My Poem Was Posted! -GRIN-

[MysticWolphi]

My poem was posted and the first part of my story is still pending, please if anyone has any feed back?

Here is the link to my poem:
http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=26701

 

[daughter]

metaphors

mystic--

You have some nice metaphors. Watch your spelling. Another option would be to stick with one metaphor and develop it.

Thanks for the read.

Peace,

daughter

 

[tigerjen]

spelling is important!

hi.......

good poem...however....WATCH THE SPELLING!
it will be a factor in terms of how people vote on
your poem........

keep up the writing!

tigerjen

 

[Debbie]

I really enjoyed your poem. Writing poetry can be a hard thing to do sometimes. I felt that you expressed very well that to your Master you were like a new beginning for Him to colour and teach.
I thought that it was very good.
As Tigerjen and daughter have said the only big thing that detracted from your poem was the spelling mistakes.
Please keep writing poetry.
I will look forward to reading more.