"My Sunday With You" by Gaucho

[Whispersecret]

Here I am again, folks, promoting a story of Gaucho's. It's written in second person from the male's pov, so be prepared. However, unlike 99% of the stories written in second person (and present tense no less!), I liked this one. It just goes to show you that someone with skill can write in this pov and make it work.

I loved feeling that I got a peek into the comfortable intimacy between the two characters. And the humor kept me smiling. Made me wish I had this kind of relationship, which is sort of the whole point of romance stories, isn't it?

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=12237

 

[Mark Singer]

Hmmmm.....

And I HATE 'second person' stories! So why did I enjoy this one so much... I HATE being forced out of my box!
Okay...so I really enjoyed this. REGARDLESS.
Goucho... you've got a good groove going. You have some excelent stuff here. Even though it's 'second person'. I HATE 'second person'. But I liked this!
Ohmyohmyohmyohmy... I HATE having to think! Hmmmm....

Thanks, Whisper, for sharing another goodie... But it's in 'second person', and I hate...well, maybe not...well, yes I do...but the imagery was so good...

Hmmmm....I have to go think again...

Be back in a week or so... Good stuff, Goucho...

 

[Whispersecret]

Yeah, it chaps your hide, don't it? I mean, I HATE second person. You can see my thoughts about it in the Author's Hangout. I'm always telling people to stay away from second person like it's the Ebola virus.

That just makes it all the more obvious that Gaucho is a great writer.

Which makes me look at my own stuff. And sigh. How the hell does he create that richness? The words he chooses, the flow, it's like eating truffles.

 

[SpecialK]

Wow!

Damn he's good! Geezus Gaucho, what are you trying to do to me over here?!?! This early on a Thursday morning?!?!

This story is amazing! I'm turned on just as much by the diction as I am by the imagery created. You are a god, Gaucho!

Okay, for those of you who have not read this yet..... here is a brief taste of the diction I'm talking about:

At times like this, a small voice will sometimes whisper inside my mind. “Look at her!” it says. “She’s gone – lost in her own little world. You’re not even here. It might as well be a vibrator or a dildo or even another man’s cock inside of her!” And I wonder: Am I the only one possessed of such weakness? Or do all men suffer the same reptilian insecurities?

That's such an interesting thought. So unique to a sex story, I think. Reptilian insecurites? Damn!

K

[Edited by SpecialK on 04-19-2001 at 07:18 AM]

 

[cymbidia]

I read mostly that which is found down the darker aisles in this story store. However, based on whisper's original recommendation, i read Gaucho's first story and was delighted (and amazed) at his deft expertise. What a truly masterful writer, he is!

In my opinion, this new story, "My Sunday With You", surpasses his first one in emotional/erotic impact, however unbelievable that might be. It's really the epitome of a surpassingly erotic story.

 

[Alex De Kok]

I hate present tense; I detest 2nd person POV. Unless it's Gaucho writing it. He is GOOD!

There is one line I'm still laughing at. I wish I'd written it -

"..and discover one of the odd realities about cold air. My nipples are now larger and harder than my penis."

Alex