cum all over her face, piss in her mouth, make her lick his asshole, dress up in tarty clothes, be gangbanged by his henchmen, forced to strip at a sleazy strip joint (maybe he owns it).

I think the most humiliating of all though is to make her play a part. In order to get her husband off the hook, she has to act the part of a whore for the night, actually finding customers herself in sleazy bars. She has to take them into the restrooms to fuck them and must do a certain number in the evening to keep her husband alive.

I love this sort of story.

damn i love all of youar nasty wicked ideas!! love your way of thinking

 

[Mothbite]

This sounds great! I can think of lots of humiliating things he could make her do, or do to her.

For example, cum all over her face, piss in her mouth, make her lick his asshole, dress up in tarty clothes, be gangbanged by his henchmen, forced to strip at a sleazy strip joint (maybe he owns it).

I think the most humiliating of all though is to make her play a part. In order to get her husband off the hook, she has to act the part of a whore for the night, actually finding customers herself in sleazy bars. She has to take them into the restrooms to fuck them and must do a certain number in the evening to keep her husband alive.

I love this sort of story.

You're kind of missing the point of this thread. I want psychological touches that DON'T involve physical humiliations like that---not really into anything you listed there. And I don't intend on having him share with anyone----why would he, considering this is his crowning feat?

I'm looking for small humiliations---like say, Brow decides to take her on the kitchen counter: now, every time she's working in the kitchen for her family, she'll have what transpired in mind for as long as they live there.

 

[Cold_Eyes]

I love when the sub keeps fighting well into the story by attempting to keep up a facade and she is half in denial and half keeping up appearances. It's pretty standard to have the dom take note of her physical response, but you could use this to slowly chip away at her mental defenses.

For example:

Brow (after removing Tess's top): Ah, your nipples are hard.

Tess: It's cold in here.

Brow: The thermometer in that window says 75 degrees.

Another example: Tess orgasms and lets something slip when she does, like "Oh, fuck me!" Then Brow stops for a moment to comment:

Brow: You came, didn't you?

Tess: You're sick if you think I'm enjoying this!

Brow reveals a tape recorder, rewinds to her orgasm, and plays it back to her. She can't accept the fact that she came, but her voice on tape is telling her otherwise. She's also can't believe how intense her moaning is (she's never heard herself having sex on tape, obviously). Then the noise comes to a climax and she hears herself utter the line ("Fuck me!" or whatever it may be) right as Brow begins to slide back inside her. He then clicks the record button on the recorder again.

 

[katt2007]

You're kind of missing the point of this thread. I want psychological touches that DON'T involve physical humiliations like that---not really into anything you listed there. And I don't intend on having him share with anyone----why would he, considering this is his crowning feat?

I'm looking for small humiliations---like say, Brow decides to take her on the kitchen counter: now, every time she's working in the kitchen for her family, she'll have what transpired in mind for as long as they live there.

How is taking her on the kitchen counter not physical?

 

[Mothbite]

How is taking her on the kitchen counter not physical?

I mean the humiliation is not in the physical act itself, but in the psychological implications it holds. Piss in the mouth would humiliate mostly anyone. But say Brow were to take her over someone else's kitchen counter. Fine, aside from the intercourse itself, it holds no humiliating implications. But if she gets taken on HER home's kitchen counter, then she has a psychological burden as she has to confront the memory of the act every day in her home.

 

[Cold_Eyes]

I mean the humiliation is not in the physical act itself, but in the psychological implications it holds. Piss in the mouth would humiliate mostly anyone. But say Brow were to take her over someone else's kitchen counter. Fine, aside from the intercourse itself, it holds no humiliating implications. But if she gets taken on HER home's kitchen counter, then she has a psychological burden as she has to confront the memory of the act every day in her home.

That's the kind of humiliation I love to see. As "the punishment should fit the crime," the humiliation should fit the character's fear. Great humiliation targets the character's psychological weak points.

 

[LOAnnie2]

In her own bed, in any sexual positions her husband really enjoys, any she really enjoys--then not only will she every time she has sex in her bed, but anytime she'd have sex in her or her husband's favorite positions, it comes back to her.

As someone else said, anal is good. Getting her off during it is better.

 

[Emptysodabottle]

I'd recommend you stick in a paragraph or two that shapes out how pathetic this villain is....it'd signify how Tess' luck must have taken a real fall for the worst, if of all the villains she'd finally fall victim to, this punching bag villain is the one pumping her from behind.

I'd also stick in a sentence or two about how avoidable this could have been. You could have Tess thinking as she's about to be taken, going over all the "if only's" that would have led to this villain being soundly defeated....luck itself, the villain's in this case, can play a part in humiliation.

Anyone have any way to expand on these two ideas?

 

[Mothbite]

Thanks for the suggestions, men and women! A couple of ideas have promise...I'm going into re-outlining as we speak.

In the mean time, if anyone else has another tip on this story, go right on ahead and speak your piece.

 

[Mothbite]

Okay, so I need more input. Should I make Brow Jr a virgin...and come up with a reason he's so good at what he does (psyburn21, lookin at you)? Or should I just say he had previous experience with his equally deformed GF, and that's how he's so good at what he does (and that this just is his first time with someone who's actually hot). Which one sounds more humiliating?

 

[cuck_wantobe]

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[Mothbite]

I think it would be more humiliating for her if he wasn't very good and she came anyway. That would have to leave her wondering, "What the hell's wrong with me."

What's a semi-realistic explanation for that?

 

[cuck_wantobe]

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[Mothbite]

Interesting---and fair, plausible.

I take it by your name that you're a connoisseur on story situations similar to parts of my story. Have you anything else to add in general?

 

[cuck_wantobe]

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[PacoFear]

I mean the humiliation is not in the physical act itself, but in the psychological implications it holds. Piss in the mouth would humiliate mostly anyone. But say Brow were to take her over someone else's kitchen counter. Fine, aside from the intercourse itself, it holds no humiliating implications. But if she gets taken on HER home's kitchen counter, then she has a psychological burden as she has to confront the memory of the act every day in her home.

A Proposed Map to Humiliating Locations in Tess's House:

Kitchen counter<dining room table<<her marital bed<<<her son/daughter's bed

Dining room table trumps kitchen counter because it's where the family actually eats. The rest should be more or less self-explanatory.

If you're willing to teeter into gross-ville, there's any number of humiliating acts to perform in a bathroom. Not my cup of tea. I suspect you'd turn off a few readers too.

Just my $0.02.

-PF

 

[psyburn21]

Okay, so I need more input. Should I make Brow Jr a virgin...and come up with a reason he's so good at what he does (psyburn21, lookin at you)? Or should I just say he had previous experience with his equally deformed GF, and that's how he's so good at what he does (and that this just is his first time with someone who's actually hot). Which one sounds more humiliating?

lol, I guess I should be honored you thought of what I said considering I'm new here. I think cuck_wantobe suggestions are good ones if your gonna go the virgin and size route. If I can think of some more suggestions for you I'll post. To be honest though, I might use some of these suggestions for my story since I've been trying to figure out the psychological aspects of the characters in my story.