As of now, this is still a rather vague idea. However, I might be able to do something potentially tangible with it. The basic premise involves an indigenous Amerindian tribe located deep in the Amazon being threatened with violence by an insidious corporation that is intent on seizing their land. However, a mysterious extraterrestrial being comes to their aid and uses its superior technology to fend off the corporation's thugs. It also uses its advanced medical skills to heal their sick. In return, it demands the right to impregnate all the married women in the tribe. Overwhelmed by gratitude, they eagerly accede to its demand and begin worship it as a god. Does anyone think that this idea has any promise? Thanks in advance
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Carnevil9
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Sounds like an interesting story, but not particularly erotic.
What does this alien being look like? Vaguely humanoid but with "magical" powers? Or some extremely foreign entity, like a cloud or a giant octopus?
Also, will the story focus on the battle with the evil corporation, or on the worshiping of the alien? Because the way you described it, the one happens after the other, and they sound like two separate stories. But I imagine they can be intertwined.
Anyway, needs work, but the idea has promise. Go for it!
What does this alien being look like? Vaguely humanoid but with "magical" powers? Or some extremely foreign entity, like a cloud or a giant octopus?
Also, will the story focus on the battle with the evil corporation, or on the worshiping of the alien? Because the way you described it, the one happens after the other, and they sound like two separate stories. But I imagine they can be intertwined.
Anyway, needs work, but the idea has promise. Go for it!
Sean Renaud
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I think the alien is an extra step that you don't need. That could just be me though, I like my story ideas neat and tidy with as few moving parts as possible so I would kick out the alien and bring in some ancient god who hadn't been worshipped in a long time for whatever reason. I mean if the Bible is in anyway at all historically accurate the Israelites turned away from god pretty much anytime things were going well and only came back when shit was hitting the fan pretty hard.
While I agree with Carn that it kinda sounds like two stories if you flip the order that solves that. They return to the temple of so and so because they desperately need help and he helps. The thing is that Evil Corp seems unnecessary. Unless they are run by Lex Luthor in which case God or no God they can put up a damn good fight they are going to be a non-entity in the story and you might be better off again cutting an extraneous step and removiong the corporation all together and just having it be a disease. I mean it was only two or three years back that we discovered some rainforest tribe. If someone had wandered through there with a particularly bad flu heaven forbid somehow some ebola patient had been stranded there or insert possibility here and they'd all gotten sick that still gives them motive to contact a god but no bad guy floating about that needs dealing with.
As for appareance honestly reading back through various myths it seems that it was rarer for gods to be unable to shapeshift than it was for them to be able to. Some didn't care to but it seems that any real consistency gods have in appearance is becuse they want us to recognize them, not that they couldn't show up as a six faced, eight winged, nine tailed goat if the mood struck them. So there go wild.
While I agree with Carn that it kinda sounds like two stories if you flip the order that solves that. They return to the temple of so and so because they desperately need help and he helps. The thing is that Evil Corp seems unnecessary. Unless they are run by Lex Luthor in which case God or no God they can put up a damn good fight they are going to be a non-entity in the story and you might be better off again cutting an extraneous step and removiong the corporation all together and just having it be a disease. I mean it was only two or three years back that we discovered some rainforest tribe. If someone had wandered through there with a particularly bad flu heaven forbid somehow some ebola patient had been stranded there or insert possibility here and they'd all gotten sick that still gives them motive to contact a god but no bad guy floating about that needs dealing with.
As for appareance honestly reading back through various myths it seems that it was rarer for gods to be unable to shapeshift than it was for them to be able to. Some didn't care to but it seems that any real consistency gods have in appearance is becuse they want us to recognize them, not that they couldn't show up as a six faced, eight winged, nine tailed goat if the mood struck them. So there go wild.
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This might work better with time travel, or, more mundanely, with just a visitor from a more technologically advanced civilization encountering a less technologically advanced one. In either case, he comes across a group that needs help to keep a stronger force at bay, and decides to help them. Only after they begin thanking him for his help does he realize how attractive the local women are, and he decides to stay and help them while taking advantage of their gratitude.
Thanks for the feedback, guys. It's been very helpful. I've taken some of your suggestions into consideration so far. Some of the ideas and suggestions that have been proposed so far, have made me consider an alternative scenario, one which involves no alien at all. The way I see it, there might not have to be any actual combat involved. Let's assume that the evil corporation is thwarted by a rival competitor who simply outbids them. Rather than wanting to kick them off the land and mine it, he wants to open a resort which capitalizes on the natural attractions of the rain-forest. That means he has an incentive to keep large swathes of it intact ( *
Not only do the native Amerindians get to keep their land, they are also provided with food, certain modern conveniences, as well as top-notch medical facilities. Most of them are also hired as resort workers in order to capitalize on the exotic appeal of the place. However, their new master has a secret past. He used to be a Tony Stark like weapons designer who got tired of his job. Nevertheless, he still retains a powerful armored armored combat suit that allows him to defeat most foes in battle. He puts it to good use against poachers and other unsavory types that try to bully the tribal Amerindians under his protection. It also allows him to cast powerful illusions and seemingly change his appearance , leaving them amazed. Eventually, they begun regarding him a deity. When he starts getting lonely and demands female companionship, all the married man in the tribe immediately offer him their wives. Do you think that this might be a plausible scenario? Thanks once again
The only problem I see with it is that it would take a long time before the story actually became erotic. Maybe start the story off as kind of a relationship between the magic Tony Stark guy and a native american princess or something, then slowly the whole situation becomes more cult like and the sex becomes crazier and crazier with it culminating with the Tony Stark guy getting all the women : ).
Hmm. That's a definite possibility. So if I understand you correctly, the story should start off with an intimate scene between the chief's wife and the Tony Stark like character, with subsequent scenes slowly explaining the background premise? Again, thanks
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I think that could work, might want to cut to the chase though. Evil Corp is just something mentioned as one of the many feats of Ironman. Start the story with a group of poachers hunting a near extinct giant leopard or something and bam he comes down fights them off, saves the villagers. Do a paragraph or two about how he fought off Evil Corp, saved them from the Red Plague, gave them clean water after the river had run dry (a damn up stream but they don't know that) and provided them with some kind of fruit that grows well in their area.
Then something about but he seems unhappy, he rarely leaves his temple (mansion/office) and he sends for the chief and demands tribute. X of the most beautiful women.
Then something about but he seems unhappy, he rarely leaves his temple (mansion/office) and he sends for the chief and demands tribute. X of the most beautiful women.
That's a good suggestion. By emphasizing how he extirpated the deadly tropical diseases among the natives (a real threat for Amazonian natives), he would come across as a benevolent, even heroic character.
There's another possible angle I'd like to explore as well. I'd like to emphasize the racial differences between the Amerindians and their savior. They're a dark skinned, relatively small race of people (the man averaging about 5'3 and the woman about 4'8), while he is a blonde, blue-eyed giant of Scandinavian descent, standing almost eight feet tall. His ''exotic'' appearance would add to his mysterious image and while intimidating the Amerindian women, somewhat, would also make him oddly attractive to them.
The second idea involves him having sex with married women in public while all the adults of the tribe watch with awe and excitement. Among the married men, it is an honor for them to witness their wives having sex with their ''god'' and many of them hope that he will impregnate them with mixed-race babies who will succeed their father as the future leader of the tribe. Do you think that these two proposed ideas would appeal to your average reader? Again, thanks so much
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Other than eight feet tall is monstrous. I mean I don't know how tall the tallest person in history is but I think you may be slightly underestimating how big that really is. I mean shit, these women could give him blow jobs standing up!
Other than that I think you've got something. Even in real life not all societies have the same taboos. So that might not even really be that unusual for the group. I MIGHT stray away from blue blonde scandavian simply because of the unavoidable Nazi overtones it's going to bring with it.
Note: I am not accusing you of anything or implying anything. I'm saying you'll know when it's okay for perfect blue blonde gods to help less advanced cultures when people can name their kids Adolf again and hippies rock the Indian good luck and religious symbol you know as a swastika. It sucks but that's how reality functions.
Other than that I think you've got something. Even in real life not all societies have the same taboos. So that might not even really be that unusual for the group. I MIGHT stray away from blue blonde scandavian simply because of the unavoidable Nazi overtones it's going to bring with it.
Note: I am not accusing you of anything or implying anything. I'm saying you'll know when it's okay for perfect blue blonde gods to help less advanced cultures when people can name their kids Adolf again and hippies rock the Indian good luck and religious symbol you know as a swastika. It sucks but that's how reality functions.
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Holy shit that guy's a monster. He looks like the way they drew the adults in Muppet Babies or Rugrats.
Yikes! I certainly don't want to open that can of worms! Darn, I'd forgotten that the Fuhrer put the blond-haired, blue-eyed stereotype to a lot of good uses. Maybe I'll settle for the hero being
a red-haired Irishman. Hopefully, no British loyalist types will be offended.
Hmm. Monstrous perhaps, but as Matthew Vet pointed out, not entirely outside the realm of physical possibility. I like the part about the Amerindian women giving him blowjobs while standing up? Mind if I use it? Thanks
Sean Renaud
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Oh, I am not arguing that. Clearly people can surpass eight feet, for some reason I thought I'd read about people topping out at like seven and a half, which is still a LOT of person. That was just me making a comment though not telling you what to or not to do.
If I minded you using an idea I wouldn't post in a forum labeled Story Ideas. By it's very definition anything you say here is pretty much free game to anybody who wants to use it.
If I minded you using an idea I wouldn't post in a forum labeled Story Ideas. By it's very definition anything you say here is pretty much free game to anybody who wants to use it.
