My Poetry/Songs

[Jajames07]

Feel free to critique, rate, anything to any of my poems. The first one listed is actually one of the first poems I wrote that I actually liked. I dont have a name for it, but Marissa Tomei inspired it. Hope y'all like it,

Her hair is a lion, which only she can tame
Her eyes will pierce your soul, and relieve all of your pain
Her smile shines brighter than the brightest sun
Her touch so soft, your senses will come undone
Shes all that you want, all that your desire
She'll make your dreams come true, then set your world on fire
For her love is not free, it comes at a cost
The small price of your soul will be your only loss
If youre willing to pay the toll then shes all yours
Your temptress, your nymph, your goddess, all that and much more

 

[twelveoone]

Feel free to critique, rate, anything to any of my poems. The first one listed is actually one of the first poems I wrote that I actually liked. I dont have a name for it, but Marissa Tomei inspired it. Hope y'all like it,


She'll make your dreams come true, then set your world on fire
For her love is not free, it comes at a cost
The small price of your soul will be your only loss

Marissa Tomei is the Devil? And an arsonist? She seems so sweet, I guess I'm easily fooled.

 

[Jajames07]

Lol to be honest she only inspired the first three lines, the rest I just ran with. I was watching "Cyrus" when I thought of it.

 

[twelveoone]

Lol to be honest she only inspired the first three lines, the rest I just ran with. I was watching "Cyrus" when I thought of it.

Miley
now I understand it

 

[bogusagain]

Lol to be honest she only inspired the first three lines, the rest I just ran with. I was watching "Cyrus" when I thought of it.

She's not that good looking really, just well groomed. She gives me the impression if you cornered her the vamp in her would disappear and the vulnerable naive teenager would appear. Maybe I'm not a sleazy dirty old man, just give me a real woman who knows what she wants and isn't afraid of it.