TabooTeller
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This is a bit long hopefully not toolong
I would like some suggestions even though just talking about might cause my mind to find its own answer.
I have one set up with three stories.
That means the opening for each story is the same. In this case it is a man in his mid to late forties checks in to a nice hotel for a two night stay. The room has been reserved for a month or more because it was supposed to be for him and his wife’s twentieth wedding anniversary. However he is alone. As he is checking, or maybe right after he is checked in has come back down, in he hears a disturbance. Seems that a newlywed couple do not have a place to stay for the night. They had reserved one and even double checked but because the hotel messed up there is no room for that night. There is one for the next day and the following week as planned but not that evening. There is no place for them to stay, not even a Hotel Six around. He, whom I will call Jim for now, decides to let them have his suite, or the bedroom part of the suite. They don’t want to take it but its that or sleep on the street. So they all go up, and they use the bedroom. He of course watches them have sex for the first time. Yes for this story it works out more erotic if they are virgins. They may or may not know he is watching.
Story number One has Jim there by himself because Jill, his wife, has disappeared. She left, with no note or talk or even phone call or E-mail. Just packed a few belongings and left. The next morning the newlyweds move to their room but still keep in touch with Jim. They have a late lunch and go swimming together. It helps to get his mind of his wife. Sunday morning before they leave he shares what little he knows. They kinda know each other and are becoming friends and he has to tell someone.
He came home from work one day, and she wasn’t there. He noticed some of her stuff and a small suitcase were missing. No notice of any type to say why, with whom, where. He has searched for her. Called hospitals, hired a couple billboards and have spent time at her hang outs and talking to her friends and relatives. If anyone knows they aren’t saying.
He has come up with various sceneries to explain why. Some fantastic, some sad. Maybe she surprised a bugler who kidnapped and took some of her stuff to make it look like she left him. Now he is continually raping her or has killed her. Or she decided she didn’t love him anymore and left. All that excitement she had for their upcoming anniversary was just her trying to force herself to love him, but it didn’t work. She didn’t leave a note because she cared enough not to want to hurt his feelings. Or she used to work for the CIA and was called back, or was a mafia Princess who fled and was finally found, or she hired a PI to investigate Jim, for adultery. The PI would find nothing but maybe he faked some evidence so he could pretend to earn his money and/or help his rep.. After Jim says, “I have never even kissed another woman since I got married much less have an affair...oppps.”
The newlywed husband says, “Opps?!”
“Yes opps. I did kiss another woman recently. It was a large charity party my boss had two months ago.”
Large affair, at the mansion of a friend of his. Over a hundred people, maybe two hundred in attendance. Since Jim worked for him and his wife were expected to be there all day from 12 to 6. We were to help here and there. While wondering around helping and talking to guests we were separated four times. Once it was at least fifty minutes and could have been way over a hour.
“During that time I got into a conversation with a younger woman who had been trying to seduce me. I am not going to hurt my marriage so it was no temptation but my ego got in the way and I thought it would be neat to talk to someone who wanted to have sex with me. So we did. Part of that time we wondered around, somehow, maybe by her leading me in a way I didn’t notice we ended up in a quiet area with no people. It was a clear area with a large ten to fifteen foot wall on one side. Part of the mansion that because of the way the land was had this balcony up on top of that wall. The other side had a bunch of trees. Anyway we stopped and she moved closer, too close I moved back but somehow we ended up kissing. I don’t if I made the first move or her but we kissed long, toward the end it very hungry with tongues in each other’s mouth and nibbling on the lips. I finally realized what I was doing and pulled back. I said I was sorry for that and turned away, and went looking for my wife. It took me awhile but I found her. We won’t the only couples doing that. while looking for her I saw three other couples. One guy I know for sure was not kissing and feeling up his wife. Not sure who she was but I know his wife and it wasn’t her. I do think one couple were married.
“If she saw me or a friend saw me and told her that couple be why she hired the PI if she did. Or a friend could have told her we were the ones feeling each other up so she assumed the worst.”
Suddenly as he was thinking his face drained of blood and he says in a soft, distressed voice, “No, not that God.”
The wife asked “what?”
Jim said, “I just thought of something I hadn’t thought of before. What if instead during that fifty to over an hour time we were separated she did something. And now she is ashamed or thinks she’s a slut for doing it.”
Now that is how far I have gotten for sure. Except for one thing, the newlyweds know of a PI who is good at finding lost people. Its the husband’s uncle who still owes them a wedding present. They, esp. she wants to help this man find his wife.
I still don’t know where she is or why she took off.
I have a couple ideas, such as She was seduced by the company playboy at the charity function. He used Jim kissing the woman, either Jill saw it or he saw it and described it to her, as a wedge to get through her armor. She was in shock and was hurt thinking, with the playboy’s help, Jim was having an affair. He managed to get her to one of the mansion’s bedrooms and while she is distracted by her intense feelings he massaged her breasts and got a hand under her skirt and began to rub her clit as he suggested she do two things at once get revenge on him by doing the same thing and get some pleasure for herself that she deserves after what he just did to her. Not to mention rewarding someone who has admired her for two years. So she give sin and has sex with him. Four to six weeks later she learns two things. First Jim didn’t have sex with that woman. Someone else saw him leave after the kiss, second she learns what type of jerk the playboy is. She is ashamed for three reasons, the first and most important is that Jim didn’t cheat she did, she actually had sex with another man. Second a bit less important but still up there is that she believed the guy so easily. She knows Jim better then that. Thirdly even less important but still enough to effect her, the guy is a jerk. How could she believe him of all people? So she left out of shame.
A second scenario I thought of is similar. This time though it was the woman’s husband. He’s as much a seducer as his wife. He sees Jim and her head for the empty area so he finds Jill and takes her to the balcony above that area. He knows his wife and knows she will most probably get her man. So Jill will most probably see something. She sees the kiss and as they talk the other husband shows her the couple making out and says Jim will be doing that soon. The rest is a copy of the first scenario.
However I think than again maybe she is pregnant, and since Jim is fixed it isn’t his. Whose though?? Has she been having an affair? A one night stand while he was away? ???
Maybe she is ashamed because she had sex with his boss, neither one planed it it just worked out that they were both horny as hell, or she has sex with the owner of the mansion. She thinks that just because he is rich, has broad shoulders, gray hair at the temples and is very handsome that was no reason to cheat.
Perhaps she did hire the PI as one scenario he thinks, or she has sex with someone, doesn’t matter who, and after what happen two years ago when she let someone kiss her a bunch and feel up her breasts, (She stopped him as he got his hand under her blouse and bra to feel her naked breast) she thinks she has become a slut so she went somewhere to completely come out of the closet, so to speak. It will take a while to get past her conscious and mind set of no sex out side of marriage, but she thinks she can and should if she is a slut.
So that is where I am with this story any suggestions would be of help. If you have read this far I know its up to me but suggestions can help me decide on what direction to go, and perhaps someone has a new suggestion that would work better. If anyone responds that is. I only got one suggestion on my last request for help. Maybe a couple other writers will see this one.
I will put the second story based on this opening as another thread. It should be shorter.
TabooTeller
I would like some suggestions even though just talking about might cause my mind to find its own answer.
I have one set up with three stories.
That means the opening for each story is the same. In this case it is a man in his mid to late forties checks in to a nice hotel for a two night stay. The room has been reserved for a month or more because it was supposed to be for him and his wife’s twentieth wedding anniversary. However he is alone. As he is checking, or maybe right after he is checked in has come back down, in he hears a disturbance. Seems that a newlywed couple do not have a place to stay for the night. They had reserved one and even double checked but because the hotel messed up there is no room for that night. There is one for the next day and the following week as planned but not that evening. There is no place for them to stay, not even a Hotel Six around. He, whom I will call Jim for now, decides to let them have his suite, or the bedroom part of the suite. They don’t want to take it but its that or sleep on the street. So they all go up, and they use the bedroom. He of course watches them have sex for the first time. Yes for this story it works out more erotic if they are virgins. They may or may not know he is watching.
Story number One has Jim there by himself because Jill, his wife, has disappeared. She left, with no note or talk or even phone call or E-mail. Just packed a few belongings and left. The next morning the newlyweds move to their room but still keep in touch with Jim. They have a late lunch and go swimming together. It helps to get his mind of his wife. Sunday morning before they leave he shares what little he knows. They kinda know each other and are becoming friends and he has to tell someone.
He came home from work one day, and she wasn’t there. He noticed some of her stuff and a small suitcase were missing. No notice of any type to say why, with whom, where. He has searched for her. Called hospitals, hired a couple billboards and have spent time at her hang outs and talking to her friends and relatives. If anyone knows they aren’t saying.
He has come up with various sceneries to explain why. Some fantastic, some sad. Maybe she surprised a bugler who kidnapped and took some of her stuff to make it look like she left him. Now he is continually raping her or has killed her. Or she decided she didn’t love him anymore and left. All that excitement she had for their upcoming anniversary was just her trying to force herself to love him, but it didn’t work. She didn’t leave a note because she cared enough not to want to hurt his feelings. Or she used to work for the CIA and was called back, or was a mafia Princess who fled and was finally found, or she hired a PI to investigate Jim, for adultery. The PI would find nothing but maybe he faked some evidence so he could pretend to earn his money and/or help his rep.. After Jim says, “I have never even kissed another woman since I got married much less have an affair...oppps.”
The newlywed husband says, “Opps?!”
“Yes opps. I did kiss another woman recently. It was a large charity party my boss had two months ago.”
Large affair, at the mansion of a friend of his. Over a hundred people, maybe two hundred in attendance. Since Jim worked for him and his wife were expected to be there all day from 12 to 6. We were to help here and there. While wondering around helping and talking to guests we were separated four times. Once it was at least fifty minutes and could have been way over a hour.
“During that time I got into a conversation with a younger woman who had been trying to seduce me. I am not going to hurt my marriage so it was no temptation but my ego got in the way and I thought it would be neat to talk to someone who wanted to have sex with me. So we did. Part of that time we wondered around, somehow, maybe by her leading me in a way I didn’t notice we ended up in a quiet area with no people. It was a clear area with a large ten to fifteen foot wall on one side. Part of the mansion that because of the way the land was had this balcony up on top of that wall. The other side had a bunch of trees. Anyway we stopped and she moved closer, too close I moved back but somehow we ended up kissing. I don’t if I made the first move or her but we kissed long, toward the end it very hungry with tongues in each other’s mouth and nibbling on the lips. I finally realized what I was doing and pulled back. I said I was sorry for that and turned away, and went looking for my wife. It took me awhile but I found her. We won’t the only couples doing that. while looking for her I saw three other couples. One guy I know for sure was not kissing and feeling up his wife. Not sure who she was but I know his wife and it wasn’t her. I do think one couple were married.
“If she saw me or a friend saw me and told her that couple be why she hired the PI if she did. Or a friend could have told her we were the ones feeling each other up so she assumed the worst.”
Suddenly as he was thinking his face drained of blood and he says in a soft, distressed voice, “No, not that God.”
The wife asked “what?”
Jim said, “I just thought of something I hadn’t thought of before. What if instead during that fifty to over an hour time we were separated she did something. And now she is ashamed or thinks she’s a slut for doing it.”
Now that is how far I have gotten for sure. Except for one thing, the newlyweds know of a PI who is good at finding lost people. Its the husband’s uncle who still owes them a wedding present. They, esp. she wants to help this man find his wife.
I still don’t know where she is or why she took off.
I have a couple ideas, such as She was seduced by the company playboy at the charity function. He used Jim kissing the woman, either Jill saw it or he saw it and described it to her, as a wedge to get through her armor. She was in shock and was hurt thinking, with the playboy’s help, Jim was having an affair. He managed to get her to one of the mansion’s bedrooms and while she is distracted by her intense feelings he massaged her breasts and got a hand under her skirt and began to rub her clit as he suggested she do two things at once get revenge on him by doing the same thing and get some pleasure for herself that she deserves after what he just did to her. Not to mention rewarding someone who has admired her for two years. So she give sin and has sex with him. Four to six weeks later she learns two things. First Jim didn’t have sex with that woman. Someone else saw him leave after the kiss, second she learns what type of jerk the playboy is. She is ashamed for three reasons, the first and most important is that Jim didn’t cheat she did, she actually had sex with another man. Second a bit less important but still up there is that she believed the guy so easily. She knows Jim better then that. Thirdly even less important but still enough to effect her, the guy is a jerk. How could she believe him of all people? So she left out of shame.
A second scenario I thought of is similar. This time though it was the woman’s husband. He’s as much a seducer as his wife. He sees Jim and her head for the empty area so he finds Jill and takes her to the balcony above that area. He knows his wife and knows she will most probably get her man. So Jill will most probably see something. She sees the kiss and as they talk the other husband shows her the couple making out and says Jim will be doing that soon. The rest is a copy of the first scenario.
However I think than again maybe she is pregnant, and since Jim is fixed it isn’t his. Whose though?? Has she been having an affair? A one night stand while he was away? ???
Maybe she is ashamed because she had sex with his boss, neither one planed it it just worked out that they were both horny as hell, or she has sex with the owner of the mansion. She thinks that just because he is rich, has broad shoulders, gray hair at the temples and is very handsome that was no reason to cheat.
Perhaps she did hire the PI as one scenario he thinks, or she has sex with someone, doesn’t matter who, and after what happen two years ago when she let someone kiss her a bunch and feel up her breasts, (She stopped him as he got his hand under her blouse and bra to feel her naked breast) she thinks she has become a slut so she went somewhere to completely come out of the closet, so to speak. It will take a while to get past her conscious and mind set of no sex out side of marriage, but she thinks she can and should if she is a slut.
So that is where I am with this story any suggestions would be of help. If you have read this far I know its up to me but suggestions can help me decide on what direction to go, and perhaps someone has a new suggestion that would work better. If anyone responds that is. I only got one suggestion on my last request for help. Maybe a couple other writers will see this one.
I will put the second story based on this opening as another thread. It should be shorter.
TabooTeller
