my nasty story

[sexyspiders]

i recon iv just submitted one of the most controversial stories on the site.

wat can i say, i wanted to see wat reactions i would get. so far iv got 5pcs, one extreme to other, people either love it or hate it, its great fun!!!

personally i dont like the theme, but thats why i wrote it, as a challenge for myself, to lure people in and then slap them on the face and make them feel guilty.

trust me, this is not a stroke story, but if u want a glimpse of my warped mind, check out this link,

http://www.literotica.com/stories/showstory.php?id=152298

spiders >( ' . ' )<

 

[MLyons]

personally i dont like the theme, but thats why i wrote it, as a challenge for myself, to lure people in and then slap them on the face and make them feel guilty.

Guilty about what, exactly?

 

[sexyspiders]

ok, guilty was the wrong word. i just wanted people to think about the other side of things. im not saying theres anything wrong with havin fantasies, they are fun and harmless, but i wanted my readers to think.

i dont think its too much to ask. iv had some excellent feedback and this story has received more votes than my others, plus loads more feedback via email.

let me kno what u think. comments so far range from
" Just a bad story all around"
to
" this was a very strong story"

think about ur reactionsm figure urself out, and let me kno!

 

[Bhob]

My Nasty Story

I kind of liked it, but I felt like it was incomplete. I was a little confused as to where the story was supposed to be leading me, and it seemed to take me only partway to wherever that was. I got the feeling that it was trying to tell me why this girl chose lesbianism or why she hates her Dad or both, but it didn't really drive home either point. It seemed to be more of a straight-line report of an event.

I don't mean to sound harsh. I just wish it had been longer and more in-depth, so I could like, or at least understand, one or both characters.

 

[dr_mabeuse]

After your big build-up, I was expecting something special, but this is just the same old tired daddy/daughter incest bit, and pretty poorly written if you ask me. What's so controversial about that? I mean, it's not like Lit isn't already just bulging with this sort of stuff.

---dr.M.

 

[mannydcamp]

ditto

Totally agree with the Dr guy!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

 

[Lliandrin22]

It started out ok then quickly deteriorated. From what the father said and the way he acted at first I thought that there would be a long making love type sex that could have ended harshly. I think that the way you wrote the beginning clashed a lot with the end. I can see the father taking his time, building up to great loving sex and once he entered her maybe losing himself in his pain and anger and fucking her silly. Or if the father had stayed angry all the way through and did it just to hurt and demean her that would have made more sense.
~Lliandrin

 

[sexyspiders]

thanks for all ur feedback.

all i can say is...i had an idea and i tried it out....
i ll try sticking to my usual genre from now on.

spiders >( ' . ' )<

 

[americandemon]

Nasty story???

I don't know why you think it's sooooo nasty? It's just another story. I don't really read any stories in here. Well, unless the writer asks me to read it. Once in a great while I'll get a pm from a writer asking me to check out their story. But it's been a while and I don't come in here too often.
So, I had to see your "Nasty" story after making it sound soooo bad. And I have to say IT WAS BAD! I wasn't impressed with it at all. I was not shocked or aroused. Incest isn't my bag anyway. But still it didn't make me FEEL anything. I am no writter and have said this from day one since my first poem and story were posted. So, my feedback shouldn't be taken to heart. You were looking for feedback in here....so I'm sorry I couldn't be nicer. I can say this though...... I did see a few glimmers of hope in your writting. Keep trying and I think you'll nail one right on!

Good Luck
Demon