Need some advice on a fetish story

[nylondude]

Hi. I just joined this forum and so far it looks like there is a lot of friendly people here.
Anyway, I have just started writing a fiction story based on my real life experience and was curious which way to take it. So far there is no real sexual premise besides a few references to the main character having a fetish. Based on what i have written i already have ideas for erotic and non erotic, i just don't know which to do. If i do erotic it might seem a little cliche and maybe similar to other stories. However if i do non erotic i think it would be more of a romance and eventually lead into erotica but might take a bit to develop the story.

As this is my first story it might not be well structured either so any comments or suggestions at all would be greatly appreciated.

 

[nylondude]

Chapter 1

Ian had just graduated from high school and started his first year in college. He loved college, there were a lot of nice looking girls and he was ready for a new girlfriend. He also start his new job at an amusement park and that's when his life changed when an old classmate IMed him one normal afternoon.

Lily: Hey Ian! How’s it going? I heard you got a job at the amusement park.
Ian: Hey Lily. Ya I’ve been working there for a couple months now.
Lily: That’s cool. I’m going to apply there tomorrow and was wondering if you had any tips if I get an interview.
Ian: I wouldn’t worry about it to much. The process was very straight forward and I got the job the same day I applied.
Lily: Wow! I’m not too worried; I’m just having trouble finding something to wear.
Ian: Oh. Do you have any ideas? I saw some girls applying when I was, I can try and help you figure it out.
Lily: I was thinking of going with a nice shirt, black skirt, nylons, and heels.

Ian’s eyes widely opened at the thought of Lily wearing pantyhose. He had seen her walking around school many times but she was always wearing jeans and never really thought about it before.

Ian: That sound’s great! Sounds very professional and should do fine.
Lily: Really? I thought it might be too much.
Ian: Not at all. You would be surprised on how strict they are with the dress code.
Lily: Haha probably. Well thanks for the help.
Ian: No problem. Hey we should hang out some time, just as friends.
Lily: Sounds like a good idea. How about Tuesday? We can see a movie maybe?
Ian: Ok, see you then.

He was shocked that Lily wanted to go see a movie with him. It started sounding like a date, but he didn’t want to try anything since they were going as friends only. On top of that, he knew that Lily was still getting over a recent break up with her boyfriend and she probably wanted some time before dating again.

As Tuesday night approached, he couldn’t get Lily out of his mind. He hadn’t seen her since graduation and was getting very excited to see her but was a little worried he was going to make a fool out of himself. He was conflicted on what to wear because he didn’t want to overdress and make her feel awkward. He finally decided on jeans and t-shirt and left for the movies.

When he saw Lily walking towards him at the theatre he couldn’t help but notice that she looked just as beautiful as when he last saw her. She was dressed pretty casual in flattering jeans and a sweatshirt. Ian kept thinking how amazing she was going to look when she went in for the interview. He was glad he was wearing a sweatshirt to hide his growing erection.

“Hey Lily.”

“Hey Ian!” she exclaimed as she walked over and gave Ian a big hug.

“It’s nice to see you again how are you?”

“I’m doing pretty good. My days off always put me in a good mood” he pronounced.

As they were waiting in line for tickets, Lily was thinking about how deep and defined Ian’s voice has become and how great he looked now.

“Shall we head in?” Ian asked, pointing in the direction of the entrance.

“Lets.”

They both walked in and entered the big theatre. They arrived a bit early and there was only a couple other people in the theatre. They went to the seats toward the back and sat down and started talking about their exes and other small talk. Ian started talking about working at the amusement park and stated how he hates the outfits he has to wear.

“That’s the one thing I hate about working there, the uniforms suck, at least for guys,”

He thought, since they were just friends he could tell her anything and thus was going to try and find a way to tell her his secret fetish for pantyhose.

“Are the uniforms any better for girls?” she asked

“Yeah they are a lot better. It kind of sucks though because some of them wear something that turns me on but that’s a whole different story.”

Ian could tell Lily was intrigued by what he just said and she kept asking him to tell her what it was. He retorted saying he didn’t want to sound weird or anything, even though he knew he was going to tell her anyway. She finally just started guessing.

“Is it like dresses or something? Or maybe heels?”

“No,” he answered and started to laugh.

“Is it… nylons?”

“Maybe…” he said trying to act obvious that she was right.

“It is huh? That’s not bad. I wear them all the time,” she stated.

Ian could hardly control himself at this point. He had no idea she wore them all the time. He thought she only wore jeans and was the type of girl that always wore flip flops and was always very casual.

He has never been so sad to see a movie start.

 

[driphoney]

Hi. I just joined this forum and so far it looks like there is a lot of friendly people here.
Anyway, I have just started writing a fiction story based on my real life experience and was curious which way to take it. So far there is no real sexual premise besides a few references to the main character having a fetish. Based on what i have written i already have ideas for erotic and non erotic, i just don't know which to do. If i do erotic it might seem a little cliche and maybe similar to other stories. However if i do non erotic i think it would be more of a romance and eventually lead into erotica but might take a bit to develop the story.

As this is my first story it might not be well structured either so any comments or suggestions at all would be greatly appreciated.

I suggest you take the time and read these:

The 10 Commandments by The Earl

Writing Quality Sex Scenes by The Earl

Then, since you asked, I think you should write both versions, then see which one you like best. Give it to a couple of trusted friends for an honest critique that won't rip you to shreds. After you have your favorite one picked, find an editor. If both versions end up with a good story, change the names and any proper name locations in the second and post both of them! You'd get a twofer!

Good luck!

 

[nylondude]

ok thanks ill keep all that into consideration