My stories (Katie Tay)

[KatieTay]

Hello,

This thread is specifically for those who have read my first series, "Katie's Muscle Journey", or who now want to read it out of idle curiosity. As you can probably surmise, it is about women with muscles, significant amounts of it. If it is not your cup of tea at all please go ahead and decline it, and sip from another cup more to your liking.

However, if you have sipped from this cup and wish to make some comment on the taste, I would really, really love to hear from you.

I have been 1-bombed, 5-bumped, and my ratings have remained somewhat high, I suppose. I am of course less interested in the ratings than in the comments, which I just don't see enough of.

Some readers have been kind enough to make the effort to contact me personally with private feedback. I am very grateful. I am far more interested in such qualitative responses to this particular series than in the ratings race, which I find rather silly anyway.

So, if you have read my stories, and if perhaps you have graded them before, I would like to hear from you. Good or bad comments alike, even trollish comments, I just want to know what response you have to my themes.

If you have not read them before and you are curious, here is the link to my stories so far:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/memberpage.php?uid=1224662&page=submissions

I am contemplating another series, this time with a heavy incest element. I am abandoning the device of real-time first person narration (which was an experiment, really, in the Katie Tay series). I am also going to make it a much shorter series.

 

[KatieTay]

People who 1-bomb a story without saying why are incredibly annoying.

 

[sr71plt]

Which, I'm sure, is their intent when they do it. You might annoy them by just not reacting to it.

 

[KatieTay]

I don't mind low ratings. I just want to know *what people think*. Or failing that, what they want to say.

 

[LaRascasse]

Trolling is a sad reality of Lit. You have to take all comments with a pinch of salt. Though if someone offers you constructive critique, grab it with both hands.

 

[KatieTay]

hehehe yes and you know that i know where i can get it!

 

[LaRascasse]

When it comes down a fetish as specific as muscled women, you are targeting a very niche crowd. Only those interested in that particular fetish will find it arousing.

Maybe the story would be rated better if you sidelined the fetish and focused on other aspects of the story more. Just my two-pence.

 

[estragon]

Katie, one-bombs without comment are endemic on Lit, as I suspect they are on every other writers' site, erotic or not. Nakdsub had a lengthy rant on the subject recently and pulled his stories off Lit in frustration.

As I said to him at the time, either you do as the Russian dissidents did and write "for the desk drawer" (was the word "samizdat"? SA Penn Lady or Yes_Please, or any other Russian speaker, please help me out here), and not publish at all, or suck it up until the Hoover sucks up the one-bombs.

 

[KatieTay]

http://www.literotica.com/s/inanna-and-ereshkigal

My latest story...

I would love to have your comments far more than your ratings!

Although, ratings are nice too.

 

[curl4ever]

Stunning!

You turned this conflict into an outstanding story. I particularly liked the different but equally strong characteristics of these women.

PS: I love your latest avatar.

- curl

http://www.literotica.com/s/inanna-and-ereshkigal

My latest story...

I would love to have your comments far more than your ratings!

Although, ratings are nice too.

 

[KatieTay]

Still wish people would tell me *why* they like or dislike my stories.

*grumble*

 

[LaRascasse]

Still wish people would tell me *why* they like or dislike my stories.

*grumble*

There is no specific reason people *like* or *dislike* a fetish, Katie. They just do. That's how we are wired.

If someone shares your fetish for an erotic sexfights with muscular women, they will like it. That's all. They are very well written though, it must be said. Particularly your Sumerian goddess series.

 

[sun_sea_sky]

Still wish people would tell me *why* they like or dislike my stories.

*grumble*

OK, I read the link you posted above. I didn't get it, sorry. But that's no criticism of the story. As LaRascasse said, I just concluded after reading some of it that this simply wasn't my genre.

Although this sort of sentence slows me right down:

Any mortal man gazing upon her in that pose would have been overcome with uncontrollable concupiscence within a moment, and would have given up his seed without anything touching his male member.

I think my vocabulary is pretty good but I was overcome with an uncontrollable urge to reach for the dictionary there.

You've got a good score, people seem to like it. For me, I'm probably showing my complete ignorance of the genre, or this part of it. Wish I could be more helpful.

 

[KatieTay]

it's not the specific fetish - it's the story. like, what sunseasky just said is helpful - some don't like the lurid prose i affected. ok. that's what i want to hear.

the ones who don't like the fetish at all shouldn't even be reading it except out of curiosity. if they know they're going to have an unshakeable antipathy towards it, then why read and downgrade without saying anything?

if they commented on how it totally doesn't work at all for them, that's good too, i want to hear it. but most don't!

i do appreciate the ones who do, though.

 

[sun_sea_sky]

OK, I just read: http://www.literotica.com/s/katies-muscle-journey

Unlike the other story (http://www.literotica.com/s/inanna-and-ereshkigal) - I loved this one!

You didn't use the "lurid" prose (as you described it yourself). Katie's Muscle Journey worked for me.

What was good about it? The dominating female, physically and emotionally dominating the girlfriend and the boyfriend. The multiple battles. The wimpy boyfriend scurrying around like a nerd. It was all good stuff. I posted a comment but the system wouldn't recognize my name so it's under anonymous.

I'm almost frightened to read the next one in the series in case it isn't as good.

You know, I think I've worked out what was wrong with "Inanna's Descent into the Underworld Ch. 01". The prose style doesn't sit with the dominant muscular female, or IMHO at least.

You've obviously chosen to use the style, so who am I to complain? But personally:

"Very well -- I accept your invitation, and your challenge," she stated. "Your foul unwanted presence will be banished from the sunlit lands. Death will come in the fullness of time, and not by your wanton wishes. I will bring this to pass."

make me sleepy. But instead something like:

Inanna screamed, "I'm going to pound your fucking brains into the dirt Ereshkigal, and then stomp on them!" She gestured impatiently at the portal. "Step through, and prepare to die!"

conveys more power.

 

[sun_sea_sky]

I'm almost frightened to read the next one in the series in case it isn't as good.

Well, I was wrong. Chapter 2 was better.

 

[KatieTay]

Lol thanks! I really appreciate the comments Hope you enjoy the rest too.

Hmmm well if you check out the original story I based mine upon, for the Sumerian series, you'll see that it's supposed to be evocative of mythology... so the language is all "in yon days of old" and all that, except not Middle English.

Doing "Imma pound yo fuckin brains into da pavement, sistah!" would have been fun, but rather inappropriate to my mind.

 

[sun_sea_sky]

Doing "Imma pound yo fuckin brains into da pavement, sistah!" would have been fun, but rather inappropriate to my mind.

I'm warming to the genre, and your sense of humour.

 

[LaRascasse]

Lol thanks! I really appreciate the comments Hope you enjoy the rest too.

Hmmm well if you check out the original story I based mine upon, for the Sumerian series, you'll see that it's supposed to be evocative of mythology... so the language is all "in yon days of old" and all that, except not Middle English.

Doing "Imma pound yo fuckin brains into da pavement, sistah!" would have been fun, but rather inappropriate to my mind.

Some might call it lurid, but in my mind the medieval-ish flowery English goes with the theme of the story. Even if I can't get a specific word, I can surmise what it means from the surroundings.

I await chapter 3 of the Sumerian story.

 

[KatieTay]

I have to do edits for silkstockingslover first :S and I don't even have time for that yet, let alone my own writing!

 

[LaRascasse]

I have to do edits for silkstockingslover first :S and I don't even have time for that yet, let alone my own writing!

Best of luck with editing. You do a fantastic job of that too, you know.

 

[KatieTay]

thanks

 

[publackstar]

I haven't read all of the "journey" stories...but here are my thoughts after 4 random chapters. So, if any of my complaints are covered in chapters that I missed...please let me know and I'll reread for the juicy bits

They were very well written with good prose and proper grammar, but they didn't really get me going that much (and I love muscle women). The formatting was excellent and made these very easy to read. I think the focus of your stories was around fighting and domination with an erotic component to them...whereas I prefer erotic stories with a domination component. Maybe that's too subtle of a distinction.

I thought Jim was almost an afterthought here...I didn't see (in the 4 chapters that I read) a tremendous reason for your interest in him. You only seemed to want to beat Ryoko.

I also thought that there were too many descriptions of the workouts involved (could be sample error on my part)...and those descriptions kind of interrupted the real action of the stories (the erotic fighting). I would have liked to hear more about how you grew back into proper fighting shape...I'm a numbers guy and statistics seem to help me visualize the characters.

Hope this helps with the feedback that you're seeking.

 

[KatieTay]

Hello, and thank you for the feedback!

I think I know the genre you mean, and the websites where you find that kind of writing

You're right, my focus is a little bit different from those, which is one of the reasons my stories aren't appearing elsewhere yet.

I get your distinction Try Inanna Chapter 02 and let me know what you think?

I actually wanted to exclude the measurements, because I was not sure most readers would appreciate the "excitement" of 11" biceps growing to 14", etc. Clearly, I neglected to think about readers like you! So sorry!

Thanks again for the feedback!

 

[publackstar]

Agreed with your points on excluding the measurements...I would only suggest a sprinkling to help give reference points. Stories from those "other websites" can sometimes read like an excel spreadsheet when documenting sizes and workout routines. And, I don't think that there's anything wrong with a 14" bicep...I enjoy more realistic ssizes.

I tried Innanna Ch 2....much more my style! I'm pretty sure that I didn't visualize the settings very well as I don't have a Sumerian frame of reference....but I enjoyed the story.

I also read Innanna Ch 1...and saw height measurement there...yay!