Need some tips for a lesbian story

[Trombonus]

Hey all,

I seem to have written myself into a corner concerning a situation I know nothing about. I've written and submitted the first chapter of a story involving a group of guys and girls at college, and the first chapter was about the main character James, having sex with a girl he cares about, Lisa, who happens to be a virgin. She is a member of a fairly large sorority, and all the girls are sexually active, and most are bisexual, including her best friend in the sorority house Jenny, and the president, Lauren (Whose name I will probably change later). Anyway, If you read the first chapter you'll find that Lisa has sex for the first time, experiences her firsat orgasm, but is unable to give one to James. The second chapter is set the next day and she is confiding to Jenny and Lauren that she couldn't bring James to orgasm, and Jenny and Lauren plan to teach her how to have sex. I was planning on having the two friends demonstrate oral sex on a dildo, and various "woman on top" positions using a strap on, then having Lisa copy them in turn, leading to a three way with the girls. Being a guy, I know absolutely nothing about this subject, and am finding it difficult to write about this. I've been reading a few lesbian stories, but I was hoping for some tips or suggestions, as well as any feedback you guys might have. If you want to check out the first chapter just look at the link in my profile, or e-mail me and I'll send you the link. Also if you want to read what I have so far in the second chapter e-mail and I'll send the file over. Any help would be greatly appreciated!

Chris J.

trombonus_maximus@hotmail.com
CJMusicman81 - AIM

 

[Roxanne Appleby]

Excerpt from my Susan's Girl-Lust Satisfied:

The two younger women untangled themselves and climbed down between Susan’s parted thighs. She had spread her legs widely, and her dripping, reddened pussy was throbbing with lust. “Look, Sophie, this is a clit.” Jean was teasing, and matched actions to words by reaching out and tapping the inflamed nub, which was peaking out from its protective hood. “You lick it with your tongue and lightly suck it.”

Susan moaned at the lewd instructions from one girl to the other.

Jean continued with her maddening lesson, prodding a finger in Susan’s dripping hole. “And this is a vagina. You stick your tongue in it.”

Susan moaned again, and thrust her hips.

“Now the first taste is kind of hard to take, but after a minute you get over that, and it gets kind of exciting.” For the first time Jean was telling Sophie something she didn’t know, and the reluctant girl nodded her head. “Really, it gets pretty exciting after the first shock,” Jean said softly. “And when you see the pleasure you can provide it makes you feel – I dunno, powerful I guess.” Jean motioned to Sophie, and with only another minor hesitation, the voluptuous brunette tentatively reached out her tongue . . .

 

[Tom Collins]

Here, dude. Read this.

How To Write Lesbian Sex Scenes
by Colleen Thomas

 

[Carnevil9]

I read your first chapter, it was quite good.

Since Jenny has already seen James naked, why not have Jenny and Lauren demonstrate blowjob and penetration tecniques directly on him, while Lisa watches? They take turns stimulating him but not bringing him off, and then let Lisa try to bring him over the edge. Does she succeed or not? Well, of course that's up to the author, so I wouldn't presume to guess.

Just a thought!......Carney

 

[Trombonus]

I read your first chapter, it was quite good.

Since Jenny has already seen James naked, why not have Jenny and Lauren demonstrate blowjob and penetration tecniques directly on him, while Lisa watches? They take turns stimulating him but not bringing him off, and then let Lisa try to bring him over the edge. Does she succeed or not? Well, of course that's up to the author, so I wouldn't presume to guess.

Just a thought!......Carney

First off, thanks to everyone for the comments.

In response to your suggestion, I like the idea a lot, and in all truthfulness I do plan to have Jenny, Lisa, and James involved in a threesome, as well as some other "adventures" with some other girls and guys I introduce in my second chapter. My thought behind all this is that the day after the first time, James is away at work all day, and Lisa wants to learn how to please him so that she can surprise him when he gets home, and sort of make up for her shortcomings the night before. That'll either be chapter 3 or the end of chapter 2. I also want to focus on the sorority sisters comaraderie, and the fact that they look after each other. Lisa's character is very innocent, while Jenny is very wild and Lauren is more the authoritative, responsible type. I think it would be hard for Lisa to go along with the idea of having the girls work on James in front of her, and I think James would be uncomfortable too as he and Lisa are very much in love. Eventually they will be more open to it and we'll see more interaction with the other sisters, but for right now I want their relationship to be between them. To be honest, so far in the story Lisa has been very reluctant, but the other girls have been very comforting to her and have slowly convinced her to go along with their idea. If you read my chapter 2 so far you would probably get a better idea of what direction my story is going to take. I'll try and post it, I don't know if putting the whole thing on a thread is a good idea since it's already like 10 pages long in word.

Thanks for the suggestion though, and it's a great idea. Keep 'em coming!

 

[Oblimo]

Here, dude. Read this.

How To Write Lesbian Sex Scenes
by Colleen Thomas

Wow, that's a great How-To. She nails it square.

I wish I had been around to know her.

 

[Trombonus]

Wow, that's a great How-To. She nails it square.

I wish I had been around to know her.

Agreed, it was really well written, and really helpful. Thanks for telling me about the article Tom!