My Orgasm

[intrigued]

I have never posted any of my work here, and am not certain this is where to post this. I hang out in APF and the General Board, so the rest of this site is something I am quite unfamiliar with. I hope this is the correct place to post this???
I posted this in my pic thread last night, as those in there are my close friends and I knew that they could appreciate it most. But it seems others have as well, so I thought I would share it here, as well.
I am interested in writing, though that was not really the intent of this...whatever "this" is. I'm not sure what to call it...essay, short story? OK, here it is....as it appeared in my thread:

Good evening all....

I chose to place this here because most of you in my thread are close to me and know my story, and I feel you will appreciate most, the meaning this has for me.

My Orgasm.

I sat here watching "the" movie again, after having just viewed another made for me by my closest and most special friend. I went back to my friends movies, and then to his pics. There is nothing on earth like the beauty of him. Between the two of you, the images swirl around in my head, burning so deeply into my fantasies...and I am truly swept away. In the back of my mind, rising up into these images...is you. You with all your promise....you, aching so to love me, you...the man burning in my heart. I am caught up in emotion, frustration, I am so intensely "hot" and, as if in a dream....everything inside changes in an instant.......

I find myself on my bed, nude other than a little black tank top. I have my body pillow up under my hips, and another behind it, lifting my hips up, and bringing them in closer to me. I have both vibrators...the bullet and the G~Spot. Absently, my palms are so very lightly grazing across the tips of my hardened nipples, and my mind drifts. I realize in that moment that it is nice to just flow...to not think about anything at all....to just allow myself to feel. Usually I have to chase around these images inside and try to focus on just one but it always so elusive to me. I end up so frustrated, my body aching, my mind screwing everything all together, and taking over. In those moments, if I don't just give up, I end up remembering that one image that, though it actually happened in my life, it has become even more in my mind, it has become a fantasy. It always gets me, simply from the innocence of it, the thought of it sends waves of pure passion all throughout me. Not today.....today I am overwhelmed emotionally. So much passion and sweetness and desire is being felt from each of you, from what each of you have given to me, but in THIS moment, there is no frustration of being taken to the edge of this "online" world and being left hanging there. In this world today, I give into you....to it.

Again, I go back to my friends pics. I can feel the tingling and warmth beginning to spread from my heart, into my essence. He has the most beautiful cock and most sculpted body my eyes have ever had the pleasure of feasting on, and each and every time I see him, I melt in moments. Because I need that connection of making love, my heart inserts you before me, lying on your side at the foot of my bed, arm bent, propping your head in your hand. You are in awe of me, and sensing my shyness, you close your eyes briefly. We both know it will only be a moment before you can no longer take it......and have to return your entire being to me. I will take you without ever touching you....

I begin to slide my hand so softly, almost as if in a whisper, across my body......my stomach, then up to my breasts, neck, going slowly upwards from the hollow up to my chin, then to my lips. I place my fingers against my tongue, moisten them, and slowly follow the trail back to my breasts. The shirt is in the way, as I do not usually stroke my breasts.....but now I am ripping it from my body. The fingers of my right hand begin to mercilessly stroke, taunt and tease the nipple of my left breast. I take it into my hand and lift it up to me and bring my mouth down to it. I part my lips, my tongue slides out, and just to the tip of my nipple, and begins to swirl across the top of it, in little circles......beginning to circle so much more eagerly, frantically. I sense your presence now, you are invading me but instead of thinking about it.....I simply allow it, and feel even more sensual. My fingers begin to slide further down to my thighs, and my legs begin to part. I dance across my inner thigh with only my fingernails, and just shiver....allowing it to rush over me. My whole body begins to tingle. I slide further down onto the bed, feeling languid and as though I am wrapped up in warm flowing waves of water....my fingers begin to stroke the lips of my kitty, up and down.....my lips are sooo sensitive and this catches my breath and stuns me. My middle finger slides in just a little, gathering the moistness there, and then back out, up and down over my lips, spreading the glistening mositure all over. I can hardly contain the need to experience me......my fingers slide in, two this time, and I dip into the folds and go so much further until my fingers are saturated in the juices I created, and bring them to my lips. Ohhhh..........this taste I crave......this really gets to me...this moves me and makes me feel so very sensual and erotic.....and now I need you.....I need you to the point I feel like screaming out for you to "take me, take me NOW...!" As my fingers begin to stroke around my lips and thighs again, my other hand begins to cup and knead my left breast...then to my right.....I need another hand.....!.......and my hips begin to move up and down, rolling.......seeking.....I need so much.....I need more.....I look back at his picture, oh dear God.....ohhhhhh......and then the G~Spot Vibrator is in my hands, and turning it on, I slide it in....Oh God .....Oh godddd.....this is it, this is what I need.....I need to be filled up inside....I need you in me, stroking me, in and out, in and out.....and in my mind, you are. I can feel you sliding against the silkiness of my flesh, I can feel the the way I pull you in, seeking you more and more, there can never be enough of you. I need you deeper and deeper, filling me up, I need you thrusting into me so hard and intense.....the whimpering, pleading moans erupt, and then you are somewhere in the background, fading.....yet, "as one with me" in this moment. Your hardness has begun to throb inside me, hitting the very core of me and as this consumes me....I feel I am on fire, every part of me feels like a raging fire, tingling, spreading, building and building...I can't touch myself enough, or quickly enough. I plunge the vibrator in and hold it right in that most mysterious, magical place and I roll it around in circles over the most intense pleasure I have ever known..... I am moaning and grinding my hips....they begin to rise up off the pillows, my legs close instinctively, grasping the vibrator so tightly and plunging it further in, and back out....in and out and up, so perfectly against that place....oohhhhhhhhhhhhh, pleeeease.......pleeeease....unhhhhhh.....unnnnuhnnnnnnnnn, I can't take it!!!....I am shivering, trembling...screaming.......ohhhhhhhhunhhhhhhh!!!ohhohhhhhhhhh.....my lips are quivering, I am flowing so much that I can hear the juices gurgle as the vibrator plunges so deeply......they suddenly begin to gush out all around it, sliding down my lips.....ohhhhhhhgooddddddddddddunnnnhhhhhhhhhhhhhh..........!!!!!!!!!!!!

unhhhhh.....ohhhhhhh..........ohh.....ohhgoddd........yes.....yes, it did......I am just reeling.....this happened???...........ohhhhhhhhhhhhgod, ohgodthankyou.........

my breathing begins to calm, my body is like a river flowing, awash in such sweet emotion, I feel as though I will never be able to move another muscle again, ever. I cannot open my eyes....I can only lie there.....absorbing....accepting.....breathing.



Moments later the feelings all hit me....the shock, the need to once again scream my head off to someone...anyone...."I did it!!!" I want to tell someone so badly that god, yes...I DID IT....but there is no one to tell. The tears form, and begin to fall. I lie there wrapping my arms around myself, rocking back and forth, just weeping. I finally did it.......I finally did it.....





Me



Back in a bit.

 

[donk mr donk to you]

As i read this I think time for some loving. long night of it.

donk

 

[intrigued]

As i read this I think time for some loving. long night of it.

donk

I believe there was a compliment in there somewhere, so I thank you. I'm happy to inspire you.

 

[calif_hunk_2002]

There is only one word to describe this ....

AWESOME !!

 

[intrigued]

Re: There is only one word to describe this ....

AWESOME !!

Oh, my.......

Why thank you , and yes, it was.

 

[SexyChele]

Hello, Intrigued, and welcome! Typically, this forum is for writers who have published their work on Lit and are looking for feedback as to how they did and if there were any room for improvement.

With that in mind, I'm not exactly certain how to approach your vignette. As a piece meant to entice and good "fist fodder" (that is NOT always a "bad thng", by the way!), the piece does that. To give feedback on anything more, such as grammar, character development, flow would be rather pointless. I don't think you were aiming for that.

Although, this could be worked into a story with some work. But that is up to you. Thank you for sharing this - I'm sure you've given many men and women some great ideas!

 

[NCmVoyeur]

Confusion

When you said to me "Because I need that connection of making love, my heart inserts you before me, lying on your side at the foot of my bed, arm bent, propping your head in your hand," I was gratified and moved.

But, my dear, what then am I to make of your comment about this other guy? "He has the most beautiful cock and most sculpted body my eyes have ever had the pleasure of feasting on."

No, no, no, NO! Surely, you are confused. Most certainly, I have the most beautiful cock you've ever seen. (I was told by a woman once that I have the most beautiful cock in the world, and I (and you) should have no reason to doubt her).


Just kidding, though to make a point: if you have aspirations of turning this or other thoughts into a submitted Literotica story, I'd strongly recommend avoiding use of second person point-of-view (referring to the 'other' as 'you'). It's awkward for the reader, because 'you' doesn't mean 'the reader' but rather someone else.

Much of the imagery you used was nice, as far as it goes. If you read more under this Board, a lot of the do's and don't's of story writing can be gleaned.

Thanks.

 

[intrigued]

Hello, Intrigued, and welcome! Typically, this forum is for writers who have published their work on Lit and are looking for feedback as to how they did and if there were any room for improvement.

With that in mind, I'm not exactly certain how to approach your vignette. As a piece meant to entice and good "fist fodder" (that is NOT always a "bad thng", by the way!), the piece does that. To give feedback on anything more, such as grammar, character development, flow would be rather pointless. I don't think you were aiming for that.

Although, this could be worked into a story with some work. But that is up to you. Thank you for sharing this - I'm sure you've given many men and women some great ideas!

Thank you so much. See, I could not find where one posts their work, so this was the only place that seemed right. The association my poor fried brain made was this, in the Amatuer Pics Feedback, we post our pics right there, and then they "oooh and ahhh" over them right there, so I thought "OK, this makes a bit of sense" that I should post it here. I have no idea where it is one should post work...I'm sorry.

To clarify my intent a bit.....I never set out to write an entertaining story, per se, I was basically recalling the event. It seems to have become an entertaining story once shared, so I thought what the heck, I will share it a bit more.

I am interested in writing a great deal, but its such a mystery to me how one does it correctly. I seem to only know self styled rambling...and I knew no other way to present this.

It is interesting to me to think of story possibilities for this...I am very open to anyone wanting to pursue that.

Thank you again, your reply was quite helpful...

 

[intrigued]

Re: Confusion

When you said to me "Because I need that connection of making love, my heart inserts you before me, lying on your side at the foot of my bed, arm bent, propping your head in your hand," I was gratified and moved.

But, my dear, what then am I to make of your comment about this other guy? "He has the most beautiful cock and most sculpted body my eyes have ever had the pleasure of feasting on."

No, no, no, NO! Surely, you are confused. Most certainly, I have the most beautiful cock you've ever seen. (I was told by a woman once that I have the most beautiful cock in the world, and I (and you) should have no reason to doubt her).


Just kidding, though to make a point: if you have aspirations of turning this or other thoughts into a submitted Literotica story, I'd strongly recommend avoiding use of second person point-of-view (referring to the 'other' as 'you'). It's awkward for the reader, because 'you' doesn't mean 'the reader' but rather someone else.

Much of the imagery you used was nice, as far as it goes. If you read more under this Board, a lot of the do's and don't's of story writing can be gleaned.

Thanks.

LOL....you had a bit of fun with this, huh??

OKOK, I will set you straight as well......I tend to believe what my eyes tell me to believe, and since I have never seen your beautiful cock, I am sticking with my original comments.

Let me try to explain this....I really was playing around with my words for a reason. "He" and "his" were referring to the guy that is my friend that sent me the pics and movies, though OKOK, there are two that do so, as I mentioned. I had been watching both the movies, and then looking at my friends pics, as well. But everytime I referred to he" and "him" , it was him.... Oh heck, I think I am confusing myself.
Now "you" is where I played with my words a bit, as I am a bit of a temptress and seductress, and I thought it would be nice to allow the reader to think that yes, I was speaking to them, that they were the "you" in the story. (As many in my thread have contributed so to speak, to this journey I am on, and have been quite supportive in many ways) It appears you caught that and ran with it. But really, the "you" in the story is the man in my mind.....the one with which I make the emotional connection.
I certainly can see why I confused you, and as I read back over this reply, it occurs to me what a greedy girl I am to have had 2 guys on movies, and another in my bed, and then theres the "you".....which can be so many people.


I think I'll shelf this story writing thing for awhile longer.

 

[DannyBoyUK]

I'll go with AWESOME !

 

[herpesface]

Even: bloody awesome

 

[Elduderino]

Excellent Story.

 

[margo_x_x]

Whoa! Hold on there girl. “I think I'll shelf this story writing thing for awhile longer.”??? What kind of treasonous talk is that? You've got the story half written already. It's time to pull the chocks out from in front of the wheels and let that baby take off, not turn off the engines.

 

[Imaginator]

I am interested in writing a great deal, but its such a mystery to me how one does it correctly. I seem to only know self styled rambling...and I knew no other way to present this.

It is interesting to me to think of story possibilities for this...I am very open to anyone wanting to pursue that.

Let me say first that I've been a bit of a fan of your other postings. I remember you mentioning once that you were currently on a "journey." Well, I don't know where that journey is taking you, but it seems to be taking you somewhere totally unexpected, as all good journeys should. I think writing is a mystery, as well as a journey in itself, to every one who takes up pen and paper, or keyboard and word processor, and starts pouring forth their thoughts and feelings, or their observations about life and people, not know exactly where it's all leading them to but perhaps finding out through the process of developing it into a story.

I see your piece as having much potentiality in it. One idea I might throw out is to use this "scene" as the central point of a possible story, then build around it a plot. Then, think of the character of the woman, give her a life of some sort, develop a sort of "biography" of her in your mind. Perhaps that may give you some ideas of what might have occurred before the "orgasm" scene to bring her to that point in her life, a crucial point where she makes a major discovery about herself. Perhaps even begin the story by imagining her not knowing or having experienced any of the things she speaks about during the orgasm, then having her experience those things and letting them form a bridge to the orgasmic climax of self-discovery.

And don't worry about not getting it right the first time you put it down. Write some, then read it, then edit or re-write it, then re-read what you've wrote, etc. After all, you don't have to post it until you're ready to. Until then, you can change it as much as you want. One method I try is, don't write anything down until you've thoroughly worked it out in your mind. You can make written notes, if you need to. This way, the story stays fluid and is easier to change.

As far as posting it, wait until you've gotten it written in its final form, then simply use the "Submit a Story" link on the main page and follow the directions. If you need someone to bounce ideas off of, just drop me an email. bicca@centurytel.net

Who knows, perhaps your real journey has just begun.

 

[SailorC272002]

I have never posted any of my work here, and am not certain this is where to post this. I hang out in APF and the General Board, so the rest of this site is something I am quite unfamiliar with. I hope this is the correct place to post this???
I posted this in my pic thread last night, as those in there are my close friends and I knew that they could appreciate it most. But it seems others have as well, so I thought I would share it here, as well.
I am interested in writing, though that was not really the intent of this...whatever "this" is. I'm not sure what to call it...essay, short story? OK, here it is....as it appeared in my thread:

Good evening all....

I chose to place this here because most of you in my thread are close to me and know my story, and I feel you will appreciate most, the meaning this has for me.

My Orgasm.

I sat here watching "the" movie again, after having just viewed another made for me by my closest and most special friend. I went back to my friends movies, and then to his pics. There is nothing on earth like the beauty of him. Between the two of you, the images swirl around in my head, burning so deeply into my fantasies...and I am truly swept away. In the back of my mind, rising up into these images...is you. You with all your promise....you, aching so to love me, you...the man burning in my heart. I am caught up in emotion, frustration, I am so intensely "hot" and, as if in a dream....everything inside changes in an instant.......

I find myself on my bed, nude other than a little black tank top. I have my body pillow up under my hips, and another behind it, lifting my hips up, and bringing them in closer to me. I have both vibrators...the bullet and the G~Spot. Absently, my palms are so very lightly grazing across the tips of my hardened nipples, and my mind drifts. I realize in that moment that it is nice to just flow...to not think about anything at all....to just allow myself to feel. Usually I have to chase around these images inside and try to focus on just one but it always so elusive to me. I end up so frustrated, my body aching, my mind screwing everything all together, and taking over. In those moments, if I don't just give up, I end up remembering that one image that, though it actually happened in my life, it has become even more in my mind, it has become a fantasy. It always gets me, simply from the innocence of it, the thought of it sends waves of pure passion all throughout me. Not today.....today I am overwhelmed emotionally. So much passion and sweetness and desire is being felt from each of you, from what each of you have given to me, but in THIS moment, there is no frustration of being taken to the edge of this "online" world and being left hanging there. In this world today, I give into you....to it.

Again, I go back to my friends pics. I can feel the tingling and warmth beginning to spread from my heart, into my essence. He has the most beautiful cock and most sculpted body my eyes have ever had the pleasure of feasting on, and each and every time I see him, I melt in moments. Because I need that connection of making love, my heart inserts you before me, lying on your side at the foot of my bed, arm bent, propping your head in your hand. You are in awe of me, and sensing my shyness, you close your eyes briefly. We both know it will only be a moment before you can no longer take it......and have to return your entire being to me. I will take you without ever touching you....

I begin to slide my hand so softly, almost as if in a whisper, across my body......my stomach, then up to my breasts, neck, going slowly upwards from the hollow up to my chin, then to my lips. I place my fingers against my tongue, moisten them, and slowly follow the trail back to my breasts. The shirt is in the way, as I do not usually stroke my breasts.....but now I am ripping it from my body. The fingers of my right hand begin to mercilessly stroke, taunt and tease the nipple of my left breast. I take it into my hand and lift it up to me and bring my mouth down to it. I part my lips, my tongue slides out, and just to the tip of my nipple, and begins to swirl across the top of it, in little circles......beginning to circle so much more eagerly, frantically. I sense your presence now, you are invading me but instead of thinking about it.....I simply allow it, and feel even more sensual. My fingers begin to slide further down to my thighs, and my legs begin to part. I dance across my inner thigh with only my fingernails, and just shiver....allowing it to rush over me. My whole body begins to tingle. I slide further down onto the bed, feeling languid and as though I am wrapped up in warm flowing waves of water....my fingers begin to stroke the lips of my kitty, up and down.....my lips are sooo sensitive and this catches my breath and stuns me. My middle finger slides in just a little, gathering the moistness there, and then back out, up and down over my lips, spreading the glistening mositure all over. I can hardly contain the need to experience me......my fingers slide in, two this time, and I dip into the folds and go so much further until my fingers are saturated in the juices I created, and bring them to my lips. Ohhhh..........this taste I crave......this really gets to me...this moves me and makes me feel so very sensual and erotic.....and now I need you.....I need you to the point I feel like screaming out for you to "take me, take me NOW...!" As my fingers begin to stroke around my lips and thighs again, my other hand begins to cup and knead my left breast...then to my right.....I need another hand.....!.......and my hips begin to move up and down, rolling.......seeking.....I need so much.....I need more.....I look back at his picture, oh dear God.....ohhhhhh......and then the G~Spot Vibrator is in my hands, and turning it on, I slide it in....Oh God .....Oh godddd.....this is it, this is what I need.....I need to be filled up inside....I need you in me, stroking me, in and out, in and out.....and in my mind, you are. I can feel you sliding against the silkiness of my flesh, I can feel the the way I pull you in, seeking you more and more, there can never be enough of you. I need you deeper and deeper, filling me up, I need you thrusting into me so hard and intense.....the whimpering, pleading moans erupt, and then you are somewhere in the background, fading.....yet, "as one with me" in this moment. Your hardness has begun to throb inside me, hitting the very core of me and as this consumes me....I feel I am on fire, every part of me feels like a raging fire, tingling, spreading, building and building...I can't touch myself enough, or quickly enough. I plunge the vibrator in and hold it right in that most mysterious, magical place and I roll it around in circles over the most intense pleasure I have ever known..... I am moaning and grinding my hips....they begin to rise up off the pillows, my legs close instinctively, grasping the vibrator so tightly and plunging it further in, and back out....in and out and up, so perfectly against that place....oohhhhhhhhhhhhh, pleeeease.......pleeeease....unhhhhhh.....unnnnuhnnnnnnnnn, I can't take it!!!....I am shivering, trembling...screaming.......ohhhhhhhhunhhhhhhh!!!ohhohhhhhhhhh.....my lips are quivering, I am flowing so much that I can hear the juices gurgle as the vibrator plunges so deeply......they suddenly begin to gush out all around it, sliding down my lips.....ohhhhhhhgooddddddddddddunnnnhhhhhhhhhhhhhh..........!!!!!!!!!!!!

unhhhhh.....ohhhhhhh..........ohh.....ohhgoddd........yes.....yes, it did......I am just reeling.....this happened???...........ohhhhhhhhhhhhgod, ohgodthankyou.........

my breathing begins to calm, my body is like a river flowing, awash in such sweet emotion, I feel as though I will never be able to move another muscle again, ever. I cannot open my eyes....I can only lie there.....absorbing....accepting.....breathing.



Moments later the feelings all hit me....the shock, the need to once again scream my head off to someone...anyone...."I did it!!!" I want to tell someone so badly that god, yes...I DID IT....but there is no one to tell. The tears form, and begin to fall. I lie there wrapping my arms around myself, rocking back and forth, just weeping. I finally did it.......I finally did it.....





Me



Back in a bit.

Great post!
Now if I could only finish reading it.

 

[intrigued]

LOL...I forgot this was here!

I want to thank each of you for your replies...wow! I am really suprised to receive a response period, much less THIS. Just know I sincerely thank you.

DannyBoyUK, herpesface and Elduderino...whew...I believe I am blushing. Thank you, I am glad you enjoyed it.

Imaginator....How do I say this? I am deeply touched that you put all this thought into this for me, thank you so much. I will try this, but it will be hard for me to separate myself from trhe "woman", as the woman is me. (And yes, my journey has begun, and I am on my way. ) I never intended this to be anything more than just a sharing of the experience with my friends, and it was received so well that I thought, what the heck...I will share it a bit more, because mostly, I want anyone on a journey into themselves and their sexuality to see the beauty that can be found in those discoveries. To think that it has potential for a real story has my heart singing....

Thank you so very much.

I've got your addy, I just may need to use it.


margo_x_x...Oh, my! Yes! Thank you, wow!!
I think I am going to give this a try......

Sailor, my friend...you are a joy.