my story was shot down

[Grant Powers]

I don't know what went wrong. I submiited my story and it was rejected. I don't have grammar or spelling errors, and I know how to split my story into paragraphs, and instead of an actual reason for getting rejected, I just get this cut-and-paste message that would apply to any story. What can I do guys?

 

[Goldeniangel]

what did the message actually say?
i've had several stories shut down for various reasons at one point or another and i've usually found what they want me to do to change it. if you go through and you REALLY can't figure it out i'd suggest resubmitting it with a note in the Note Box about having them contact you to tell you exactly what's wrong with it.

 

[Guest]

Are you certain it was submitted in the proper format?

Double-check, because that does catch a few people. And that would generate a form letter when the computer system kicks it back out.

If that isn't the issue do you want to post a portion of it here? Or you could PM it to me and I'd be glad to take a look at it for you.

Hang in there - we've all been through it.

 

[Grant Powers]

Dear Writer,

Thank you for your submission to Literotica. We appreciate the time and effort you've taken to write a story and submit it to our site. However, we've found that we cannot post your submission in its current form. The checklist below may help you in re-examining your manuscript.


Did I check to make sure everything was spelled correctly?
Was the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs?
Please break up your dialogue. The convention is one speaker per paragraph, so whenever someone new says something, just add a paragraph. The essay "How to Make Characters Talk" in our Writer's Resources section has more information on the paragraph formatting of dialogue if you have further questions.
Please feel free to re-submit the story after a Volunteer Editor has examined it, or after you've made revisions. You can find a list of Volunteer Editors here.

Please consult our Writer's Resources section and make sure you read our submission guidelines:

If you have any questions on these, please let us know.


Thanks for your time, and look forward to reading you again!

Laurel & Manu
Literotica.Com


that's it. that can apply to any story. I just cut and pasted the story in the huge box they leave for actual text. You know, I didn't download it in any format, I just typed it up on the text box they offer.

 

[Guest]

That does sound pretty generic.

I've never cut and pasted; I much prefer submitting the story in .txt format.

Story Text: There are two ways to submit your story. You may paste the text into the box below or you may upload a .txt, .rtf, or Word .doc file by scrolling down the page to the next form field. Please use only one method - do not put text in the box and submit a file as both may be lost.

Post a portion of it here? Maybe we can figure it out?

 

[Grant Powers]

here's a lil part of it. it involves a guy having his way with women while he freezes them in time.

I undid my pants and my hungry cock was exposed, sticking in mid air. It was a good 7 and a half inches long and thick, but as any good male, I was nervous what a woman would think of it if I’d ever get to show her it. I felt nervous though, like if I was showing my cock to the woman, her friend, and everyone else in the street and the bus behind me. I was nervous about what I’d do if time would suddenly come back and I’d be standing there with my hard dick right in front of the woman that just called me a pervert with her pants down. I could barely wait. I grabbed her and leaned her against a lamppost and started to spread her legs. I took hold of my cock and led it where it had to go where I’d finally feel my first contact with a woman. I’d feel shivers just sticking the head in. She was so nice and warm, her wet walls made it easy for my cock to slip deeper, but it felt so good I could almost just cum right then and there. She was so tight but her wet arousal made it easy for me to sink deeper, not stopping until all of me was inside her. It felt so good, I couldn’t stop myself. I grabbed onto her hips and started thrusting into her right away. Her cunt would also latch onto my cock, squeezing me tight and driving me crazy with every thrust. Her pussy was actually working with me. I was actually inside a woman! I couldn’t help but grunt and moan as I started thrusting faster against her, grabbing onto her ass and shoving her into my hips every time I slammed into her. I rammed against her pussy for what felt like 5 minutes before I felt her pussy suddenly tighten up on me harder than before. Her body seemed to shake and stutter for a few moments and I could feel her cum spill out and baste my cock. I read about this sort of thing before, it looks like the woman actually came. I can’t believe I made a woman reach her climax. Her cum was so warm and felt so good, I felt like ramming harder into her tight cunt so I could cum too, but I fought off the urge. It was time to do what I really wanted to do with her.

that's a paragraph. the rest of the story's paragraphs are about that long.

 

[Hotcappucino]

Was the story not broken into appropriately sized paragraphs?

This guideline seems to apply in your case. The paragraph is probably about two or three times bigger than necessary, but it's difficult for me to specifically assess because the ideas in the paragraph seem a little jumbled. If all of your paragraphs are the same size, I would probably look into breaking them apart into smaller, coherent pieces.

 

[Guest]

here's a lil part of it. it involves a guy having his way with women while he freezes them in time.

I undid my pants and my hungry cock was exposed, sticking in mid air. It was a good 7 and a half inches long and thick, but as any good male, I was nervous what a woman would think of it if I’d ever get to show her it. I felt nervous though, like if I was showing my cock to the woman, her friend, and everyone else in the street and the bus behind me. I was nervous about what I’d do if time would suddenly come back and I’d be standing there with my hard dick right in front of the woman that just called me a pervert with her pants down. I could barely wait. I grabbed her and leaned her against a lamppost and started to spread her legs. I took hold of my cock and led it where it had to go where I’d finally feel my first contact with a woman. I’d feel shivers just sticking the head in. She was so nice and warm, her wet walls made it easy for my cock to slip deeper, but it felt so good I could almost just cum right then and there. She was so tight but her wet arousal made it easy for me to sink deeper, not stopping until all of me was inside her. It felt so good, I couldn’t stop myself. I grabbed onto her hips and started thrusting into her right away. Her cunt would also latch onto my cock, squeezing me tight and driving me crazy with every thrust. Her pussy was actually working with me. I was actually inside a woman! I couldn’t help but grunt and moan as I started thrusting faster against her, grabbing onto her ass and shoving her into my hips every time I slammed into her. I rammed against her pussy for what felt like 5 minutes before I felt her pussy suddenly tighten up on me harder than before. Her body seemed to shake and stutter for a few moments and I could feel her cum spill out and baste my cock. I read about this sort of thing before, it looks like the woman actually came. I can’t believe I made a woman reach her climax. Her cum was so warm and felt so good, I felt like ramming harder into her tight cunt so I could cum too, but I fought off the urge. It was time to do what I really wanted to do with her.

that's a paragraph. the rest of the story's paragraphs are about that long.

The paragraphs are too long. Hotcappucino is completely correct.

They need to be broken up to give the reader a rest (it is too difficult to read solid text like that on a computer) and also for grammatical content.

I think you should try for 3 or 4 sentence paragraphs throughout - see how that works. I think you'll find it easier to write and edit, easier to add naughty details, and much easier to read. Good luck!

 

[Goldeniangel]

yeah, you should probably just break it up a little.
i've actually gotten that message before, my problem was that all the dialogue was stuck in the middle of paragraphs, which is also really hard for the readers. =)

good luck resubmitting!

 

[Grant Powers]

I broke up the paragraphs and resubmitted, and it's still pending. I hope it's in.

 

[GEKKEN_]

I don't know what went wrong. I submiited my story and it was rejected. I don't have grammar or spelling errors, and I know how to split my story into paragraphs, and instead of an actual reason for getting rejected, I just get this cut-and-paste message that would apply to any story. What can I do guys?

Learn to write better stories I guess.

 

[Grant Powers]

...

Shot down again... Anybody wants to proofread my work?

 

[Guest]

We'll be travelling today. If you post your story here or PM it to me I can proof in the car.

I'll see if I offer some help?

 

[flawed_ethics]

How long is the story?
What are the story's contents? (M/F, group, BDSM, Incest, NC/Reluctance, T/S, etc...)

I'd be willing to try my hand at making it Lit-ready, but I imagine others like myself would like an idea of what they'll be opening up.

 

[Grant Powers]

Not exactly a romantic story. Basically a guy finds out he can freeze time, and takes advanatge to fondle and fuck every woman he ever wanted but always shot him down.