SpotInTheSand
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- Apr 26, 2007
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Howdy all --
I just posted my first story up here, in the Toys & Masturbation category. It's called Brad's Road Trip Ch. 01 (admittedly, the title sucks. I knew that when I submitted it. Unfortunately, my creativity and imagination don't seem to function in the 10-words-or-less category.) The story is here:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=317275
It's a story about a guy who's about to go on a road trip across the country, starting at his final military station and eventually ending up in his hometown. As the "Ch. 01" suggests, there will be subsequent chapters. The first one finds Brad meeting someone new before he leaves and having a bit of unexpected fun over the phone.
Let me know what you think, but I actually need a little help, too (this next part will make sense after you've read it). I want to keep Kelly as an integral part of his trip. They'll talk every day, but obviously, this guy is gonna be getting himself quite a bit of action. My quandary is how to present all of this and still keep his phone calls to Kelly pertinent.
I see three options: 1) Just write everything in first person, including the lead-up to the sex, the actual sex, and the phone calls. The problem is.. if I describe all the sex before the, Kelly's going to want Brad to describe the sex during the call, too. That will get repetitive or choppy, and I'm not a fan of either. 2) Start most of the chapters with them talking on the phone, then when they get to the part where Brad tells her about his day, go into mini-flashback mode and tell the story in first person, then come back to the phone call when it's over. 3) Do all of it in a phone call. i.e. everything is a phone conversation. All of the sex and other activities is recounted as dialogue between Brad and Kelly. That could get fairly repetitive, as well.
Anyway, if you've made it this far, thanks for your help. I've already finished the next couple of sections but have yet to submit them because I'd like to know how you guys think it should continue.
I just posted my first story up here, in the Toys & Masturbation category. It's called Brad's Road Trip Ch. 01 (admittedly, the title sucks. I knew that when I submitted it. Unfortunately, my creativity and imagination don't seem to function in the 10-words-or-less category.) The story is here:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=317275
It's a story about a guy who's about to go on a road trip across the country, starting at his final military station and eventually ending up in his hometown. As the "Ch. 01" suggests, there will be subsequent chapters. The first one finds Brad meeting someone new before he leaves and having a bit of unexpected fun over the phone.
Let me know what you think, but I actually need a little help, too (this next part will make sense after you've read it). I want to keep Kelly as an integral part of his trip. They'll talk every day, but obviously, this guy is gonna be getting himself quite a bit of action. My quandary is how to present all of this and still keep his phone calls to Kelly pertinent.
I see three options: 1) Just write everything in first person, including the lead-up to the sex, the actual sex, and the phone calls. The problem is.. if I describe all the sex before the, Kelly's going to want Brad to describe the sex during the call, too. That will get repetitive or choppy, and I'm not a fan of either. 2) Start most of the chapters with them talking on the phone, then when they get to the part where Brad tells her about his day, go into mini-flashback mode and tell the story in first person, then come back to the phone call when it's over. 3) Do all of it in a phone call. i.e. everything is a phone conversation. All of the sex and other activities is recounted as dialogue between Brad and Kelly. That could get fairly repetitive, as well.
Anyway, if you've made it this far, thanks for your help. I've already finished the next couple of sections but have yet to submit them because I'd like to know how you guys think it should continue.
