Need help with some ideas...

[EroticWhispers77]

Hi. I'm currently working on a story. My only problem, though, is that I didn't have a plot (or much of an idea) when I began. It was one of those things where I took pen to paper (litterally) and before I knew it I had written three (long hand) pages of a pretty decent intro.

So, here's where I am. There is this young woman, Marti (Martina Sheppard), who graduated college one year early due to excellent grades and hard work. Her sophomore year in college she took an internship at a law firm. Now she's applying for a "real" paying job as a legal secretary in the firm.

Now here's the small "plot twist" for the story with no plot. The summer between high school and college she briefly stripped so she could save up some money for school. Even though stripping is "legit work" and not whoring, she can't help but feel like a whore. The job proved to be more embarrassing than fun, for her, and once she started college she vowed to do everything in her power to keep her past behind her.

But, the law firm's partners know about her brief job as a stripper. They always do background checks on applicants since they are a law firm and there's always a lot of confidential information floating around.

So, the man who is interviewing Marti decides to use his information to blackmail her into sexual favors once she gets the job.



Is this a good idea/plot so far? Has this version been done at Lit before? Does anyone have any other ideas or suggestions to improve this story?

 

[Seattle Zack]

This is a great idea for a story. Everything's been done before, so don't worry about that. Make the characters realistic and compelling, and people will enjoy reading it.

In order for a plot to work, the main character needs to change somehow by the end of the story. Throw in a conflict and a resolution and you've got a plot. One thing you might try is writing out some details about the main characters, just for your own reference, so you can make their actions more realistic.

Maybe she secretly enjoyed the stripping and exhibitionism, so that could be a conflict right there. Maybe she sets up a secret video camera and blackmails her boss back into giving her a promotion. Maybe she starts a lesbian affair with one of the partners and ends up becoming his boss. These are just ideas, but you've got a good starting point.

Most of all, have fun with it. Write something you like and peope will read it.

 

[EroticWhispers77]

Thank you for your input Zack.

Now I think I'm off to read your stories for a while.

 

[A7inchPhildo]

So, here's where I am. There is this young woman, Marti (Martina Sheppard),
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So, the man who is interviewing Marti decides to use his information to blackmail her into sexual favors once she gets the job.



Is this a good idea/plot so far? Has this version been done at Lit before? Does anyone have any other ideas or suggestions to improve this story?

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The idea is kool.

I Do not like the name not very erotic, more like a male who molests sheep comes to mind. Marty Mc fly?

How or why after she gets the Job? Would not then the problem be for the man who hired her knowing this blemish?
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Work on how she begins to strip once more, or perhaps one of the men who is away on vacation while she is hired returns and recognizes her, and gives her a good tip.

She can still have blackmail sex with the interviewer to get the job. Then she could blackmail him for sexual harasement or the whole firm, then she could pick and choose who is her slave for the day.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Everything has been done before, they key is to try and find something that hasn't been done to death

It seems a good start for a story, depending on where you are heading with it. Often when I just take pen to paper the stories take on a life of their own and more or less write themselves. When that happens the story usually comes out to be one of my stronger efforts with the best characters and story lines.

My adice is to let this one tell itself first. If your idea runs dry or the characters run out of steam then look for a twist or solid idea to carry it from there, but as long as the words are coming, go with them.

-Colly

 

[EroticWhispers77]

Phildo,

I was thinking about having the interviewer "casually" mention Marti's past during the interview and saying something like "I sure hope your past won't be a problem for us at Boyd, Fielding, and Smith" with a stern, almost fatherly, look on his face. Embarrassed, she will visually blush and assure him that it won't be a problem. I think that is where the blackmailing, or "trade" of sexual favors for a job with the firm, will take place.

Thanks for the ideas. Originally I never thought about making one of the partners a woman. I could easily do so since I never gave Smith a first name. I did name Boyd and Fielding (the interviewer) already, though, and I like the way those characters are coming along. I think I will keep them as is. Smith could easily be a woman, though.

I like the name Marti and do plan to keep it. I think if you closed your eyes and tried to picture a female Marti (not Marty) you may be surprised at what kind of woman she'd be.

I'm not going to have her go back to stripping, though. It's in her past, and she worked hard during college to keep it buried. I think having her go to school to become a legal secretary (and then to go to law school the following fall) shows a person choosing to better themself.

Being more or less "forced" into sexual favors at the firm in exchange for its silence, Marti agrees to do what he (or they) want(s). I'm going to write in the story how ashamed Marti is by her past. She knows if word got out it would devistate her family. So, that's why she's so willing to comply with the "blackmail".

 

[EroticWhispers77]

Colleen,

I've heard a lot of people say that "everything" has been done at Lit, but I thought that was more or less a "Lit joke". I thought this was truly something different.

No matter, though. Having never read something like this at Lit it should be very easy for me to make it my own!

I know what you mean about a story writing itself when you write it long hand. For me, anyway, it's much easier than typing from scratch.

 

[Colleen Thomas]

Colleen,

I've heard a lot of people say that "everything" has been done at Lit, but I thought that was more or less a "Lit joke". I thought this was truly something different.

No matter, though. Having never read something like this at Lit it should be very easy for me to make it my own!

I know what you mean about a story writing itself when you write it long hand. For me, anyway, it's much easier than typing from scratch.

I wasn't thinking of lit, but in general everything has been done by someone sometime. Always remember you canmake any idea yours, no matter how trite, by the infusion of your "take" on it and your personality.

Ithink it will be a great story and you will do well with it, can't wait to read it

-Colly

 

[EroticWhispers77]

Thanks for the confidence!

 

[Seattle Zack]

In Hollywood there's an adage that "There are only seven plots" and with 100,000+ stories on Lit, I imagine almost everything's been done before. The writing will make the story. Real characters, an interesting storyline, and avoiding trite cliches will make for interesting reading.

Good luck with the story, let us know when it's ported!

--Zack

 

[EroticWhispers77]

So, what would be some cliches in this story line? (I have to know what to avoid. )

 

[zorrro69]

may be new variatoin of the your idea?

Hi, Whisp!
Here is something new (I think so) about your idea. What is if the employer is gay and he blackmails the young woman to seduce other married straight men in the firm, and after that he takes pictures with them (while making sex ) and blackmails men to have sex with them?

 

[Colleen Thomas]

So, what would be some cliches in this story line? (I have to know what to avoid. )

1.) Marti discovers she is a bottom and sexual sub. the blackmale turns to willing servitude line has been done to death.

2.) She ends up being the office slut, passed around from Ceo to Ceo. Done to death too.

Those are the ones that come to mind immideiately.

-Colly

 

[Seattle Zack]

Yes, those are both overdone storylines ... the "unleashing the hidden slut" thing is the theme in more than half the stories, it seems ...

I was thinking more about avoiding character cliches -- you know, the incredibly beautiful blond with impossible tits, the muscular bodybuilder with the always-erect ten-inch cock.

 

[EroticWhispers77]

I was thinking more about avoiding character cliches -- you know, the incredibly beautiful blond with impossible tits, the muscular bodybuilder with the always-erect ten-inch cock.

Well, so far the male main character (the blackmailer) is 52 and it's already been mentioned that his body is far from a "body builder stud's".

And I don't like balloon titties, so no worries there... lol

 

[HawaiiBill]

. . . and don't talk about it too much!

One of the cardinal rules -- with most writers, anyway -- is not to talk about your stories. Write them. You can see in this good-natured thread that many are quick to offer "suggestions." Unless you really get lucky -- and aren't we all? -- you will merely pick up some confusion. I found Zack's words very well put and helpful, by the way.,

Stick with YOUR story. I'm listed in the volunteer editors here and would be proud to help you if you ask. My efforts are always toward getting the writer's story told in the best possible way. NOT to change the story to some idea in my brain

Aloha from the middle of the Pacific Ocean.

 

[A7inchPhildo]

Just go with it, and make it seem as real as possible. Have all the office scenes been done? Hell no! I want to read your version every person tells the same point A to point B story but the interactions are all different.

If ten persons observe the same event each story is based on the same topic, but each person also has a different point of perception based on what they focused upon. Some stories are not as good to get the point across and some will tell the reader exactly what they wanted to know. To make it seem real takes time to give good details and a feel for what is the envirement. Of course as others stated eliminate the over exagerated truths.

Martina = visual for me is a female of 35, 5'4", latino, thin body tight jaw and short business like hair style, brown eyes. Fast sharp witted, commenting on the relavence of a situation. A woman who separates work and play, thus being a sharp dresser.

OK that is sexy but still could be lost with the jumble of mens names. (I know you are going to use it, just my thoughts.)

 

[Green_Gem]

I agree totally that Zack has given you some very sound advice in respect of your story, together with some really good scenarios. One that hasn't been mentioned though, which might be worth exploring is that Marti, after being appointed and been forced to perform sexual favors, gains confidence and begins to assert herself, plotting some kind of revenge. Perhaps, coming to terms with her past and using it to trap the person blackmailing her. What if she were to become his most desirable sex goddess, drawing him in with her sexual skill and prowess, almost getting him addicted to her and then when she becomes almost indispensible to him sexually, she drops him, makes him suffer, has the tables turned on him. It would take some exploring and skillful planning but it seems from your intro that you are into detail and have the makings of an excellent story.

All the best with it and let us know when it is online. I would love to read it.

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