My story

[bisexualsmoker]

Hi.How are you?
My story is about a twenty something naive,effeminate barefoot male virgin who has been mothered,protected, and slowly starts living on the wild side of life when he gets interested in techno music.(i.e he turns bisexual slut,drug abusing queen).
It'll have a lot of cigarette smoking and barefoot fetishism in it.Right now
I've only finished one chapter.
What do you think?

 

[sirhugs]

Hi.How are you?
My story is about a twenty something naive,effeminate barefoot male virgin who has been mothered,protected, and slowly starts living on the wild side of life when he gets interested in techno music.(i.e he turns bisexual slut,drug abusing queen).
It'll have a lot of cigarette smoking and barefoot fetishism in it.Right now
I've only finished one chapter.
What do you think?

sounds promising
why not submit ch 1 and see what reaction you get?

 

[bisexualsmoker]

Well I tried submitting it but I hadn't read the guidelines.Right now
it's only about 500-600 words.It has to be 750 minimum.I guess we're not allowed to provide a sample right here on the forum.It's an interesting story.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

Well, if you have a fuler outline of the plot maybe someone else here can offer a suggestion of what else you may wish to add.

Otherwise, when in doubt try adding some (more?) dialogue! What do/should your characters say to one another?

Good luck!

 

[bisexualsmoker]

Well,I've done several different drafts of it.There is a lot finished.I should be ready to post something on this site within a few weeks.Only now the first
chapter is basically set.One must be inspired though.I think it's
a really good idea.

 

[BedtimeStories77]

i look forward to reading it then!

 

[BedtimeStories77]

(Oops, didn't mean to post in the thread! )

 

[bisexualsmoker]

That's allright.There won't be any lawsuits at this time.

 

[Fatwa_Morgana]

Hi.How are you?
My story is about a twenty something naive,effeminate barefoot male virgin who has been mothered,protected, and slowly starts living on the wild side of life when he gets interested in techno music.(i.e he turns bisexual slut,drug abusing queen).
It'll have a lot of cigarette smoking and barefoot fetishism in it.Right now
I've only finished one chapter.
What do you think?

He sounds like the sort of person I'd fall in love with, and give him complete possession of my soul. And then he'd leave me. And break my heart. The bastard!! But I'd still hit him up for a cigarette after it all.

 

[bisexualsmoker]

Thats the way it goes unfortunately.Always broken hearts and broken dreams.
You're story "The letter Opener" is amazing.It was quite a read.Very enjoyable.

 

[Fatwa_Morgana]

Thats the way it goes unfortunately.Always broken hearts and broken dreams.
You're story "The letter Opener" is amazing.It was quite a read.Very enjoyable.

Thank you for the kind words about my story. I'm working on my second story, for the Earth Day contest. But I write really slow. I hope people will like it, when I ever finish it!!.....FM

 

[bisexualsmoker]

If anybody wants to read the first chapter:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=361843

 

[Fatwa_Morgana]

I read it. It's really good! Very moody and atmospheric, and makes you want to get to the next chapter as soon as possible! Not pleasant, but compelling, if that makes sense. Everybody, go read it! .....Morgana

 

[bisexualsmoker]

Will she now accept my marriage proposal?
Never.....She plays the field....

One beautiful nice lady!

Great writer too!
Read the "The letter opener!" by Fatwa Morgana

True story about breaking up,cracking up,dealing with it.
Love it!!!